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This story is a sequel to Celestia Visits Nightmare Moon


Two weeks after the Summer Sun Celebration, Celestia comes into Luna's room to spend time with her, only to find out things aren't what they seem.

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Wow, I remember reading the original before it was changed to Mature.
Damn though, this was good. Nice sequel.

6973389
I'm glad you enjoyed it!:heart:

6973990 will you make a sequel to this sequel:derpyderp2:

6974898
I am planning on it yes ^^

6974904 Great sequel, loved it.

I consider it canon.

Great story.

This sequel is better than what I had planne, good job. I guess this means I can stop working on mine now.

7310519
No story is perfect, keep working on yours! I'd love to read it!:heart:

She wanted to lay down in front of Luna and allow her do whatever she wished…

Thus she does that, and Luna does absolutely nothing, leading to Celestia feeling even worse.

There are a few spelling errors here, such as Luna saying "We art not the Nightmare!" The word "are" was a thing in Middle English, and it is suited here.

It is very clear that Dr. Atlas realizes what has happened, and Princess or not, holds Celestia accountable for the harm brought about by her actions.

Good.

It was pretty clear I should have read the first one but I understood what happened in the first one based off of what I read here.

Interesting. (That's all I gotta say about this story.)

I also just noticed, when Dr. Atlas appears the description is of a mare, but she is later referred to with male pronouns.

Might wanna' fix that.

7314497 Don't thank me! Thank my inner Grammar Nazi. :rainbowlaugh:

Of the original story I said this: I hate this story, and that's what makes it great. And your sequel is a step towards getting over that trauma. I have seen some unofficial sequels basically made just to undo the damage of the original, but this seems more like a proper follow-up. In this, it feels as if Celesta has matured since imprisoning Nightmare Moon, lost her medieval mindset, and is more like the Celestia we know from the series, while still dealing with the consequences of the pony she was centuries past. Thank you for this, and I hope you get to your sequel soon.

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*smiles* I'm glad you enjoyed the story so much! I am working on the planning stages for the sequel Penumbra and hopefully will have something done this summer on it.

Is this getting a sequel soon:derpyderp2:

I found this from clicking around and noticing some of my stories in the also liked section.

I don't get it. What was it that happened to Luna? :applejackconfused:

7704732
I would suggest reading Bad Dragon's prequel. It is linked to this story. If however you wish not to send me a pm and i'll summarize it.

I read the prequel to this like... a full 5 months back, and seeing this was interesting for me. Wonderful prequel; whenever I read something like the prequel to this, I always wonder what the aftermath is like. This... is exactly how I imagined it.

Great work; you've earned my updoot and favorite!

This was an amazing story! Me likey. I need more, off to the sequel I go! :yay: I really enjoyed this, it was written perfectly, fitting all of the tags precisely. When I finished it, I knew I had to follow the author. But as it turns out, I already am! :pinkiehappy:

7951600
My thanks ^^ No sequel yet, but it is coming soon!

7951621 Alright, I'll be awaiting it! :twilightsmile:

Now that I've read the prequel... This got a lot darker. :rainbowderp: And I still liked it just as much as the previous times I read it, but now it makes more sense. I don't know why this wasn't on my Favoritest Fics shelf before. Let me quickly fix that...

7480312 How is the sequel coming along?

Celestia... you goofed. Big time.

Definitely, the sibling relationship between the two sisters has been tainted forever... The worse thing that can happen to Celestia is that Luna forgives her.

But at least Celestia got to know the real monster...

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