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MaxBeezy


Better than Nicholas Sparks. Probably. Probably not. Also has a thing for Queen Chrysalis. Can't Explain Why.

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A story told in the first person, about an unnamed Writer from the city of Manehattan, who travels to Ponyville for the peace and quiet, and to also find inspiration for any possible stories that he could write. Instead of finding inspiration however, he finds himself being tackled by Ponyville's clumsiest mailmare, Derpy Hooves, a pony with disabled vision. After a shaky first encounter, the two begin to bond overtime, and form a close friendship. After a series of circumstances, the Writer feels like he wants to be more than just friends, and everything changes the night he decides to tell her how he feels.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 70 )

I have to say, this is one of the better stories I've read so far.
Much better than the poor excuses for stories that usually pop up here and there.

:facehoof: Look. This is great, but I LOATHE Canon X OC concepts. It was AMAZINGLY WRITTEN, FIVE MUSTACHES OUT OF SIX, but the fact that an OC is dating a canonical character makes me absolutely livid.

Over all review? Six :moustache: out of Ten :moustache:, only because of the concept.

Great story so far. Could be broken up more because of the "new paragraph for each new quote" rule, but it didn't hinder reading at all. :pinkiesmile:

Comment posted by CBM8 deleted Aug 17th, 2014

Moar.
M O A R !

If no moar, I will find you and chuck muffins at your noggin until there is moar! :pinkiecrazy:

AH LUV DIS FANFICK.

Sorry, wanted to be stupid for a moment. :P Anyway, this is a great story so far. I can't wait to see what will happy now the "cat's out of the bag." Excellent. :pinkiehappy:

I. LOVE. THIS. STORY. :heart:

Every chapter matches, or even surpasses, the greatness of the last! This has now became in my Top 2 favorite fanfics I have ever read. :D

Can't wait for more. I hope this isn't ending anytime soon.

779134 :D Thanks. :pinkiehappy:

There is about three more chapters to go.

779227 Well, I can't wait to see how far it goes in the coming chapters!

This is such a marvellously sweet little love story. I adore it.

Now it's up to him to help Derpy. Who could resist a request like that from Dinky?

So much D'awwww & :fluttercry:

EEEERRRRGGGG manly tears overflowing!

I thought I would have this done by three chapters two chapters ago. :derpytongue2:
I think now it'll be done in four chapters. Well, three chapters and an epilogue.

Wow, first to comment, huh? Well, I must say, I chose this story to read because I'd read a good Derpy romance fic the other day and decided to try another. I thought this was going to be just an average, cliche-ish love story, which i suppose it may be eventually.... But so far it has surprised me. And i must say i'm impressed with the last lines of the chapters, even though there have only been 2 so far. A very easy summary of the change of the character. Time seems to be moving rather quickly for me, but I think it'll slow down once the romance really kicks in. Will definitely read the rest.

Okay, so, obviously i was stupid and not the first to comment :twilightsheepish: And honestly, i hope whatever comes after this chapter is good because I'd be pretty satisfied with it ending right here.

wow cooooool cant w8 for the next one!

Agghhhh! Every new chapter leaves me wanting MOARRRRRRRRR!!!

(in the good way, the chapters are wonderful)

this is amazing.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

wwwooooowww so...so touching

UUUUUURRRRRRRGGGGGGGG SO MUCH LOVE POWER!!!!

Beautiful. This was a great story. It's no My second Life. But still...

-Good Character
-Big Mac actually talks
-Doesn't involve the mane six except for a few conversations.
- A heartwarming story that makes me fuzzy on the inside.
Bonus Points!: IT'S A DERPY SHIP! WHY DON'T WE HAVE MORE OF THESE!?
-Plot development isn't to slow or fast.
-Went with the good ol' 'I am writing this, I wonder who is reading this.' thing

You should really write more. You only have a few spelling and grammatical errors'.

(<o_o<)(^o_o^)(>o_o>) KIRBY DANCE

What a great ending!

I have double vision and can personally attest that depth perception is highly overrated.

Absalutly briliant mate. I gotta say this story has a very touching unique spin on the whole ditzy shipping consept and the whole him giving his eye to her was just like "did anyone catch the number of that almost out of nowhere turn of events". And even before that I saw a few points where a lazyer writer could have just ended it but you kept on making it more and more awesone. if i could give this multi thumbs up i would. can't wait for:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: your next story

S-s-surprise! *shrieks*

"Why not" a great line to close this fanfic.

Such a beautiful and heartwarming story! Best story I've ever read EVER! You are an amazing writer dear sir! My praise to your wonderful imagination, creativity and brilliant use of vocabulary! Well done! Recommended to all of my friends! A true inspiration you are :ajsmug: :twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

Fuck yeah! Noone messes with Derpy.:derpytongue2:

This is going to go so badly

Honestly?

Thank you, for writing this amazing fic.
The pacing was believable, the characters well-rounded and flawed (that's a VERY good thing....too many 'perfect pony's

I personally like it when a background pony is paired with an OC- because that adds a dimension of 'well, it COULD happen'

also, that dinky is a sister, rather than daughter.

Amazing fic.
10/10
:moustache: <--- moustache of approval!
-Radbunny

It was then I remembered that I hadn’t been on a ride like this since I was a filly myself.

Filly? Did you get a sex change or something?
Colt.*:twilightsmile:

So sad...:applecry:

That was a heartwarming story. :fluttercry: Loved it. You earn a moustache, my friend.:moustache:

Better than the mother fucking notebook.

2454608 I hope so. No one got Dementia and died in this story. :rainbowkiss:

You write the best romance, man.

It's said that the eyes are the gateway to the soul...:raritystarry:
Does that mean that Ditzy/Derpy has a soul so big that her eyes are struggling to hold it in check?:derpytongue2::heart::derpyderp2:
Does this also mean that she now has one and a half souls?:rainbowderp:
Oh well...
This was a nice read.:twilightsmile:
Also, I bet that the eyeball was eaten by the doctor or something since it was simply forgotten...:pinkiecrazy:

I AM A SELF-APPOINTED DERPY FAN AND I APPROVE THIS STORY:derpytongue2:

Kinda late but still
“Let’s do it.” she said, Her fears extinguished in a two word sentence.
that's three words.

2852013 :pinkiegasp:

Wow. I am so smarted. :pinkiecrazy:

Thanks for the catch. :twilightsmile:

ow man derpy why you make me cry :pinkiesad2:

great story love it read the how thing in one night lol :derpytongue2: anyway i will follow you and can not what for more story from you have a derpy day:derpyderp1:

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