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for a first clop chapter this is good.
I am impressed good job.
7024345 This is far from the first time I have written such, oh not by a long shot. It is just the first I have published here
7024380 aww ok. I am kind of hoping you keep this thread going as FIE is vary rare and this one is done right.
piece.
me
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This keeps going and it will be a double wedding or one BIG herd.
Will you be going back through the prequel and adding the implied adult scenes to here or will it just be from chapter 77 and later?
7024952 Still pondering that. I may go back and redo the scenes that got Penny pregnant, will be some shape-changing shenanigans in there
had their marefriend foalnapped - had their parents foalnapped
a wonder, Jen was - a wonder Jen was
the two the dead-weight - the two, the dead-weight
tell my my pretty - tell me my pretty
sped up, his hips - sped up. His hips
*****
Excellent chapter, getting to see Luna happy considering what is happening in Mr. Silver's story is a nice change of pace. The extra addition to the story was nice to read and quite passionate as well. I hope we get to learn about Jen and Sablee in the future, which will make their moments of passion even more satisfying to read about.
I apologize, this is going to be a quote-filled comment, but there were just so many things going on that drew a positive reaction while reading.
Them?! Congratulations! Stick is much more potent than anyone expected.
Given what follows, it feels fair to say that this particular hope has been dashed, and quite thoroughly too.
Ah, they're both kind of on the rebound. Very serendipitous for Sablee.
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I'm not saying to redo the scenes per se but rather add the clop scenes that are implied. I'm sure I'm not the only who would appreciate it if you did go back and add them, and not just Penny getting pregnant.
7025447 There, and yeah that was the plan, pretty much add the fun where the teen rating caused me to 'fade to black'.
7025282 All typos clopped until they can't clop no more. "I can feel them." In this case the 'them' is used in place of knowing what gender the foal is.
Also, it never ceases to astound me how much porn I read/view is created by women. I used to subscribe to a comic-porn thing called Slipshine, and a huge majority (of the ones I liked to read) were done by females. And I am not even going to get into actual book-porn, like the Anita Blake series, hot dang that girl gets around.
And yes, part of this was showing that the connection between them was a two-way thing. Neither took advantage of the other, it was just two 'ponies' enjoying themselves.
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Years and years ago, some of the most intensely passionate Ranma 1/2 'lemon' fanfics, at least to my teenage at the time opinion, were written by the few female fans on the internet at the time. One of my favorites was also from Australia, coincidentally. I wonder whatever happened to Caroline Seawright a.k.a. Kunoichi. Ah...memories.
7025562 Well, now here is something funny. Back in the day of Ranma 1/2, did you ever get the fansub vids, in about 320x240 res, by Anime Madness?
Nice!
and a foal is conceived a vary loving addition to a good story.
I prefer having a clop as a side story from the mane as this way it does not distract from the mane story.
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I had the good fortune to be able to attend a local Fansub group called No-Name Anime that held regular showings of Ranma and other series or movies on a regular basis. Sadly they closed their doors back in 2013, end of an era.
up to chest - up to her chest
the guard asked - the guards asked
fake suck at her - fake suckle at her
This was all things - These were all things
Penny before, the unicorn - Penny before. The unicorn
that is why she - that was why she
Same green mane - You mentioned this in the previous sentence.
against her, rippling running - against her, ripples running
slow, she made sure - slow, she had made sure
your wonton display - your wanton display
*****
This was intense, but given that it resulted in the conception of their foal, that's kind of expected. The added intimacy lends more depth and warmth to their characters and flows naturally with the existing narrative without being a distraction or feeling out of place or forced.
7026382 It was both of their first times. Stick had seen other changelings have sex with ponies, in the early days of the Canterlot hive, and her job in Chrysalis' hive was to tend the breeders, so I figure she knew the ins and outs of the process. But for both of them, this was a very special time. It was meant to be intense, a very stark comparison to Jenny and Sablee's romp, they were just two experienced adults having some fun.
7025981 Ahh. Ranma 1/2 was the first anime I watched and finding it, I needed more.
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Ranma 1/2 was the gateway for many of the anime fans that got their start in the late 80's through the 90's, myself included. My first real reintroduction to it beyond the American adaptation of Macross known as Robotech was Urusei Yatsura which led me to more works by Rumiko Takakhashi, including Ranma. Ranma proved to be a rich inspiration for fanfiction of all colors and flavors, including many decidedly adult explorations of the concepts and issues raised in the cannon series, and the rapid expansion of the internet during the time made it spread like a wildfire among the fans that were hungry for more good storytelling. But I suspect you already know this.
new experience this love - new experience, this love
and try and focus on it - and try to focus on it
Her beak part open - Her beak partly/partially open
a moment and the changeling - a moment, and the changeling
each thrust and withdraw - each thrust and withdrawal
The feel as her mate - The feeling as her mate
new experience, her slit - new experience. Her slit
*****
Playful and passionate in roughly equal measure, it just doesn't get much sweeter than this... at least not without inducing a diabetic coma.
Can't think of much more to say, other than thank you for writing it and sharing it with us!
7028307 Thank you, the typos have been shown back to the teen-rated content... wait, noooooo
Never a problem, I enjoy writing for these two, and it has reached a new bit of fun particularly with how much they have grown and learned to accept everything in each other.
ok that was a good chapter time for a shower extra cold.
Are you going to do chapter 48?
7032381 Hrmm, I might need to set up some kind of voting thing for this
7033185 lol
I must say I have hade the same ideas more then a few times. eating out nightmare moon till she is a babbling mass of mare cum.
7036538 Apparently, in Genevieve-canon, love is six times as potent as friendship
dammit, horsey sexy times aren't supposed to be this funny
Poor Luna.
Return Nightmares magic as a rainBLOW blast to return Luna to herself, sexy!
made
7037536 Thanks, typo squished!
Sharp-tipped horns can actually do damage... Then again, dream logic!
Keep going! ;)
before her meal arrives - before her meal arrived
Now she had - Now that she had
there was suddenly two - there were suddenly two
It was an enchanting - It had been an enchanting
in hand with a any one - in hand, with
aany onelong past when Sablee - long past where Sablee
You're kidding right? - You're kidding, right?
was wrong this felt - was wrong, this felt
if she came before - if she were to come before
if Jenny didn't adjust her - if Jenny hadn't adjusted her
It mad what had - It made what had
she thanks the universe - she thanked the universe
found her body seem to melt - made her body seem to melt -or- found her body seeming to melt
*****
Yep, Jenny and Sablee are just as cute as can be, and Sablee seems to be a true gentlepony, especially in the face of their shared feelings and desires.
It's fun to see Hay learning just how far a changeling disguise goes. Poor Penny seems about to become the bone of contention between two amorous hippogriffs. Whatever shall she do to defend herself from their advances?
Being a dream, I'm giving the Jenny and Nightmare Moon scene a lot of artistic license. I was a little confused when Jenny suddenly switched from being in front of Nightmare Moon to somehow in a 69 position. One wonders how Luna handles knowing that she is an object of so many ponies... infatuations... in that she actually gets to witness them whereas Princess Celestia certainly knows that she is a target of the same, but never has it thrust upon her, so to speak.
7038727 Fixed in both versions. And yes, this had a lot of things in it that would have just not worked in the waking world. Dreams can be awesome like that
(Dammit, this is right where I need a Luna emoji)
Unkown - Don't come late - Unknown - Don't come late
Fast taps the bed - Fast tapped the bed
A shudder runs through - A shudder ran through
to wash with drugs - I don't understand what this is supposed to mean.
*****
A strangely and unexpectedly enticing chapter to read and enjoyably passionate too.
7041068 All fixed! And I did say I wouldn't do a scene with Fast and Twilight, but it wasn't Twilight, was it
Yes, it was concerning that Twilight would have even peeked at such a spell.
Good work!
Ooo, Somepony had fun. There are some stories that I have been reading that have that after a good night of Sex.
7071867 Well, as you saw, it was much more innocent than might be suspected. Just a happy, cozy time with her lovers.
7071910 I know.
complement her mate - compliment her mate (Although I'm sure they do complement one another as well.
)
looking through looked up - looking through, looked up
Ugh why do they - Ugh, why do they
Penny slipped - Penny had slipped
their lives is spent - their lives are spent
changeling wanted to ride - changeling had wanted to ride
Penny could stop - Penny couldn't stop
realized before, there was - realized before. There was
Instinct, the most perfect - Instinct the most perfect
she loves, one - she loved, one
Stick wasn't so giddy - Stick weren't so giddy
*****
Such a sweet and creamy delight of a chapter!
Poor Princess Twilight needs emergency hugs!
7073366 All fixed (on both versions), thank you so much
And yes, a little, ahem, breast play, was certainly on the cards. The problem for Penny is, the more she is milked, the more she will lactate... oh, maybe that is why she is walking funny? Or maybe Stick did do her hippogriff impression again
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The problem for Penny is, the more she is milked, the more she will lactate... - The benefit for Penny is, the more she is milked, the more she will lactate... (Hmm... darn typos are getting into everything...)
Or maybe both?
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FTFY
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And if that becomes cannon, little Sorlie will be the best fed half-changeling ever.
this is a vary good chapter the hive is growing, penny is growing and the filly has a name.
I am also happy to see you have included the fact that a mare does like her nipples played with and yes I mean in real life. grin,
hum interesting I can see ware that may be a little painful afterwards. kind of like super abrasive sandpaper.
Standing there, sitting - (Can one stand and sit at the same time?
)
few discard cushions - few discarded cushions
cat like than bird like - catlike than birdlike
each withdraw - each withdrawal
*****
Experimentation is often fun and enjoyable, but can lead to discovering the occasional pitfall. At least no permanent harm was done and everyone had their fun.
As I was reading it occurred to me, and I went back to check just to be sure, Hay has never been the focus of a EUtC side story. She has had a supporting role in 97 and almost in 84, but the scene cut away. I'm sure her time in coming.
7088411 Thanks for the typos, they will be spanked most surely and... I hadn't actually noticed that... Hay! Get your plot in here, you have fans
Not sure what you wanted to do here.
7103233 Think I got it a bit better explained. Thanks again