Nice chapter. It's nice to see Gordon slowly befriending others.

The most difficult path often has the best rewards I suppose

i like how he isn't a naive idiot who forgives inexcusable things right away like many other fics and holds a justifiable grudge

It's nice to see that Celestia and the girls start to open up a little toward Gordon. That, along with some of the other ponies in Ponyville. Great chapter! Looking forward for more to come.

Love how it's realistic in that he holds a justifiable grudge and wariness toward those that assaulted him. Not that it can't be overcome in time, also making for juicy, story fuel drama, but it also makes him far more 'human'. I've always found it interesting how the truely most dangerous type of creature is always the 'prey' species. A predator might threaten more often, but rarely actually attacks something new, they tend to want to know what it IS before deciding what to do, unless it feels its young is in danger or you startle it, which usually results in a swipe or two mostly as a way to say 'back off.' Prey species however, are the far more dangerous and violent. They immediately view anything new or unusual as a threat and either flee, or try to kill it. For example in Africa, a placed filled with super predators, the most kills every year come from Hippo's. Prey's first reaction isn't curiousity about something new, it either stays far away out of fear, or tries to destroy whatever it is.
With that in mind, it makes me wonder how a fic would go about a human showing up in the Gryphon kingdom. As a predatory species, they would be a bit defensive yes, but no doubt more curious and understanding of a new predatory species like humans. More instinctive understanding of how a human would think and behave since both are predators.

Someone turned their up-vote into a down-vote.

Still firmly hugging him she replied, "Don't you dare anypony though."

I think you forgot a word here.

7068482 If you write it I will read it!

I like how he said, "Is this you saying this or are you just following your Princesses lead?" That was an awesome comeback. I like how he still holds an anger towards the ones that did him wrong, it's very realistic and I like that about this chapter. A character that can hold a grudge but also find forgiveness over time is a good character to read about. I hope for many more good chapters to come!

I've never seen so many plugs for a fan fic!

7068729 I deliberately left the word out deliberately to see if anyone would notice. You did. Luna would be proud.

I'm not sure Gordan should be so quick to forgive Celestia ... Cuz I sure as hell don't believe her 2bit apology ... Leads me to believe she was just doing it to save face in front of her subjects ... Considering she most likely will be keeping a close eye on him from the shadows ...
Speaking of shadows ... Where is Discord ?

Connor shook his head in disbelief,

Who's Connor?

"We humans do have dark periods of history. We know our past, even the bits we're ashamed of, but chaos cannot exist without harmony."

Was I the only one that expected Discord to show up at this point?

*Looks at Author's Note*
Self-promotion much?

I look forward to see Gordon's day at Sweet Apple Acres.

7068730 I really wish I could, but I can't write to save my soul. I've tried in the past and it was terrible. I'm good with ideas, but apparently the route from brain to fingers is broken in me. :(

7069736 I can somewhat relate to this....

7069736 Try anyway darn you! I wish to read your soul!

Also, Practice makes better... Not always perfect but better....

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*Looks at Author's Note*

Self-promotion much?

I'm going to put them every five chapters in each story now instead of every chapter.

Sorry I didn't comment before now. The first time I read the chapter I think I sped through it a bit so I decided to come back later. Now that I've read it a second time I think it's a bit better than I previously thought. Some things I think need to be improved are some of the ponies' reactions to things happening, I think some of them need to be tweaked a little bit. I think there should also be a bit more details in a few areas, a few spell checks and I also felt like maybe a little too much happened in this chapter too soon. But that could also simply be the result of it being a Pinkie Pie party. I do like the chapter a lot some of the interactions interested me like I didn't see Rainbow Dash hugging Gordon anytime soon, I think I liked that. Good chapter.

I like the revisions made to this chapta
It's moar deep .... Like my pizza

this is really good, he kind of forgave them a little to easily but hey that's just me. probably for the best ya know but still i'm loving it so far and keep up the good work

A really good story with a nice plot. I'm hoping new chapters will be up soon, so I'll be able to enjoy it more. And you should not rush dialogues, because they're going a bit too fast.
I'm out. Piece!

7125973 Thanks for the fave and feedback. The next chapter shouldn't be too long but things keep coming up that require my attention.

7186312 Thanks for the feedback. I'll look over the first chapter and see if I can iron a few things out.

not bad

Not bad. Like other commenters, I'm glad you didn't have him completely forgive everyone automatically. This is shaping up to be a decent fic, though there is still room for improvement (when is there not, after all). For example;

"She slapped me after I told her that ponies broke into my home, assaulted me unprovoked and that they should be punished."

Who is 'she'? Yes, we know 'she' is Celestia, but Bonbon doesn't. In fact, if you look at this conversation from her perspective, it sounds like 'she' is Rarity.

This is one of the easiest mistakes to make, forgetting who knows, witnessed, or experienced what. You even see this is major Hollywood productions and major network TV shows, where characters know something they have no way of knowing. You just need to keep an eye out. Try keeping a continuity journal for each character. It helps me when I have several characters in a story.

"Oh let's see. We completely eradicated a horrendous disease called smallpox, we put man of the moon five times, we've sent unmanned probes out of our solar system altogether, we've split the atom, we built the pyramids at a time when machines didn't exist, Beethoven's Fifth Symphony, the International Space Station and many more. I have a small library in my house full of books on humanity. Some of it is very dark and some of it is very bright."

Out of everything here, these are two that he probably shouldn't have mentioned, given the context of said 'accomplishments'.

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You're probably right on the atom, but the pyramids being built by brutal slave labor is a myth. We've found records and remains of at least one work camp associated with the Great Pyramid that showed the laborers worked under decent conditions and were paid a reasonable wage for the time.

Twilight didn't exactly like him and he had reason to distrust her, but if he could get in her good books it would help tremendously.

Aaaaah. The burn, it puns... Using his library to get in her good books.

"How the bloody hell did you know when my birthday is?"
"it was on your calendar!"

So uh this may be a heavily disliked comment but like I'm having a bit hard time to like relate to the character. He seems just a bit too like aggressive against these ponies and little less understanding and I know that they've been taught don't judge a book by its cover and like boo stereotypes but to my understanding (and let's not forget I've only read 2 chapters) the humans they've met were super religious and monstrous bastards who raped, killed, and pillaged and I thought he heard all this so shouldn't he be a little more understanding? Not only that but with the way the ponies act towards him I.e. bon bon's disbelief he was all in your face about it I mean we are talking about PRINCESS CELESTIA here she's like a GODDESS to these people (of course, again, I could be reading something wrong I do tend to skim or he just doesn't understand) Not saying that your writing is bad or you should change anything it's just like a little more for the future and other than that youre fine

What happened to the aggressiveness? What happened to the open distrust? What happened to the ponies fearing him? What happened to the ponies that should be staring at him wrong?.

Seriously, what happened to them? One moment they where like "HYOO-MEAAANNN" then suddenly, they where all like "yeah, I don't trust you (won't publicly show it) but you're cool".

More forgiveness garbage, not doing that.

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 I'm having a bit hard time to like relate to the character. He seems just a bit too like aggressive against these ponies and little less understanding

If I found myself in similar situation as Gordon I would be a lot more aggressive and less understanding. Alone and scared, alien world and beings, attacked physically and constantly having your side of the point disregarded as a lie, possible lost the only family you have forever. Also humans still are super religious and monstrous bastards who, rape, kill and pillage but maybe not as much as before.

Not only that but with the way the ponies act towards him I.e. bon bon's disbelief he was all in your face about it I mean we are talking about PRINCESS CELESTIA here she's like a GODDESS to these people

I am not sure if we are reading the same story or I just don't understand what you mean by this or it was edited out.

Also for the Author about the story itself.

Oh let's see. We completely eradicated a horrendous disease called smallpox, we put man of the moon five times, we've sent unmanned probes out of our solar system altogether, we've split the atom, we built the pyramids at a time when machines didn't exist, Beethoven's Fifth Symphony, the International Space Station and many more.

Gordon is making a lot of assumptions ponies know what any of those accomplishments mean or are. Ok, eradicating a disease is self-explanatory, and possibly going to the moon they can understand. But Beethoven's Fifth Symphony? That tells them nothing other than it is a symphony and it is supposedly great but they have only Gordon's word for it, which at this point means very little or nothing.
Do they know what a atom is, if so have they split it, with or without magic and know what it means to do so?
Do they have any idea how large a solar system is or the scale of things in the universe in general? Because not many real people actually do.
Also it would seem only Luna and Celestia are the only ones who know humans don't have magic, Gordon telling Luna and Celestia possibly from the previous humans, giving them some understanding hard it would be to do any of these things without it.

I would've asked Sunbutt how she was going to "accept responsibility."

this story is good but its a little rushed could use a little more detail and more intraction with the main 6 and the others that were in this but over all good

Nope, not going down that line.

Besides the sudden 180 in attitude in accepting Gordon and a bit rushed, this is good.
Just slow it down a bit.

Por ahora interesante pero baja el ritmo

This was a sweet chapter I'm happy he's giving them a second chance including Celestia.

As I read I must offer this one complaint, .. . Learn to pace your story , so much at once with little detail makes it seem rushed and honestly a bit of a hassle to read. Other then that I truly enjoy this story

"I know. Your birthday is on the 26th March. This is your 'Welcome to Ponyville Party."

How
That's my birthday
Give it back