“It is a never-ending labor, but one we take to well.” Vera said
The period here is supposed to be a comma since it's still a continuation of the sentence/same clause and not the end of it.
Further down, there's this:
“I'm so sorry!” She exclaimed
It's still a continuation of the same sentence, so the 'She' in this case needn't be capitalised.
Same here:
“Let's see. Aloe mentioned wishing to try a new candle fragrance for the spa.” She told herself
In addition to replacing the period with a comma, the following word, in this case 'She', should be lower case.
Her sisters Lotus and Aloe often left
Generally when giving names in this kind of a context, one would normally use commas.
Her sisters, Lotus and Aloe, often left
You do this in the opening paragraph, which is a good example.
“That'll be 15 bits, miss Vera.
It comes down to clauses, which you can read up on >here<.
Also, since 'Miss' is a proper noun in this context, it should be capitalised.
“Mr.” and “Ms.,” of course, are uppercase before a name. “Mrs.,” which is less commonly used than it was several decades ago and which derives from the honorific “Mistress,” is also capitalized before a name. Same goes for “Miss,” which is usually reserved for a younger girl.
Due to my anality when it comes to grammar... minor, and at the same time, consistent grammar errors make the story, at least for me, annoying to read. I'll still upvote the story, yet since the grammar errors detract from my ability to enjoy the story, I'll abstain from reading until they're fixed.
A promising start! A few strange word and grammar hiccups here and there but other than that, good work!
On a completely different note...
The period here is supposed to be a comma since it's still a continuation of the sentence/same clause and not the end of it.
Further down, there's this:
It's still a continuation of the same sentence, so the 'She' in this case needn't be capitalised.
Same here:
In addition to replacing the period with a comma, the following word, in this case 'She', should be lower case.
Generally when giving names in this kind of a context, one would normally use commas.
You do this in the opening paragraph, which is a good example.
It comes down to clauses, which you can read up on >here<.
Also, since 'Miss' is a proper noun in this context, it should be capitalised.
“Mr.” and “Ms.,” of course, are uppercase before a name. “Mrs.,” which is less commonly used than it was several decades ago and which derives from the honorific “Mistress,” is also capitalized before a name. Same goes for “Miss,” which is usually reserved for a younger girl.
Due to my anality when it comes to grammar... minor, and at the same time, consistent grammar errors make the story, at least for me, annoying to read. I'll still upvote the story, yet since the grammar errors detract from my ability to enjoy the story, I'll abstain from reading until they're fixed.
I see someone likes Rebels.
Vera x Rumble? That's a new one. I'll read when I can.