Once, a vengeful goddess tried to wreck havoc on the ponies of Equestria for abandoning her. She unleashed an army upon those that wounded her and tricked fillies into becoming corrupted alicorns.
Her armies have long since been defeated and the alicorns are now purified, the goddess herself was forced into a slumber and the world was drained of magic as a result of her actions.
Yet now she rises again, bringing chaos with her and destroying the village of Ponyville. Two of its residents, Spike the Dragon and Twilight Sparkle, manage to escape and join the Queen's Knights in order to stop the goddess and her subjects.
Editor: Ice Star
Artist: Infinity Shade
(Inspired by the game Stella Glow)
Chapters (9)
It's up!
Why doesn't this story have a Nightmare Moon tag?
7213522 That's what the other tag if for. Since there will be a lot of characters and I'm limited to only five tags.
7213634
Hmmmm... A neglected moon goddess? Interesting...
You have my attention, minion!
7216988
Well, looks like Scoots got... stoned?
MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
Still though, this is getting interesting.
Really?
7234892 Heh, whoops
Huh, seems things are much different in this universe.
Also: good for you, Blueballs! You actually did something that wasn't selfish for once!
ALSO: Galaxy Alicorn? EXPLAIN!!!!
7261244 Don't worry, it will be explained
7261965
Staaaaaaaaaaaaaare~
Huh, so Twilight and Shining aren't related in this one?
7319854 No.
Well Damn... did not expect that ending.
I assume DT is gonna be something like a rival character for Spike? And that Big Mac isn't a member of the Apple Family?
7358899 Something along that line.
7360095
But why a wooden sword for Spike?
7360097 I wanted a sort of simple sword for Spike. Then, while doing some research, I found that Redwood has a kind of fire resistance, so I wanted to incorporate that into his sword since you don't read about a lot of characters with swords made out of redwood. Plus, the Apples are more of a function over fashion, and found it weird that they would create such elaborate weaponry.
7360102
Don't quote me on this, but I think only Redwood bark carries the fire resistance, the trees themselves can still burn.
7360112 Yup! Which is why the sword is made from the bark. Did I accidentally not specify that correctly?
7360120
Don't think so, but I don't think the bark would make a very sturdy weapon. It kinda feels a bit spongy...
7360129 Yeah, I tried to have it so that the outer sides are bark, but the middle is the wood itself. That's why the sword weighs a lot because of how thick the bark and wood are.
7360138
I guess it wood be more of a cudgel than a sword then.
7360140 *looks up the word*
Huh, guess it would've fit better as a cudgel.
7360148
*slightly disappointed that you didn't notice the pun*
7360150 There was a pun?
7360162
Wood you like me to explain it?
7360230
Sure!
7360538
"Wood"
hmmmm, kinda wish these chapters were longer...
Also, did you get the secret behind the pun?
7386104 The next chapter should be longer.
As for the pun, I got the 'wood you care for me to explain' part, and a cudgel is a type of stick. And since the sword is redwood, it can be a type of stick. Am I correct?
7386324
*slow claps*
Excellent!
7386340
... You may want to work on your pacing, stretch out your chapters.
7409404 Yeah, pacing is kinda hard for me. Do you have any tips or tricks to help me?
7409433
The only thing I can suggest is to be more descriptive, a major key in adjusting your pacing is how many words you use to describe every mundane detail of what's going on. Another thing you can do is describe the facial expressions of characters in between dialogue and include more lines.
Other than that, I have no other tips to offer.
7409463 Thank you, I'll use these tips in future chapters
7409471
No problem!
Oooooh sp00pie visions...
7455286 spoopie indeed
If I was to give you one word of advice from what I've seen so far it is "pacing" your writing structure is good and the story concept is awesome but the thing holding this story back from being as good as top stories on this site is your pacing. This story is jumping from one scene to another with no in between. They say don't write what's not needed to progress your story however only writing the bare necessities and nothing else leaves your story stale and uninviting. I think this story has real potential but you need to give it time for that. Try aiming at 1 scene has a minimum of 1000 words and see where you go from there. Even if it means it takes 2-3 chapter's instead of 1 to get through a section of you story if you try to pace it and not rush from one scene into the next I think this story can be amazing.
7457513 Thank you, I'll keep that in mind. And you are right. Pacing is something I'm not really good at when it comes to long stories like these.
Finally got around to this...
New party member, get!
*Final Fantasy Victory Music*