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Darkscout99


A young brony, using ponies to try to further his writing skills. profile pic drawn by fatalspark.

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Traveling to equestria, a human finds out that gravity is many times higher there, and he is much more dense than normal. without any magic to counteract the force of gravity, he weighs 10 tons, literally. the ponies freak out.

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Comments ( 6 )

I stopped reading after the first line.

Please proofread before you publish.

6979604 Im sorry to see that you decied not to read, but if you could give me examples that would be great. I tried to do my best but it seems that I didn't do a good enough job.

it looks like a new concept of HiE, i'll give it a shoot :yay:

i don't want to offend, but it's too... simple... he wakes up, so instantly the ponies befriend him and make him a guard... i hope you see the what's wrong there...

6980367 thanks for the comment, im doing my best to space it out. i have it in my head celestia wanted him close so she could watch him, but that didn't come out too well did it?

very interesting concept, but the writing is too rushed.

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