Snowy Haze is a pegasus living in the grand city of Canterlot and one of it's many pegasi in the courier business, in her free time however she enjoys reading a lot and simply loves all the romance novels written by her favorite author C.W Step will she find the courage to go to the convention where said author reveals her newest novel though?
prequel here: The Origins of a Pegasus
sequel here: A Work Day of a Pegasus
Set in the Quil and Blade universe by Crystal Wishes and Anzel
Art by the highly talented, Pusspuss
Edited by: Tev
Chapters (1)
I want to say that I'm very proud of you for sticking to writing and even going so far as to publishing your first story here. That is a huge step and I promise the more you work at it the easier it will get.
I enjoyed this. It was cute, and whimsical. You did an excellent tie in. Well done!
Snowy Haze sounds like the sweetest of ponies. Love how you described Silent, too.
Best of luck (not just saying that because I want to read more)!
Good to see this story on the site. I saw your thread earlier and have been hoping to see the story show up ever since.
The sun is indeed a mighty nemesis.
Awesome! You actually did it! It was a fun read, especially the description of Silent Knight.
Remember that? Less than 24 hours ago, you were too afraid to even try writing. And in less than 24 hours, you snubbed those worries and wrote a cute little story that I in no way would have any kind of bias toward liking. And then you published it.
Job well done, Snow!
Now you have your starting line and are in the adventure of writing. I hope you had fun because you have so much potential to only go up from here! 
I really love that.
For a first time, that was really good. The excitement really translates well. As a fanboy myself, I can definitely relate to just about everything here, especially her meeting her favorite author.
The scene at Sunridge was a small pleasure. I'm a big fan of Mama Sunbeam! And again, I can relate to her insistence on honorifics. It just doesn't sound right when someone I know as Mr or Mrs insists on going by their first name.
My critique for you is to divide the longer sentences up a bit. I've had trouble with that myself, so please don't feel too bad. This story really was a nice read, not too short or long. I wish you nothing but the best as you continue to write, learn and grow.
This is one of the few stories that actually made me smile and... like... make a really embarrassing squee sound. In other words, it's really cute and well-done. I think you definitely have the potential to work at it and become a really good writer, and I believe in you!
Some advise.
Your perspective in first person should be less visual and more emotional. For example, the crimson flush shouldn't be a visual, it instead should be more feeling-based. You wouldn't be able to see your own cheeks flush unless you were looking into a mirror. I would go deeper in explaining the feeling of your checks turning crimson, such as the heat of there moment, the blood, perhaps a slight kick in your heartbeat, etc.
Paragraphs are sometimes executed incorrectly. Each paragraph should be a unique idea or purpose. Some of your paragraphs are not split in the right places or are split incorrectly.
I'll give it a like. Keep it up!
It was a cute, fun read.
6970811 Thank you Anzel as one of my role models I feel honored to have your pride.
6970816 Thank you kindly Synthaholic, I tried my best with the characters that weren't mine.
6970853 Oh yes Snow hates the morning sun haha.
6970879 Thankies Joe, well Silent did get reprimanded and he looks scary to a small mare like Snowy.
6970884 Crystal I was so nervous but your PM exchange with me gave me the final push to jump into the deep.
6970916 I hope I did mama Sunbeam as expected.
6970988 Heehee made you squee!
6970990 Deathtrap thank you for your advice, this was the first story I have ever written so sorry I still need to learn a lot.
6971106 I'm glad you were amused Artimae.
Thank you all, did anyone get the little reference I did in the very beginning?
Very cute and a fun read! I'm glad you posted this! People already pointed out a few places where you could improve so I'll just say that I'm super excited to see more from you!
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If I put myself in Velvet mode I can think of a possible innuendo that was early in the story. If that is referencing something I am not aware of the source story.
The sunny day bit right at the start. one of Anzel's ponies and one of my favorite oc's
6973103 Hah! Clever! I didn't catch that at first, but it's obvious now.
Your first fic? Not bad. Minor flaws that come with using a computer and a keyboard (seriously, the amount of times I find letters missing in MY words is unreal), and you could do with using commas a bit more, but all in all really good!
Anzel already said a lot I would have told you, but my main advice is: Keep writing. Even if it's just little tiny stories with no real meaning or depth to them, it'll help improove what's already there. I've been writing for close to ten years now, and while my main project may not be pony-related, it's the same for every type of literature: You learn by doing!
So, keep your head held high and write on!
6981766 Why thank you I'll certainly try.
this is a good fic i relly enjoyed this your earnd a tumbs up ^_^ (btw like your name)
6982929 Thank you kindly, all this support and yes also the constructive criticism make me want to write more in the near future.
Sweet story, I enjoyed it
Minor flaws here and there but it was more than fine for your first try. I shall await the second story of yours with great anticipation, Snowy 
(I'm just going to call you Snowy, because you seem too cute to just call you Snow
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7021097 Why thank you kindly it should come out today.
Ah this was a well written story actually. The only thing I find wrong is the run on sentences. But other than that, great story! Warm fuzzies were administered during the reading of this story!
7036729 Thank you Legion and run on sentences will be my bane for a while.
Before I say anything else, that cover is the most adorable mare I've seen since Ditsy Derpy Doo herself. I'm about to have a heart attack she is so cute.
Now, for the story.
So simple, so relaxed, so refreshing. If you look up "Slice of Life" in the dictionary, you should find a picture of this story. Very well done, this story was so relaxing it lulled me into just sitting in my living room chair for a few minutes, reliving my day in my mind before I wrote this comment.
Very Simplistic, and very cute, as a good Slice of Life should be, and this was brilliant. I'll definitely be reading the sequel.
7037820 Thank you for your praise, this story was a big step for me, it's the first thing I've ever written and was too nervous to write it, but Crystal and Anzel along with the crew in the Quill and Blade discord app group convinced me to just try, and so I did, part three is on it's way.
7039005 You're very welcome, and I look forward to finding the time (God help me) to read your next works.
Though the few grammatical errors, this story was a really good for a begging writer.
. It was quite amusing and a delight to read. I hope you keep writing about Snowy Haze because you have caught my attention.
7059347 Sure will! second story was better in the grammar department and I'm writing a multiple chapter third story now.
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I am looking forwards to it
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Why does Snowy Haze look horny?
7181395 Self determined is more the expression.
Wow, you must have a great editor _^_
A nice read. Keep up the good work!
7226307 Thank you there is a sequel and prequel if you'd enjoy that.
For your first fic, this is honestly pretty good. The thing is, it doesn't feel like a complete story in and of itself: it feels more like an introductory scene that makes for a quick read to get to know a character. However, that can be a good thing if you're able to build upon the character, and it seems like you have done that.
Also:
You are a very naughty mare.
Keep it up!