Post-Cancellation Note #1: People are still adding this story to their "read later" for some reason. I only have four prologues for this story written but it's a cancelled series. Also, this story's concept isn't going to the trash bin. It's just back in the drawing board. So it'll be back. So no offense to people who may like this story already, the compliments you may think of giving me in this story mean little.
The best friendships involve oddities that make them interesting.
There is the cowmare who lives relatively off the grid on a low profile and the countess star surrounded by a veil of celebrity fame.
A friendship was originally torn apart when one advanced far from the other. When one of them takes the initiative to make things right, original conclusions and assumptions dissipate into thin air.
A former vocal bully comes to the trio of crusaders who have recently attained their cutie marks and seeks their advice on how to mend stained family ties.
Two fashionable ponies meet in Canterlot Carousel for an unexpected reason.
Then, when the time becomes right, these four groups of friends will converge in the Castle of Friendship where a surprise awaits them...but only when the time is right.
Blog #1 on this story can be found here.
Cancelled.
Does this story have romance in it, or just friendshipping?
That's a very intriguing concept for a fic. I already wonder what brings all of them together in the castle at the end.
I'm struggling a little with understanding Diamond Tiara's motif, though. Why does she want to befriend her mother again? Does she want to get back in her good graces because she's afraid of getting punished by her?
What I didn't understand is why Rara needed to explain Applejack what she meant with "Applejack, that's what Countess Coloratura would think. Not Rara."? Applejack was there, after all, and witnessed the events and was even responsible for Rara's change back to her real personality.
The only thing I didn't like here is the way you portray Starlight. To call her "selfish" is quite unfair.
While it wasn't Sunburst's fault that his parents sent him to Canterlot for magical education after this talent for magic was revealed, it was definitely his fault that Starlight felt so lonely.
With how much she missed him, she sure sent him letters and visited him in Canterlot here and there and if he had answered those letters and welcomed her, then it would have never come so far with her, so he apparently didn't do any of those and was more interested in his education than their friendship.
Where did you see the implication that Starlight was selfish? Considering that it was Sunburst who had left her and not Starlight who had left him, it's quite obviously the exact other way around.
I'm excited how this continues.
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Ah! Some criticism for my story! I'm glad you took the time!
I didn't necessarily think of a motif for Diamond Tiara's emotions. I tend to write on instincts. I just think that a concept like this would be intriguing to read. I am aware that this concept has been done a lot lately but I wanted to tackle it on my own way. However, I will say that I didn't read any of the fics associated with this idea.
Sometimes, we underestimate the impact of what we do and even forget about it. I had that in mind when having that moment with Rara.
I see! I was concerned about this chapter the most and I'm happy that you pointed this out! I got a second opinion from someone else before responding to this part of your criticism and they agree with your points. I think it's not story-breaking necessarily. In fact, I think I can keep these words of yours in mind the next time I tackle these two.
To answer your question, "Where did you see the implication that Starlight was selfish?"
That's a good question. It was honestly how I interpreted it. Since it was so brief of a character backstory explanation scene with not much detail, I couldn't exactly make a definite conclusion.
Thanks! This story is in arcs so expect a lot of content.
Once again, I am pleased and happy that you took the time to give your thoughts on the story. When someone criticizes my characterization, I take it very seriously since I was told before again and again that I tend to characterize impeccably. So no worries! Your word has been heard. XD
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I don't write shipping. I will VERY RARELY write any romance.
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Always. When I read a story, I always try to give feedback as good as possible to help authors here getting better in their writing.
Actually, no, it wasn't. There are only one or two fics here where Diamond Tiara shows herself to be sympathetic or caring towards her mother. And yours is the first where Diamond Tiara even tries to befriend her and to like her.
The problem with this is, that Diamond Tiara actually hates her mother for all the stuff she put her and (indirectly) her new friends through, that became very apparent by the way she reacted to her.
A child who is abused by its mother doesn't suddenly gain the desire to like her.
I have a hard time with seeing this as possible.
I look forward to see how you fix this in their next chapter then.
Excellent!
I admit, I only started to read this because it's partially related to the events of "Crusaders of the Lost Mark" and has a part about Applebloom, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle and Diamond Tiara, cause I only read "Crusaders of the Lost Mark" fanfictions currently, but since everything is intervowen, I'm going to read the rest of it too!
Makes me happy to hear. I try to help as good as I can.
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Can you please elaborate that with some of the actual episodes? I can benefit from the information you give me. I'm still relatively new to this fandom.
It's something that I drew from personal experience. Shouldn't be story-breaking as this is only the prologue and barely anything was written at this moment. Again, it's good that you pointed out the flaws when you did so that it would prevent future chapters from being not good.
Well, in the end, I only would like people to read my stuff if they truly wish to. I never go to anybody or tell anybody to advertise my stuff, so I really cherish it when someone takes the time to comment.
I'm glad to hear it. I am going into somewhat uncharted waters, mostly on the character side so I'll be looking forward to what you have to say.
When can I expect this story to be reinvented/uncancelled?