You sir are a blaggard and a nincompoop

Sitting at breakfast in Canterlot prince Blue-Blood receives a letter calling out his atrocious behavior towards ponies at the grand galloping gala what will the prince think of this and who wrote it ?

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Cheer

Cheer #1 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

You Definitely need an editor. It started out pretty good with letter and reaction but then the end with the guards, Celestia, the manticore. Those to me personally set off the feeling of the story.

But my personal gripes aside, you still need an editor. There's grammar, punctuation and spelling errors abound.

Bronzedragon

Bronzedragon #2 · Feb 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Like the premise but as has been said needs editing.
found these with a quick look this does not include the grammar and punctuation that I do not feel qualified to point out. good start.

"But i'm a prince ( [ I'm ] several instances of this one])
just because of there standing [ their ]
the princesses raised there heads [ their ]
guard bowed the stood up again. [ then ]
"Rely that's a shame [ really ]
I guess it cant be helped [ can't ]
smirk and a chuckle ( ? ) she rises from her [ as ]
Blue-Blood's going to have a ruff morning [ rough ]
Blue-Blood rose from the fettle position [ fetal ]
towels to dry of he hear a low growling noise. [ off, hears ]
I was board and saw a picture [ bored ]
as a Certain blue alicorn [ certain ] blue alicorn sat on the room of the cast [ ??????? ]

MythrilMoth

MythrilMoth #3 · Feb 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Not reading this, but the title caught my attention because you're using a word you don't actually know how to spell and probably don't even know the meaning of.

There is no such word as "blaggard". The actual word is "blackguard".

Minalkra

Minalkra #4 · Feb 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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I thought he meant 'braggart.'

EDIT: Saying it out loud, yeah I can see blackguard in there.

Cytotoxin

Cytotoxin #5 · Feb 9th, 2016 · 4 · ·

Flaky and rushed. And kind of... pointless.

There`s more to revenge then juvenile pranks and mean letters. Something most people here seem to fail to grasp.

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Blaggard does exist as a word. It`s an obvious corruption of "blackguard", obviously, but by now it does have it`s meaning and is a word in it`s own right.

Bobby Dole

Bobby Dole #6 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

Can't tell if the title is meant to be "Blackguard" or "Braggart".

CaiusTheShadowPony

CaiusTheShadowPony #7 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

Yeah i need an editor to help me out with this stuff was not to bothered with this one just got a bit board and decided to mess around thanks for the constructive criticism though

CaiusTheShadowPony

CaiusTheShadowPony #8 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

6918028 https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/blaggard

The Great Derpsby

The Great Derpsby #9 · Feb 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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And yet, ironically enough, the sketch where the title's taken from actually uses "braggart".

Which is of course much worse than threatening to kill someone or siccing dangerous animals on them for personal amusement.

Actually, considering his aunts, I'm surprised Blueblood didn't turn out worse.

CaiusTheShadowPony

CaiusTheShadowPony #10 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

6917816 Thank you for pointing those out for me

MythrilMoth

MythrilMoth #11 · Feb 9th, 2016 · · ·

6918602 Wiktionary is proof of nothing. That's like using Urban Dictionary to back yourself up. Regardless, the proper spelling is "blackguard". I'm simply trying to inform you of something here. Being defensive about it or trying to "win" a pointless argument instead of simply accepting that you made a mistake and correcting it is bad form.

WestRail642fan