This is a collection of discarded drafts and other nonsense that doesn't make it into my finished fanfics. Expect the roughest of drafts. The only reason a story of mine won't have a draft posted here is if I only wrote one draft and then vomited it onto FiMFic.
Sometimes the changes made are minor and sometimes they're drastic, but each time, the key factor is the feedback of others (pre-readers from EqD or reviewers from /fic/) helping me to improve the story. This is why you get outside opinions on your writing, folks.
Each draft will include a link to the finished work.
Chapters (14)
Woo! Now I must open another tab and read both at the same time!
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737365 As in re-reading Playing Hard to get and comparing it to the draft, think about the changes, wonder why and such. I'm weird that way.
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Yeah, I get it... I just didn't think anyone would be interested enough to do actually do that.
Scraps? Sounds like my dinner...
> This is a collection of discarded drafts
Why did I read "discorded drafts"?
BRAIN, you have failed me!
why was Emolestia not included in the actual story?
that was a pretty damn good scene
best removed content ever!
edit: im not sure which version i like the better...
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I felt it distracted from the focus of the story too much, and my editor agreed.
"I had to keep her talking. Talking was good. Talking was safe. I could deal with talking. Talking meant her mouth was occupied."
i love that sentence! especially the underlined part
Automatic canon. You should consider adding in the Celestia part.
They played croquet without mallets huh
Leaves isn't in here. I feel betrayed.
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The intent with this is to create a "before and after" effect, so if I ever clean that crappy thing up, it'll appear.
Finally some time for feedback... and wow, such a different story! I can see many advantages to what you chose in the end.
Eagle's interactions with Celly are cute, but I like much more the air of embarrassment that hung around them while Twilight was being kinda playful being the only real interaction between them for a short piece. The twist on the other one, the focus of the story...
I like Eagle's internal musings much better in the other one as well. More focused on the present, trying to figure out more about himself and the wet manes... heh, the wet manes was pure genius.
Not that there wasn't a lot going for this one, but I think, when it comes to the 'feel' of the story, your final submission was vastly superior.
Now, I have to read the others.
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One of my editors remarked on how ironic it was that an OC pony of mine enjoyed wet manes so much when it was apparently Rarity (who continues to be worst pony) who started the whole craze.
It's funny cuz it's naughty.
Thanks much for giving us some insight into your revision process. What's /fic/? There's no 4chan.org/fic. Not that I would expect a lot of insightful comments on 4chan anyway.
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Ponychan, not 4chan.
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The mallets are their horns.
...Uh.
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Guard Eagel eh?
1210888 strange minds think alike. Have a moustache.
Any chance of genre tagging these bits and pieces? Must as I enjoy delving into your impressive collection over and over, it does sometimes make for slowing reading.