When one of Twilight's spells backfires while Celestia is visiting Ponyville she gets stuck as a filly and is forced to live amongst the ponies in Ponyville whilst her faithful student attempts to restore her to her proper age. Surprise pairing inside.
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It's a cute story, but quite forgettable so far. It lacks context, I think.
But I have to admit the pairing was unexpected and quite adorable <3
need more descriptions. but nice work
loved it
kinda sloppy set up... in mean there really isn't any. It feels like you put up chapter 2 of the story and skipped everything that led up to it. I mean there's already a large leap to grasp that twi could cast a spell that would effect Celestia like that, but to not even SHOW it happen it just make sit look like you couldn't come up with a plausible reason for the idea to happen. There nothing wrong with the scoots/celestia dynamic... but with no build up it has no impact and makes it hard to care at all about whats happening...
reminds me of my little alicorn
We're not even two paragraphs in and already neck deep in some serious shit. I LOVE IT!
did you get the idea off of MLA (my little alicorn)
I will add this to my read later list... sounds interesting enough
who are scootaloo's parents in the first place eh EH??
I really think you should have written out a lot of this instead of just skipping to a spot. Building a relationship could really improve this story, and you should really write more backstory instead of just putting a short description explaining why exactly Celestia is a filly.
No offense but isn't this a knock off of My little alicorn from Equestrian Daily?
go back and start from the beginning. I can see a lot of us want to know what happened to lead up to Scootaloo falling in love with the filly princess, and what happened to turn he into a filly in the first place in more detail. I feel like this is like the third chapter of a story you just spliced out. Need to have some lead in.
While 'En Medius Res' is a legitamite way to start a story, it needs lots of explanation. En Medius Res works better in action thrillers or murder mysteries. I think if you make a chapter 1 to go before this one and ~3 paragraphs before the begining of your opener to really get this to work.
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I want to pull for this fic since Im a fan of odd pairings and I think that old girl Celestia needs more luvin.
Make
Celestia is really cradle robbing in this fic (then again, Celestia with any mortal is cradle robbery
wow i was able to read this and get 25 kills in gow3 koth
Scootaloo's parents... Does not compute...
No seriously good chapter. Even through I'm a little miffed that Scootaloo lied to the princess. I can't help but hope that Celestia will remember it all just to see her expression xD
You need an editor. I can edit. PM if you're interested
This story is kind of confusing!!!
you need a editor a idea guy a proof reader second editor and i have a army of them at my disposal PM me if u want me 2 giv u a hand
LOL I GUESS BAD STORYS MAKE ME PLAY BETTER ON GEARS
herse an idea backfire hte spell again on princess luna problem solved scoots will be even happier then
Congrats Twi, you're now part of the Emmerich family!
This story is..... interesting
i like
This beginning to be interesting
736826 Mr and Mrs Hoo (pronounced 'Who') As i've explained in the second chapter and in the third chapter.
Scootaloo Bue (Boo) Hoo (Who)
Well this is nice and bizarre...
loving it so far
825129 My sincerest apologies. I've just edited the chapter so the mistake should be fixed. Thank you for pointing out my mistake.
yes she is red and the white house is black now
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Luna needs to become a filly now. Fillies here, fillies there, fillies, fillies everywhere.