• Member Since 19th Oct, 2011
  • offline last seen Nov 26th, 2012

UnluckyBoyHere


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Some of us know how complicated love can be, even more when your mind obsesses over someone that you know nothing about.

Jeff is a working, musician pony, a normal pony amongst the others. But some unexpected incident makes him stumble open someone who will follow his thoughts for a very long time.

For all of those who speak english natively, you might notice lots of mistakes. I am not a native english speaker, so any helps with grammar is much appreciated!

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Comments ( 1 )
#1 · Nov 23rd, 2011 · · ·

Not half bad. Other than some grammar, a few confusing sentences, and figuring out which character was talking at certain points, I give this a thumbs up.

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