Starlight is now on the path to reformation, but judging from her behavior as of late, it'd seem she still has quite a ways to go. It's become apparent to Twilight and her friends that Starlight is having a difficult time letting go of her questionable ideals about friendship. But they won't give up on her, not yet anyway.
However, Starlight's greatest challenge in changing herself for the better has now reared its head in the form of Laughingstock; a pony whose cutie mark she took but failed to convert to her ideology back in her village. He's now in Ponyville, desperate for work as his cutie mark is still mysteriously missing. As imagined, he's not happy with Starlight in the slightest. After all, living without a cutie mark but bearing one that reminds him of just who did this to him would make anyone mad.
Not helping is the fact that Starlight doesn't seem to feel too sorry about it.
Rated T for language and unfortunate circumstance.
That sentence, and the entire first paragraph along with it, make for a pretty boring beginning.
7138459 Did you intend to block me?
Interesting premise, to say the least. Though, I will point out that "everyone" is rarely used, and would be more canon to say "everypony". Also, bucking instead of the actual word.
7141245 Nearly every time I use the actual swear words, I get people going on that I should use the pony fandom equivalents instead, and whenever I use the pony equivalents of those words, I get comments from other people saying that the actual words have more emphasis behind them. I've tried both and I can't ever please everyone on that front so at some point I just said "screw it" and used the real swear words all the time. The story's rated T for language for a reason. It's just how I do things.
Besides in the situation Laughingstock is in that's meant to be taken as seriously as a heart attack, lets face it. Saying "Buck" in those situations would sound really stupid.
7141278 ah, you have my apologies, both for the prior comment and on behalf of the flip flop nature of readers.
Also, you're totally right. Buck would sound ridiculous.
7141668 You don't have to apologize for anything, you were just making an observation.
This looks good. And I think you have a better handle on writing Starlight than the actual show writers themselves!
7204420 Thank you.
I'm actually kind of proud of where I want this story to go. I just haven't had as much time as I'd like to write really ANYTHING because I'm finishing up my first year of college right now and I can't screw it up.
7204446 College first for you? Good. You have your priorities right.[/sincere]
7141245 It is more canon, but...they should be using "everyone" or "everybody" since not every being in Equestria is a pony. I wonder how Spike, Discord, the SENTIENT cows, the Donkeys, other dragons, serpents, and heck, even weird mutant Ahuizotl (however it is spelled) feel about constantly being excluded when talked about. It's as if they are non-beings since, well, they aren't part of "everypony" and why not "fucking" instead of "bucking"? As I said, not everyone can buck. I'd love to see Discord try and buck without defying the laws of physics, or one of the cows. Dragons can buck with their tail, but I'd call that "smacking".
7218933 I believe more than one story has touched upon that. As for the "everypony vs everybody" thing... well, there are other ones. "Everygriff" has been suggested, and a few others. Also, who says Discord can't "buck"? He can be a quadruped, if he chooses to.
Hope college is going well. :) And looks like Spike's day just went from 'bad' to 'oh dear sweet Celestia this is gonna hurt'.
Makes a lot of sense. Also, Laughingstock has a great point. Why the everloving hell wasn't she locked up?
Great chapter. Nice setting of the stage.
7378142 Starlight would just overpower her guards and escape or kill anypony she considers an enemy.
Many folks may not like it but Starlight has been shown time and time again to be stupidly powerful and that's why Twilight made her student, to help Starlight understand why she was wrong and put her power to use for the greater good.
7378954 In-universe, use a magic inhibition spell like we saw in Equestria Games.
Out-of-universe, just lock her up and say it sticks.
7380918 GG.
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Pls make more this is so cool
Oh... I sense big problems with Laughingstock later on.
If I remember correctly, Double Diamond is an Earth pony.
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Oh my God how did I remember that wrong. Fixed
I would have kept singing.
Something tells me he’s regretting not sending her to Tartarus.
Spike, get your fire ready.
Send the b*ch to f*cking Tartarus already.
I hope he does it.
Yup, he’s definitely regretting not sending her to Tartarus.
Guess you don’t want no food.
Glad I’m not the only one.
I wouldn’t mind if they did that.
Is she really blaming him?
I don’t know about that. He seems determined.
Please let this continue. I want to see him sucker punch starlight so bad.