Scootaloo is involved in a tragic accident, and in order to keep alive, somepony had to make a huge sacrifice; and Rainbow Dash is willing to be the one to make her biggest fan alive and happy.
Started writing it the day I joined!
Dialogue is colored so you know who's talking.
Remember: ANYTHING can change!
This story is in 80 bookshelves and is being tracked by 34 users?! Holy crapadocious! Thanks so much for enjoying my story guys!
This is tagged Alternate Universe because the CMC don't have their cutie marks in this one.
Chapters (7)
Good Job! Keep at the work, so far it's pretty good although some extra detail to describe key events would spice this story up like for example:
The moment Scootaloo past Rainbow Dash falling helplessly, Rainbow Dash immediately halted her ascent, her heart pounding, adrenaline pumping through her body, she bolted towards Scootaloo in an attempt to save her.
Hope this helps :) Keep at it ;)
>>Derpysheep Thanks. I'll do that. I was in such a rush yesterday (don't know why) so I didn't go into much detail. At least I wrote what the first chapter needed. I tossed the pizza yesterday, and now time to add the toppings to finish it off. P.S. take a look at the dream scene. I used your idea.
Thanks for giving me it.
>>Hillbe Uhh, what?
Woah
. I've gotten 85 views and 2 likes in one day?! This story blew up all because I posted a new chapter! I haven't even written much in it yet. Anyways, thank you guys so much! I'll try to finish this chapter as soon as possible.
Well, now this looks interesting. Hopefully there'll be an update in the near future, but if Scootaloo really fell from that great a height I'm pretty sure she's dead, no ifs, ands, or buts.
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You have a point, I never really thought about how tough ponies are, or even fillies, I think it'd be quite reasonable if I had changed it to around 500 feet or so Thanks for the tip, it helps me improve my story.
Wow, it took this story 6 months/half a year in order to get a little bit exciting. I'm such a bad writer
7490355 Still, falling from 500 would mean instant death unless something broke her fall within the first 100 feet or so.
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You're absolutely right, I'll put something in there, and hopefully it'll make more sense. I'm bad at this stuff.
7491428 I think the branch would have to break her fall at least somewhat early into the flight for her to have any chance of survival. If she fell straight down with no obstruction, the impact would be too great.
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Right, okay. I added a little branch there for a little bit of context. The chapter was a lil' short anyway.
7507621 Better, but now her wings have broken completely due to the crack she hit. Unless that's supposed to be a plot point.
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Well, I can't say anything more due to spoilers, but yes, I did mean to do that. I'm cruel like that.
not that bad Pink. im returning the favor of you reading and commenting on mine. So I'm getting around to reading yours :)
Your not that bad. :) at least not to me. That was a smart thing early on with the colored letters to know who was speaking. Cant wait to see the rest of this Pinkish.
I just uploaded a new one of my own, id love to hear your thoughts on it.
Here have more Pinkies:
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Thanks, I'm a bit busy at the moment since highschool's back. I'll get to your story once I get an opportunity.
I'm pretty sure a broken bone in the spine could not be healed by a donation, even from a deceased donor. Broken bones can't be replaced like organs can. If Scootaloo really did break a bone in her spine, I don't know if she'd automatically die, but she'd probably be paralayzed from the neck down for the rest of her life.
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I don't science well. I need some kind of crucial bone or something, otherwise this story will fall apart. I don't think Equestria's logic with ponies really have to match Earth's, so I let this one off the hook, but if you have something that makes sense, I'll use it.
7578737 Just have the bones for her wings be broken, and they need bone marrow. I don't really know if the story can work as you intend it, there doesn't seem to be a logical way for Scootaloo's injuries to require Rainbow Dash to give up her own wings. I think you may have written yourself into a corner.
7578811 (Spoilers!) Having her wings get donated to Scootaloo was Rainbow's idea as hinted by the last part. What's important is the bone that'll keep Scoots alive, but Rainbow can survive without. Maybe it doesn't have to be a bone, but I need something to use. The wings are just a bonus, so don't worry about them. I haven't really studied pony anatomy or anything like that.
7578926 I know this fic can't be completely scientifically accurate, but I can only stretch the suspension of disbelief so far in regards to how pony anatonmy works. And I just don't think it works this way.
7578970 (Spoilers!) This is the only way I can make this work, I've gotta keep it this way, otherwise I'd have to cancel the story and let a whole bunch of people down.
At least it's not too disoriented. Plus, story's nearing its end anyway.
Nice chapter, short, but its good. I like the idea of Rainbow Dash being willing to sacrifice her wings to help Scootaloo, not all heroic sacrifices have to be of your life.
I can't wait to read the next chapter
7738780 I'm a slow writer, and my chapters usually take an average to two months to complete if you look at the dates they were published, and they're quite short. Nonetheless, since it seems people like you are enjoying my story, I do the best I can whenever I have time.
I get the feeling that Scootaloo is going to be heartbroken when she finds out what her hero sacrificed for her to fly. Still this chapter was right in the feels.
Aww. Still,it was a great story
More! I love this!
This is getting good dude
Do you have any more ideas for after this? These toy is just getting really good. Maybe the next chapter could be about her friends coming over to the hospital when she had just finished healing, and they had no idea what happened, but they were all happy about Sciits being able to fly, yet she refused to, and made a vow she wouldn't fly until Dash could too. And in the next chapter after that, she could go looking for pegasi who would donate their wings to Dash.
Just a thought. Love your work.
NOOO why scootaloo why
bad idea, I have a feeling something is gonna happen to scootsy