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FelineFluff


Just remember, a cactus isn't a vegetable.

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Being concieted, self centered, and living in a home filled with cats can be hard for your romantic life. Once Feline Fluff, a cute pegasus mare, decides that she is good enough for anypony, she finds out the hard way that she isn't as great as she wants to believe she is.
She thinks she's in love, falls too hard into a relationship based on a secret. She cheats, and cheats again. How will this mare ever learn how to deal with a stallion?

This story tells a good life moral at the same time as being humorous, and romantic.
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This story is co-written with Lightning Crystal.

Edited by: sunbuttsparkle, and Zyrah
Feline Fluff, Spellbound Amour, and Lightning Crystal are all OC's. Rights go to their respective owners.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 34 )

nice story! glad I could edit it, and looking forward to more chapters! :twilightsmile:

THE ULTIMATE SHIP FINALLY HAS A FANFIC!!!






















ALL OF THE HAPPY EMOTICONS! :ajsmug: :coolphoto: :derpyderp1: :derpytongue2: :derpyderp2: :heart: :pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiesmile: :rainbowdetermined2: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowlaugh: :raritystarry: :raritywink: :scootangel: :twilightsheepish: :twilightsmile: :twistnerd: :yay: :trollestia: :moustache: :eeyup:

7057914 IKR!!:yay: just wait for the next two chapters! You will see this ship is based on a secret, and it isn't meant to be. *fake tears*:rainbowlaugh:

Who does Spellbound Amour belong to?

7057950 you won't see him till the second chapter. But he belongs to this fellow- https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Sheogorath+The+Mad+God

7057952 Double Diamond x Feline Fluff. Its a popular ship with my followers :)

Playing with dolls... so that's what the kids are calling it these days. :trollestia:
Nice start Fluffy, looking forward to seeing what happens next, it was quite the fun little read.

As far as criticism goes, I feel your opening paragraph could use some work. It feel a little too rushed for what it's attempting to do. I think you could lengthen it by a sentence or so, and since you are going for a more comical approach I would attempt tossing in some Douglas Adams style hyperbole into the mix. I don't think you'll have time to fully invest your reader base into Feline Fluff the character right away, so you need to lure them in by making her quirks eye catching and comical, using brevity to your advantage to do so. I'm probably not the right person to tell you how to do all this effectively, but I figured you'd at least want some feedback, so yeah.

You have me hooked, I don't see much Double Diamond stories, but I do like yours. Can't wait to read the rest.

I ship Double Diamond with Night Glider, but I will still be tracking this, nonetheless. You have me intrigued. :duck:

7058739 no, they were quite literrally playing with dolls:ajsmug:

Thank you for the feedback, and every word will help me write for the future.:pinkiehappy:

7059324 thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed:twilightsmile:

7059589 nice ship!:pinkiehappy: Luckily this relationship won't be lasting very long hehehe spoiler:pinkiecrazy:

7060540

Yep! :pinkiehappy:

And gosh... I feel pretty bad for Feline considering that... :fluttershyouch:

Well, Diamond is faking his love for her, so I don't think there would be much of a way for the "relationship" to last. :trixieshiftright:

7060637 So true. Its hard for a relationship to last in this situation.:rainbowlaugh:

Emerald? did i read right?

Oh wow, I didn't get a chance to help with this one, Im sorry I couldn't find my laptop so I was stuck on this tablet

Yandere?
No...
Maybe.
Nah.
Definitely not...
Maybe?


Is it weird that I find the fact that our heroin flirting with other guy's slightly adorable?

7082462 yes you did. Sorry I didn't ask first, I just thought this would be the perfect chance for you to hook up with Feline's ex:rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:

7083229 its totally fine! :twilightsmile: you can help with the next chapter, though?:scootangel:

7083244 yandere?:rainbowlaugh:

No, I find it adorable too:derpytongue2:

7085438 you sneaky little fluffy!! It's so crazy I love it!! it's so slimy and disgusting, I LOVE IT!!

7085473 OMG yay! I'm so glad you're not mad:rainbowkiss: OMG Drama Llamas reference:pinkiehappy::heart:

The doll part killed me, Feline :rainbowlaugh:. I laughed the majority of it, but I demand more cats :yay:

7145977 ha-ha thanks! There will be more:pinkiehappy:

And now all of your followers know how stupid I am:pinkiecrazy:

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