• Member Since 10th Jun, 2012
  • offline last seen Mar 18th, 2015


I'm a brony. I do most of my Fanfiction on Fanfiction.net but since i started a story called Fallout: New Pegasus, I thought that I would upload some of that story here.

Comments ( 41 )

It has a few punctuation missing here and there and the perks at the end was interesting for me.

Otherwise - pretty good story.

Your story is not bad, really. Just chapters are so short, and small amount of character's development, and details... It's just like read someone's journal about their adventure, really. I like it, I think. :pinkiehappy:

Thanks for the feedback. Im still a developing writer so im always improving.

Man how y get so many dislikes? Keep writing if you like to it. And do not pay attention on downvotes.

Thanks. I dont know why i got the dislikes, nor do I care about them. I do what I like and like what I do. besides, everyone is entitled to their own opinion.:pinkiehappy:

Here we go, tracking and green thumb coming right up! :moustache:

Interesting, shall continue reading later

Not bad man, lets see how this progresses :eeyup:

lol nice job with rhe rhyming, i see what you did there when you wanted to stop rhyming though hahah.
A couple good quotes:

'What happened, did you hit your head or something?" Twilight asks.
'Or something.'

I step through the wreckage and hear another one of Hawkens signature takedowns, a shotgun to the life.

I wonder if flare will ever be able to fly again

I said the point of the story was primarily comedy

GAH it took me so long to finish reading this chapter. I want my comp back and I want it NOOOOOOOOOOOOOW! :applecry:

Hmm this last chapters better written that previous. I approve it. Keep it up. :twilightsmile:

Lol to the wingboners...

We pass by a hotel that has fire everywhere. But I can tell that what really catches Hawkens eye are all of the whores in socks and panties.

Really dean? :unsuresweetie:

but now he can't fly...humm :trixieshiftright:

Edit: yes he can, duhhhh

lolol ok then!

Finally caught up :pinkiehappy: good work :twilightsmile:

Black Mountain, with Alicorn Army of Doom. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
:yay: More pink taint.

Alright, so it does turns out I'm just an idiot that can't scroll down on a webpage. :pinkiecrazy: However, I eventually found the story! After... you know.... being told three times where it was.... :twilightsheepish:

Interesting.......... Will read :twilightsmile: later :rainbowlaugh:



uhhh, whatever you say chibz... :twilightblush:

NA, THIS MAKES ME MUCH MORE BADASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*sigh* :facehoof:

Hope you continue this. Great story so far.

Login or register to comment