Fluttershy and Discord are torn apart by him reading her diary, but Rainbow Dash is confused of why that would tear a relationship apart so easily. Soarin and her had fights all the time, but not once have they considered a break-up. Well, at least he hasn't thought about it. Rainbow Dash had plenty of reasons that a break-up would be necessary. But she doesn't find these feelings until a certain evening. Fluttershy's Birthday. By the end, Soarin and Discord, however, are not very happy. But they have to learn the hard way how to pay attention to their marefriends feelings.
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Awww! I don't even like this ship but I love the story
Um, I'm not a fan of FlutterCord or SoarinDash, but that doesn't mean I'm into the couples breaking up so Fluttershy and Rainbow can be together. Sorry, but this doesn't sound like my thing.
There are problems with the writing, but I'm sorry to say that I don't know how you can correct them. I think it would require a completely different mind to change it. But, that doesn't subtract from the Flutterdash in and of itself. If it ends with Flutterdash, I am at ease.
Which is funny, because the ending, as far as writing is concerned, is actually better than the middle. I think you're like me, and probably like a majority of people. You know where you want things to go, and you know what you ultimately want to happen. It's just that getting there takes some work. Or I'm wrong, and don't know what the hell I'm talking about. Either way, decent job.
6924858 Thank you
6925010 Thanks fine. Thank you for reading, anyways
6925089 ya, i kinda just started writing. i didnt even know where i was going, but i think by the end it sorta worked out
Thank you for the feedback
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Uh, I didn't. I just caught sight of it when it appeared on my 'FlutterDash' group alert. I was just telling you why I decided to pass. Sorry for the confusion.
6925367 okie Dokie Lokie
This was a cute story to edit.
/10.
6925814 Thanks
And thank goodness you did, otherwise it would have sucked!
;:( soarindash
Sorry but I have to say it for it is my destiny
BOSS SOARINDASH BOSS
As a constant FlutterDash reader and other stuff, which you do not have the right to ask, and you giving me, well us the freedom to criticize your fic. Like the people who commented before are right. There are problem in the fic that could be and can not be fixed. To me, this fic was more like a idea being forced to be written. Don't take this comment negative. Howe er you do got something going with this. I only got one option for you to make this fic better. Re-right it, by giving a little more details in the story. I know writing staying on character is difficult, it not easy I know. So yea, re-write the fic, give the character more emotion or some what, add more detail, don't force it, and...
Keep on writing.
6926707 Thank you so much for the tips. I realized that when I finished writing it, but I couldn't figure out what was wrong. I will go back and add details when I have time
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sorry that we have different opinions
6927098 yea lol
I can definitely see discord loving fluttershy but the feeling isn't mutual. I felt the pacing was a little off, but I still enjoyed it.
6969374 thank you. I know the pacing is off.
What a strange turn of events
7019366 indeed. Thank you for not leaving any hate, considering your passion for SoarinDash
FelineFluff SOARINDASH may be my favorite ship but I accept other ships like FLUTTERDASH
7021468 good point
I'm glad you have good shipping sense
7047349 she did, but she was so shocked about everything going on she just cried in the corner instead
7062437 its alright! Your not offending me by accidentally putting random characters.
Adorable
7133443 thanks
To be honest Kindda weird But still nice story
I hate SoarinDash but... The puppy eyes I imaged Soarin making were too much. And FlutterCord breaking off so painfully... Poor Discord and Soarin.
I like FlutterDash, but why did it have to happen this way?
Wait a minute... If Fluttershy and Dash are now together... Then their ex-boyfriends could be together too! SOARINCORD FOREVER!!!! YEEAAAAAHHH!!!
Or maybe not?... Na, it'll work.
Flutterdash for life this is on of the best short storys i ever read
