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Vehemence


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My name is Lathyrus. I am writing this story so that those who read it can help me. There have been some complications recently, or rather, for a very long time. I have been living with this human, Vehemence, for quite some time (he told me his real name, but he prefers for me to call him by that). I write this story in hopes that someone will be able to help me get back to Equestria, and to come back home to... her. So please, anybody who reads this, if you can help Vehemence get me back, I would be eternally grateful to you. I guess I'll just start off and say that setting light to unknown things tend to shift the mindset of the average person. For me, however, it only infuriates me, and frightens me.

Vehemence here:

Hey you reading this, go read this as well. Go read all of his other stuff as well, it's amazing. Besides, you are going to want to read it at the same time if you want to grasp a full understanding of what's going on, so get to it!

Note: The gore description doesn't necessarily mean that the entire story contains gore. It's so more of a discretion warning. Though gore is not an explicit theme in the story, there are a few chapters and scenes that do in fact roam into that territory.

Chapters (14)
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Comments ( 58 )

Hmmm. A bit short, but let's see where this goes. :ajsmug:

743707

Oh, something tells me you'll enjoy the next chapter.:eeyup:

Big Mac? Dead?

Fuq this I'm outta here...

767140

You'll come back. They always come back. :moustache:

not bad at all

Tyr

Couple of mistakes here. Remember the difference between my and
me. I did enjoy it though. Work on your grammar and keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

This is really cool concept, read the story through their "eyes" in this basis of typewriting.

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Should I keep the story going on in this format? I mean, I know some people like actual text, but there are also some that like the almost physical feel of the story, as in it feels a bit more 'authentic'. Besides, I always write my drafts on a typewriter for all of my stories, so It would be a lot easier for me.:eeyup:

If you're going to upload them like this, be sure that you first go through and find all the mistakes. There was an instance where you said hand instead of hoof. :ajbemused:

1396842

That's the problem with a typewriter; It's sucks trying to correct mistakes. :twilightangry2:

I'll buy some white-out or something over the weekend for my upcoming stories. So far, however, it looks like I'm gonna' stick to the typewriter. :twilightblush:

Why not just use Word?

1426262

I draft all of my stories on a typewriter, and it would take too long to transfer it to word. Besides, a few people like the typewriter style to it. :twilightsmile:

Tyr

Why do I get the feeling you put WAY too much effort in making this story?
It is awesome though, keep up the good work!

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"Success has a simple formula: do your best, and people may like it."
-Sam Ewing:ajsmug:

I try my best, therefore you like it. :pinkiehappy:

Though it would be nice to get a tiny little spot in the feature box.:twilightblush:

1534462

:eeyup: Thanks. You really have no idea how much that means to me. Seriously, in this day and age, any sort of compliment is like gold.

Tyr

This story is getting awesomer by the chapter:rainbowkiss:
Although I must say that at some points, it can be somewhat hard to read the text due to a lack of ink.
But still awesome.

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Sorry about that. I'll try to fix that with future chapters. Thanks for the feedback, though. I truly appreciate it.:ajsmug:

Read chapter 1, interested, take a fav, a like, and I'll be back to read more when I find the time.:pinkiehappy:

1671888

Thank you kind sir. You'll be in for quite a ride, to say the least. :ajsmug:

It's always nice to see people actually enjoy my story, it really is. Again, thank you. :eeyup:

Half of me likes this story for... the originality of the story the other half likes the author notes :P

Good chapter. Be sure to tell Lathyrus that his skill with that typewriter is improving.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png

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I'll be sure to tell him. I think it has something to do with all that alcohol him and I have been drinking. I think I'm turning him into an alcoholic. Before I introduced Jack Daniels to him, he was always a bit timid when he sat in front of the typewriter, but now he can write no problem, although I'm still not sure how he manages to hit the keys with hooves.:ajsmug:

Yep, he really appreciates all the feedback he's been given.:eeyup:

:ajsmug:

Woohoo, our first 1000 total views!

I wonder how me and Lathyrus will celebrate...

hehe...
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YOUR BACK!!!:pinkiehappy: I mean, I know you've logged in quite frequently, but I haven't heard from you in a while.

That's not my blood though, that's Lathyrus's. He hasn't told me how it got there, but he did have a coughing fit while he wrote it. I wonder if that has anything to do with it.:applejackconfused:

1796803

I hate semester finals. I have some coming up, actually.

Thanks for the replies. :D

Also, why did you delete your comment?:rainbowderp:

Yes, def- all oc humans are relevant :P.

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Read Heavy Rains's story if you haven't already. A little hint, Daniel might make some more appearances in Scorched. So yeah, Daniel=best human.:eeyup:

Damn just...damn

2024593

I know, I know. Just take a deep breath, and just let it all soak in...

That ending scene, you worked it pretty good!

2032302

Wow, thanks.:rainbowwild: I always appreciate feedback, especially from someone like you. :ajsmug:

It makes it hard to feel bad for Lathyrus when he was so hostile towards the Mane 6, even to those that hadn't actually done anything to him. :twilightoops:

2041363

Well, that's what happens when you let a racist like Lathyrus run his mouth.:pinkiesick:

It's so fun to twist your emotions toward Lathyrus, though. You want to feel bad for him, but his hostility prevents you. Almost like you can't feel bad for him, even if you want to. :pinkiecrazy:

Writing is fun.

Woohoo. My first dislike..

Now... who was the bastard that did that?!:pinkiecrazy:

i liked it a bit. but i didn't learn a lot. ten sad apples :applecry::ajsleepy::applecry::ajsleepy::applecry::ajsleepy::applecry::ajsleepy::applecry::ajsleepy:

and one scotaloo for me reading this and likeing it:scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

2275667 I'll get the guns and the truck! (If you're wondering where I've been for the past hour, I passed out on my keyboard after reading The Heat. It played in my head like a movie... and I loved it!):raritywink:

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Thank you very much. It wouldn't have been possible without you, of course.

By the way, the last part, I just realized. Not only did I make Discord out to be evil, but I notice that I made him out to be one of the biggest dicks I have ever imagined. I mean, really. Lying about Lathyrus actually seeing his dead mother. To top it all off, he bluntly laughs at him.

2276187 Indeed... A dick of the highest caliber.

2276214

High caliber dicks. Sounds like what goes in a machine gun that fires dildos.

Anyways, I'm pretty sure you know who 'the other one' that Wisteria was a talking about...

2276234 Indeed but I shall not reveal anything here in the comment section.

2276254 And I will be there in Burlesque attire to promote it!

Dear Author,

You sure know how make things interesting you crazy bastard:pinkiecrazy:

2277993

When you're as insane as me, things are always interesting.:pinkiecrazy:

By the way, thank you for sticking around this long to see how far Lathyrus's journey has gotten.:pinkiehappy:

2278004 I like interesting things so I stick to them

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Well get ready, cause this will stick to ya' more than gum under a shoe...:moustache:

2282796 I look forward to it :moustache:

Okay, I'm probably going to feel stupid for asking this, but how did you make that script? Given word count, I'm guess that they're pics, but still.

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