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This story is a sequel to Dear Princess Celestia
It has been three months and fourteen days of silence from Princess Celestia. Twilight has suffered from insomnia, anxiety, depression, and malnutrition. Spike and her friends have tried everything they could think of to get her to spend time with them or take a break outside. Nothing has worked and just when everything seems hopeless, a letter arrives. A letter from Princess Celestia, though something seems a bit off.
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Haven't read it yet, but you can and probably should mark this as an explicit sequel, and it will appear as a link above your description.
...that letter was not written by Celestia.
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Thank you for the heads up, I'm still new to actually writing anything with a sequel and I tend to skip over most of the stuff when posting.
7032774 Something tells me Chryssie is targeting Celestia now...either that or Celly has been Discorded.
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That would add the drama....
I'm calling it now spike wrote the letter, it just seems like something he would do
especially considering what he said at the end of Dear Princess Celestia
this is one great storyboth heart breaking and heart warming! well done! each chapter is well worth the wait!!
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Thank you for the compliment. I try to entertain as much as I can with each story and while I know most people won't like them, I appreciate every reader.
So, this is an Alternate Universe? And I was about to ask what was the timeframe for this story?
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Yea, I realized with this chapter that if the story was to continue it would need to be a different take from the show so that would mean making it an alternate dimension. Of course, there are also stories that take place within the same universe but, that would mean actually keeping track of every single thing that happened in the show itself. Too much work when you can just make it a different world altogether.
hope twilight gets someanswers with the help of friends and spike. well done on this fine story of yours!
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it so far. I'm glad I decided to continue it.
What sorta doubts?
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It did leave it vague, so I went ahead and edited the last part. Thanks for pointing it out and thank you for reading.
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Oh. How long has Twilight been in Ponyville again?
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Well, the original story was set for just three months, but with this one I had to make a slight change and add about a two weeks between the time Twilight started to isolate herself and the Nightmare Moon event.
7062433 So, Twilight just moved to Ponyville a few months ago? If that is the case, I can see why Applejack would think that.
another amazing chapter!twilight is trying so hard ! hear heart is the right place, but her self isolation is making it so hard to come out her shell! great job well done!!
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Thank you for the praise. It certainly isn't every day I get it, hope I can keep you entertained.
man i feel for twilight! i sure hope her friends really do see how badly this is effecting herand do what ever they can to help!
that was so heartbreaking and beautiful at the same time!!you told it so eloquently you are a fine writer and story teller!!
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Thanks for the praise and for reading the story so far. I tried to come up with something meaningful and touching that Big Mac would say even if he rarely speaks. He really does portray a kind of deep, strong, and proud kind of demeanor whenever I think of him.
"Wow, you hatched Spike when you were my age?! That must have been a great day!"
"Yeah! I got my cutie mark and became the student of the Princess. Those were great things that happened that day."
"... What about hatching a person who's your permanent companion?"
"Oh. I guess that happened too."
Am I reading into this too much, though? Maybe this is not her taking Spike's hatching for granted and putting that the other stuff in her life is more important than him, and just how the conversation turns out... but given Twilight's hyperfocus on the Princess, I think it'd be consistent with Twilight to subtly be like "oh yeah! Spike hatching was important because he's just something that came with being the Princesses student and being part of me fulfilling my dreams, not like... a good thing on his own."
And, honestly, at this point I am having a hard time sympathizing with the Apples. Are they so sensitive they won't share an old tragedy with a supposedly close friend? And at this point, basically Twilight wanting anything other than to leave them alone will be characterized as "this is more about your obsession with the princess than me, isn't it?"
And even their reasons are a little cagey. They're not straight up saying "You can't talk about this it's too sensitive" and instead they're saying "if you talk about this it has to be for the right reasons, but we will basically tell you what your reasons are and not work to help figure it out."
I do know the solution to this lies outside of a flat idea that Twilight is doing it for "good" or "bad" reasons and telling her that they're wrong... If Twilight really is doing it for bad reasons, she won't be figuring that out on her own.
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Wowee, that is certainly a critique. Well, to be honest, my train of thought for Twilight is more focusing on being the student instead of the other events that happened during the exam. I was slightly rushing the chapter though as I wanted to have something out after so long so that might also play a part into ignoring it. As for the Apples, it's more towards the fact of the mother that they avoid talking about since that was the original spark of the conflict. I have no doubt in my mind that the father is just as important, but with the way I want the story to develop I want the focus to be more on the events regarding the mother. Also, you're right on the whole "good" or "bad" point regarding Twilight. I'm putting the thoughts there since her character overthinks everything and those kinds of thoughts wouldn't be so strange. The only problem is that with racing thoughts come even more racing thoughts. So the solution is something that might be there in her mind, but that doesn't mean she'll be able to find it on her own.
Let me know if I missed anything, or if I didn't quite explain anything at all. I'm trying to explain it without spoiling a lot. Writing is indeed a lot harder than I originally thought. That's a good thing though as I'm really loving it the more I do it.
Well, no surprise that AJ's parents are a sore spot for her. Twilight really needs to learn when to stop asking questions.
man twilight is walking a razor edge!she does not know when to pull back!i guestshe is going to learn the hard way!fantastic chapter! showing twilights emotions like you are , really makes me feel for her! outstanding writing! well done!
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Seems like it's a pretty good bet for me reading too far into the Spike/Twilight thing, yeah.
I even went back and reread the prequel and while she's obviously obsessed with the Princesses reaction and it's hurting her relationship with Spike, it's not the kind of thing that's implying that she's taking Spike for granted.
Definitely me reading too far into it.
7160075 Well, I have no sympathy for Twilight. Three months. She neglected her friends for three months. If she was so worried about not hearing from Celestia, she should've got on the train to Canterlot and see the princess herself. Her friends won't say what she put them through, but their family will,,,and they won't be gentle. I hope Twilight get ripped a new one while with each and every one of her friends...just like Big Mac just did.
Twilight is going to lose a friend and get kicked off the farm, isn't she? She going to be stupid, isn't she? She was warned twice and she won't be warned a third. I am actually scared of reading the next chapter.
oh twilight ireally hope that you start realjseing the consequences of your actions! becuse if you dont the results will bedevestaing to your friendships! another fine chapter!
Damnit!! This is what I didn't want to see, but I knew it was going to happen. You just lost one friend Twilight. Curiosity killed your friendship. Now, Big Mac kicks you off the farm. And don't be surprised if you lose the trust of ALL your friends. And you have only been in Ponyville for about four months? Three of which in isolation? It's time for you to move back to Canterlot and stay a hermit, You have A LOT to learn about making friends and KEEPING them. Good luck explaining to Celestia that the Elements of Harmony can no longer work because you couldn't take a hint.
well twilight you really blew your chances with apple jack! you keep going like this you will lose every pony that means anything to you! except for fluttershy her compassion and kindness knows no bounds! you need her twilight! once again a short butbrilliantlywritten chapter!
If I'm thinking this correctly, Twilight sent more time in isolation in that library, than actually having friends. To Twilight if there is a problem that needs to be solved. Unfortunately, no one bothered to teach Twilight about boundaries or how to let something go. And now, this will be a lesson learned the hard way and may cost her (as well as Equestria) dearly.
what a hard hitting chapter! for having parents twilight is sure in the dark about how they can effect their childs emotions if they are not a part of their lives! and twilight is suppose to be smart! hope fully there is some spark that clicks in her head and she starts learning! great story!!
So, the story has been told. Now, what does Twilight do with that information? How does she intend to help AJ, and possibly Apple Bloom? Is there anything she can do? Will she lose a friend because of her curiosity? So many questions. I will gladly wait for the answers.
This is almost word for word what I read from Viking ZX's blog... was he just repeating something from a video? Or possibly just some well-known knowledge?
Not that I'd fault him for either, but inquiring minds want to know!
Ugh. Overall I can't agree with Mac's assessment of Twilight doing this because she's just so selfish and sees her friend as a project.
... She wants to do it to prove that she truly does care for her friend, after she was such a terrible friend for so long.
It's technically selfish but... Mac has it rather wrong.
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There are two that I got the quote from, granted I remembered it pretty differently as I only saw them both once.
These two writers have great advice and the words (even if I remember them differently) really affected me to keep writing sans inspiration.
I somewhat see what you meant about Mac's assessment, but you have to realize that in this story he doesn't know Twilight at all. Only sees her as a friend of A.J and a reason why his sister has been feeling shitty for a good while. If you have siblings just think of someone doing things that made them miserable despite their intentions or your warnings. As a brother myself, I've had several instances where such things practically happened with my sister. While violence is never really much of an answer, the need to protect those closest to you makes it seem like the right choice.
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Which is why I, and Mac himself, think that AJ's really gonna rip him a new one once she calms down and finds out that he did to Twilight.
A good friend tries to not do things to upset you, or get you angry at them.
A great friend will do things to piss you off just because they care (or just because they can like AJ/Rainbow does). AJ clearly never healed right after what happen. The wound is festering and soon would turn to Gangrene.
Twilight wanted to know what happen so she can help.
Big Mac just wants everyone to act like nothing is wrong.
Twilight has officially pissed me off.
k out of Ponyville and never come back. At least, Celestia teaches Twilight when to just let things drop and that not everything can be solved like a problem on a test.
ole at the moment. I'll come back when she f
king learn how to respect the feelings of other ponies. In case you can't tell, I hate Twilight so much right now. I am so glad Big Mac smacked her across the room and tossed her the hell outta Sweet Apple Acres. Part of me hopes that the rest of her friends find out about this and alienate her.
NOW Twilight needs to get the f
If not, I'm done. Twilight is too much of an a
She hasn't been in Ponyville for half a year and she needs to leave.
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Well if my story actually incites such feelings then I'm glad. It's great to know there are people that are so into the story that they start to hate or love certain characters. I'm working on the next chapter and hope to finish it relatively soon. Please look forward to it.
I'm still pissed at Twilight, but she will hopefully learn from this. She better just hope that her other friends are willing to give her a chance after what happened to Applejack.
I'm still waiting to find out if that was the real Celestia.
if herstudent is applebloom this might just work. and i still think big mac should apologies to twilight you just do not hit a mare! that is just wrong when you are way bigger! great story,great chapter!
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Well, she does have the rest of the girls to spend a week with, and considering how the week with Applejack is going I'm wondering how it'll go with them and everything affects those weeks. As for Celestia, who knows?
At this point I think Celestia just doesn't care...
Doesn't Applejack know that Big Mac slapped Twilight though?
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What makes you say that?
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She does, and she responded to him doing that. Anymore would be spoiling it.
7334142 I think at this point the question is what doesn't...
what apowerful and beautiful chapter! i really hope twilight carries over what she just learned to help her with the other girls! great story!