Is it creepy, if not at the least mildly that I can't wait for the next chapter? Also, can't see the paragraph you have italicized on this format it seems, might just be the way i have it set though. Good job on this one.
This is the worst thing ive ever read . Morally of course. In all other respects its rather interesting
i feel like a monster for wishing for more Fluttershy rape though. Still, having Princess Celestia turn into Princess Molestia is just pure gold. Even if the erotica scenes are curiously turned down (im guessing its because this site doesnt allow true clop yet, i wonder if you or someone else will update the concept when it does?)
1598 The lack of true adult erotica is my own personal preferance. If I really really wanted to, I could write it with all the explicit little details... but that is something I chose to leave behind.
Also I felt disappointed with the fluttershy rape because it was by far the shortest scene from the rest. It was like *Bam* your rape and now for a smoke, while the others were more (without sounding creepy) detailed. But I still should feel sick for reading and enjoying this.
I'm hoping the next chapter will have more details about Fluttershy's rape. Unfortunately it looks like no chance of CMC rape, but I have high hopes for another rape threesome with Molestia/Trixie/Twilight.
1665 Nope. The reason for a short fluttershy rape scene is because I love fluttershy, and I think her a bit too sweet to have burdened by a public rape scene.... may go back and change that though.
I realised later i hadnt rated this, so i gave it five stars because i truly believe it deserves it. Unique concept, excellent characterization, author-bravery, and fantastic writing style. the fact you can avoid almost all references to anything truly explicit and still make it a good deal more erotic than most works is impressive and to be commended.
My one single request is that we see more from the reactions of the ponies post everything. i especially want to see the sheer awkwardness that Big Mac and AJ are gonna be going through once they wake up and have to clean themselves up. Someone helping Fluttershy deal with her issues would also be sweet, and Pinkie is still traumatised. Rarity actually seemed to enjoy it, and having such a variety of viewpoints could make for some truly interesting psychological work.
Im also really looking forward to how they all treat Celestia once she has been cured, and whether Luna will try to avoid blame for fear of being banished again.
So once again i say well done, you fantastic morally bankrupt genius. i also totally understand the decision to exclude Fluttershy rape if shes your favourite. I wanna protect her just as much
1665 I have several endings in mind, all too juicy to let go alone. SO, I am going to make alternate ending chapters, just to tickle my, and all of yours' fancies ;D
"Imagine a headset with a microphone, and a small sound comes out of the speakers on the ears. That sound travels over to the microphone nearby, which picks it up and amplifies it. The same, yet louder sound then comes out of the speaker and gets picked up by the microphone."
I think the words you're looking for are "feedback loop". It's a rather common acoustical phenomenon with recording equipment.
I wonder how the ponies will cope with those memories on their souls, and their minds stained? maybe twilight has a memory erasing spell? or perhaps an UNSEE button? this whole thing makes me want to vomit but im addicted to it. (totally abusing the anonymous post)
I'm surprised they brought only 3 guards. Molestia will eat through them in no time. Luna's original plan was better, and I'm far from questioning the wisdom of having reserves (and throwing lots of weak red shirts to slow down a superior enemy). This may be to reduce the number of ponnies who will need their meories altered afterwards, but 20+ guards knew already anyway.
I don't like Trixie getting thrown into this. "Of Fillies" had profesor Frosty Gaze, a very scary and cometent magic teacher from Princess Celestia's school for gifted unicorns. Somepony like that would be more fitting. Trixie is just too annoying.
I'm also surprised that they enjoy sex and feel awful afterwards. This brings crediblity to statement "rape is a woman who changed her mind afterwards".
Luna seems to be the one best coping with rape. Perhabs this comes from age, being allicorn and her past (getting beaten up by sister and sent to the moon changed her perspective on being violated). I'm surprised she lasted so short tough, I expected hours or even days from her.
Oh, and you got Fluttershy's alignment correct. She is every bit as stupid good as in Fallout Equestria. Rushing in to try help somepony who she can't possibly help (and physically will be alright) and get owned *after* said friend made a sacrifice so Fluttershy doesn't have to is exactly her menatlity.
Wow this is... very... erotic. I kind of wish that there was more mention of Molestia putting her horn in the place between their legs, or Mac getting it on with Molestia and her sucking his... well, you get the idea. But I still totally got a wingboner from this, even without that stuff.
I spot a problem. Parchment is made from treated animal skins( like that of a cow or sheep), i doubt ponies would kill other animals for skin. As seen in some of the episodes, both cows and sheep in the show speak the same language as the ponies, which would make it murder, which would make murder LEGAL in Equestria.
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Is it creepy, if not at the least mildly that I can't wait for the next chapter? Also, can't see the paragraph you have italicized on this format it seems, might just be the way i have it set though. Good job on this one.
YES YES!
CHAPTER 6!
I kinda wanted to read more of that "Flutter Shy Rape" scen... but whatever...
Damn just making Twilight submit to Molestia. I bet everypony's gonna have to watch too! OMG
I wanna get AJ and Big Mac's reactions too. Can't wait
I hate myself for loving this
What about Applejack? GODDAMNIT WHAT HAPPENED TO APPLEJACK
This makes me want to cry. Molestia disturbs me. I want more.
This is the worst thing ive ever read . Morally of course. In all other respects its rather interesting
i feel like a monster for wishing for more Fluttershy rape though. Still, having Princess Celestia turn into Princess Molestia is just pure gold. Even if the erotica scenes are curiously turned down (im guessing its because this site doesnt allow true clop yet, i wonder if you or someone else will update the concept when it does?)
That was... my reaction.
1598
The lack of true adult erotica is my own personal preferance. If I really really wanted to, I could write it with all the explicit little details... but that is something I chose to leave behind.
What is this I don't even...
1606
For the quote, is it the vampire queen Carmilla?
Also I felt disappointed with the fluttershy rape because it was by far the shortest scene from the rest. It was like *Bam* your rape and now for a smoke, while the others were more (without sounding creepy) detailed. But I still should feel sick for reading and enjoying this.
I'm hoping the next chapter will have more details about Fluttershy's rape.
Unfortunately it looks like no chance of CMC rape, but I have high hopes for another rape threesome with Molestia/Trixie/Twilight.
1665 Nope.
The reason for a short fluttershy rape scene is because I love fluttershy, and I think her a bit too sweet to have burdened by a public rape scene.... may go back and change that though.
As for the reference....
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gD_wyzSaMdk
I realised later i hadnt rated this, so i gave it five stars because i truly believe it deserves it. Unique concept, excellent characterization, author-bravery, and fantastic writing style. the fact you can avoid almost all references to anything truly explicit and still make it a good deal more erotic than most works is impressive and to be commended.
My one single request is that we see more from the reactions of the ponies post everything. i especially want to see the sheer awkwardness that Big Mac and AJ are gonna be going through once they wake up and have to clean themselves up. Someone helping Fluttershy deal with her issues would also be sweet, and Pinkie is still traumatised. Rarity actually seemed to enjoy it, and having such a variety of viewpoints could make for some truly interesting psychological work.
Im also really looking forward to how they all treat Celestia once she has been cured, and whether Luna will try to avoid blame for fear of being banished again.
So once again i say well done, you fantastic morally bankrupt genius. i also totally understand the decision to exclude Fluttershy rape if shes your favourite. I wanna protect her just as much
1665 I have several endings in mind, all too juicy to let go alone. SO, I am going to make alternate ending chapters, just to tickle my, and all of yours' fancies ;D
Oh Jesus, don't let Molestia do it with Spike and The CMC's. PLEASE LEAVE THEM THE &@%$ ALONE!
If there are alt endings, I would love to see Trixe perform an EPIC FAIL and somehow end up with a weird and creative punishment.
Lets make it clear, I'm reading this FOR THE PLOT...
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I still hate myself...
Is it just me,or do these icons fit the story?
How'd it take me so long to find this? This is golden, hahaha.
i hate myself for wanting more of this
I literally had all of those reactions. /derp
before, i wasnt going to comment on this. then celestia got fluttershy.
ALL. MY. RAGE.
"Imagine a headset with a microphone, and a small sound comes out of the speakers on the ears. That sound travels over to the microphone nearby, which picks it up and amplifies it. The same, yet louder sound then comes out of the speaker and gets picked up by the microphone."
I think the words you're looking for are "feedback loop". It's a rather common acoustical phenomenon with recording equipment.
Its the queen of blades I know it i saw what u did thar
FLUTTERSHY NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
I wonder how the ponies will cope with those memories on their souls, and their minds stained? maybe twilight has a memory erasing spell? or perhaps an UNSEE button? this whole thing makes me want to vomit but im addicted to it. (totally abusing the anonymous post)
I'm surprised they brought only 3 guards. Molestia will eat through them in no time. Luna's original plan was better, and I'm far from questioning the wisdom of having reserves (and throwing lots of weak red shirts to slow down a superior enemy). This may be to reduce the number of ponnies who will need their meories altered afterwards, but 20+ guards knew already anyway.
I don't like Trixie getting thrown into this. "Of Fillies" had profesor Frosty Gaze, a very scary and cometent magic teacher from Princess Celestia's school for gifted unicorns. Somepony like that would be more fitting. Trixie is just too annoying.
I'm also surprised that they enjoy sex and feel awful afterwards. This brings crediblity to statement "rape is a woman who changed her mind afterwards".
Luna seems to be the one best coping with rape. Perhabs this comes from age, being allicorn and her past (getting beaten up by sister and sent to the moon changed her perspective on being violated). I'm surprised she lasted so short tough, I expected hours or even days from her.
Oh, and you got Fluttershy's alignment correct. She is every bit as stupid good as in Fallout Equestria. Rushing in to try help somepony who she can't possibly help (and physically will be alright) and get owned *after* said friend made a sacrifice so Fluttershy doesn't have to is exactly her menatlity.
1598
You're kidding me right? Cupcakes...
NOOOOOO!!!!! I was so upset when she got to Pinkie, my favorite pony, but now FLUTTERSHY?!?!?
Ugh, i'm gonna be sick
all i can say is
I think after all this is over, they need to have their memories wiped. Especially AJ and Macintosh.
i suck and i know it
also this story is very bad for the soul
1693 i think you screwed the pooch on that one (forgive the bad pun)
but you could have done so much with that seen
everyone already knows that flutts has secret desires and passons (including bondage)
why would you pass up that opprotunit?
I love this so much...
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I hate myself.
My reaction...
why fluttershy!?
That feeling you described as human? I didn't get that. This scares me
Wow this is... very... erotic. I kind of wish that there was more mention of Molestia putting her horn in the place between their legs, or Mac getting it on with Molestia and her sucking his... well, you get the idea. But I still totally got a wingboner from this, even without that stuff.
At the VERY least, at least fluttershy's bit was short...
It will be quick and painless...
I HATE YOU I HATE YOU ...alright im done next chapter
gotchya
Twilight is SO SCREWED.
According to the Auithor's Note, I'm not human... I'm cool with that.
the italicized paragraph, DAMN what was that book called?!
I spot a problem. Parchment is made from treated animal skins( like that of a cow or sheep), i doubt ponies would kill other animals for skin. As seen in some of the episodes, both cows and sheep in the show speak the same language as the ponies, which would make it murder, which would make murder LEGAL in Equestria.
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EVIL
WHY ON EARTH DID U GET FLUTTERSHY INTO THIS?!?!?!?!?! ( thx for keeping it short though)