Asura wakes up in a new wierd world, with talking pastel colored ponies. How will Asura manage in this new peaceful world? The princesses can sense a major disturbance in the harmony of Equestria. Something big is coming, a threat bigger than Nightmare Moon, Queen Chrysalis, Discord, Tirek, and King Sombra combined. With a new threat shadowing Equestria, Asura the Destructor will protect it until the day he dies. Disclaimer: I do not own My Little Pony or Asura's Wrath, all credit goes to their rightful owners. A/N This is my first story, critique is appriciated.
Chapters (3)
Will Rainbow Dash in particular play a major role in this story?
Warning, your use of POV are off, when doing a character POV you have to write in first person, it supposed to be the thoughts of the character itself we are reading, 3rd person is the one where you write as an outsider, seeing from afar.
1rst: "im kicking butt"
3rd:"asura is kicking butt"
6974518 Yeah i thought that the POV:s were off
6973740 i know...
6973866 I don't think so, she will appear in the next chapter, i'll tell you that mutch
Worshipped, not Warshipped, but since is Asura maybe it applys.
Pov are much better, althought id say go easy on transitions, if you keep changing the it becomes hard to follow a narrative.
also for dialogue between characters its always good to separate them from each other.
if its too hard to understand you could always read other fics to see how they do things, id suggest Onomonopia or Tatsurou.
and lastly, for future chapters, take your time, if you rush to make them you risk doing silly erros.
6978110 I appreciate your help
6978499 KO awesome chapters, hope the Princesses don't see Asura as a threat.
Except that through the whole chapter you've been writing in the 3rd person.....
Dude overkill on the level of power needed Asura needs like basic 6 arms for proaply Discord or Full power treck
6979731 I should tell you that Asura needs more power to beat the evil that is stronger than all of the villains combined
This chapter was great, but what are gold flanks?
Well....
I wouldn't call Fluttershy 'brave' as such. More... courageous. Bravery is charging into a fire to save someone without fear because in your mind it's the right thing to do (Much like Rainbow Dash). Courage is when you do so, even if you're afraid -in SPITE of being afraid!- because you know that it's the right thing to do.
6982436 perhaps the nobles in Canterlot?
6982839 Got it, that sounds right.
KO awesome chapter, wonder if Rainbow Dash going to challenge Asura to a race or something else.
6982014 yes but fot a hydra that is barley a starter Goma
6983189 I really doubt Rainbow Dash would win.
I'm really glad that everyone's enjoying this story
Amazing, but there are some spelling errors, and the story is great. can't wait for the next chapter.
Sorry guys, but i don't think i'll be able to complete this story, I just no longer have the motivation or ideas to continue it, I think i'll start a new fanfic later but right now, I'm really sorry
7002019 Well that stinks.
I was looking forward reading more of it. 
When doing dialogue, try saying it out loud and see if it is fitting. Or think if the character would say that in the setting its in.
Also rd and fluttershy went from stopping/attacking to trusting really fast don't you think?
Just some constructive criticism.
first off, love this
second, you need to rethink auras character, he's more serious and doesn't joke very much. he's more neutral then anything.
You could have replaced trotting from clopping. Anyways nice story by the way
GODDAMMIT WITH THE HANGER HANGING FROM THE CLIFF!!!
6978754 They'll probably do.
UPDATE THIS DAMMIT FOR THIS STORY IS THAT GOOD
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big rip