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When Apple Bloom and the other Cutie Mark Crusaders have an unusual run-in with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon that leaves the farm filly perplexed, she sets out to discover the cause behind Diamond's sudden and unexplained misery.
What does the rich pony, who should be happy with all the worldly possessions she could ever possibly want, have to be depressed about? Is there anything that Apple Bloom can even do about it?
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very interesting story. really looking forward to the next chapters! well done!
6933209 As am I looking forward to writing the next chapters. Currently making an outline for myself so that I know where I want to go with it. I might want to edit my author's note since I noticed that I said it's slightly AU and AU has its own category and I don't feel its enough AU to support that claim. xD
AWESOME cant wait for the next chapter
Boo.
6935868 I know right?
Good old DiamondBloom. let see how things will go.
6935950 Know what? I need a challenge! Mind if I copy this concept and
write a better storychallenge it on my own merits?6936182 I am honored you feel that way. Because that means my story currently consisting of less than 3000 words made you feel something. Thank you .
6936589 Hah. I like you!
Most comments I get on fimfiction always responds to me in stride. Does that mean you're a troll like me? 
6936666 Maybe.
I would like to have a new chapter please.
Honestly I'm not sure if I like those shards, because of what they can do or how they could affect a story and stuff like that. However nice chapter.
Pinkie really shouldn't give them those shards, because even if I like to think that Rarity doesn't have to be as .....she is desplayed more then often enough, the Crusaiders could see stuff they aren't meant to see.
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Don't worry. Apple Bloom gave them back to Pinkie and said that she didn't think they were cut out for spying. I was trying to think of a way for Pinkie to help them and that's what I came up with. I had an alternative that I could have went with that would have involved them physically going to the Diamond estate to spy on them that would give them this same information that they got from the scrying crystal.
While it does have a lot more potential for creating interesting points in the plot, I have done a scene like that in another story of mine and wanted to create something different that adheres to my style of writing, which seems to be sometimes going off the wall like this. I find it really interesting to just write and see what I come up with, and that's what happened here.
I never intended these to be used more than this one time, and I carefully constructed the scene to not give out more information than I wanted to. I also did it in such a way that made it apparent (at least I think I did) that it was hard for them to control the scrying crystals.
That being said, I do somewhat feel dissatisfied by the scene for my own reasons. At a later date, I may create an alternative chapter two that is more traditional which wouldn't change the overall progression of the story. Just a few details here in there.
7715969 hhhmm okay, then it should be okay I guess.
Do you write somewhere else too?
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Yes i write on fanfic.net, fictionpress, tgstorytime...also own stuff i will one day publish. Right now im only active on this site and fanfic
Now that would be odd... considering she's equine.
7732489 haha, I know right?
Just for future reference, the butler's name is Randolph. It's highly likely she has more than one butler, though, so there's no need to worry.
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Good to know!
MORE!!
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Of course there will be more.
But i must sleep for now.
7764013 fair deal
So far so good! I'm looking forward to seeing where you're going with this story.
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Oh hey Battlecat! Thanks for reading my story.
I have a lot of stuff planned for it for sure. So excited for it that sometimes its hard to contain it and not blurt out what will happen. You know what I mean?
GOD DAMMIT SPOILED!! NOT ALL FRIENDS WILL BETRAY YOU!!
Spoiled literally lives in the town of the Elements of Harmony and the Princess of Friendship. Why the heck does she think so lowly of friendship.
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For this story, I have taken my interpretation of her actions from the "Crusaders of the Lost Mark" episode and accentuated them to highlight a possibly deeper problem causing her to want to be better than others in terms of power and wealth. Also, as I stated in the previous chapter Diamond's been suffering from an acute case of depression brought on by a lack of friendship, and from my understanding of depression is if it can be found in one person then genetically they can end up passing it off to their offspring. I would know, as I have had my own case of depression and seen it in my own mother.
That being said, I do realize that its ironic that she lives among the harmonies of friendship, yet in my story she doesn't trust in the power of friendship. I have no bearing on whether this is actually true or not, as I've not seen her outright say something even remotely close to that in the show, but for the sake of this story I wanted to highlight a backdrop onto her character that differed from her typical antagonistic features that I have found in the few stories I have read about her.
In conclusion, it was just a hypothesis on my part.
Curiously, my plans for her in this story are more deeply rooted than the simple betrayal of a friend long, long ago. I believe I'll have to be adding her onto my story tags, and possibly an AU tag if you believe that she is OOC? I mean, I possibly need it already.
I don't know if this answered the question or not, but hopefully my reasoning for where I took this story made some modicum of sense. I apologize for the long-winded reply and if it wasn't to your liking.
I like how this fic is delving more deeply into the character moments that happened in Crusaders of the Lost Mark. While that episode was great, there wasn't a whole lot of time to explore Diamond Tiara beyond a pretty basic level.
I have to say though that the songs just don't work for me. In the best possible scenario it's not really a song, it's just poetry. And they don't scan too well to me.
I'm interested to learn more about Spoiled Rich's backstory and where you're going with her.
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Understandable. I need to get around to editing this story one day. A lot of other things sprouted up in my life, and other works that I still need to finish for my followers. I apologize, but I am almost guaranteed to keep them in there after the edits. Personal preference of mine.
Will this ever continue?
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There are a lot of stories on here I want to continue. However, if I am to ever truly be stress-free enough to write anything, I must get my life back on track.
I do long for the return of my days where I dont have to work 70+ hours a week.
but there is an end to my tunnel. It's in sight now. I must continue pressing forward, for my family, friends, loves ones. You guys. Myself.
Believe me, I am just as frustrated by not having the time to work on my stories as I suspect you might be. I have high hopes of returning to all my stories once I knock down a few more of my debts, though. ...I have a lot of them...
I loving the character growth and redemption arc. I really hope this isn't abandoned.