Pinkie Pie and Twilight Sparkle have been accidentally locked in a vault in the Royal Canterlot Bank. With the vault soundproof, windowless, and immune to magic and even Pinkie’s methods of… Pinkie-ness, they cannot escape for several hours. They use this time for shenanigans and introspection.
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Ahah! I've found another underrated writer!
Not only is the grammar pretty much impeccable, but there's this gem:
Although I suppose a severe economic downturn would constitute a "bank account emergency"!
That actually makes sense.
.. Wait! Pinkie Pie makes sense?! That doesn't make any sense!
Lost in Twilight's safe-deposit box?
The formatting is very good, the story is easy to read.
Good story!
Let's see how / when / if they got out.
Also: Twilight trapped with Pinkie? How long till Twilight will get crazy?
I think I have some Idea what the next chapter is called.
6909471 Yes, it is!
I'm going to keep an eye on this as it has the potential to be very amusing.
I look forward to reading more.
A very good start to what I'm going to reasonably and mostly safely assume Will be a good story. You earned yourself a like and a fave fellow writer.
Wouldn't that BE a "bank account emergency"?
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6910321 3 Bits says three hour if she not talking. 5 hours if pinkie is talking.
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*reads next chapter*
Pinkie is talking a lot and Twilight didn't go crazy. It seems you owe me 3 Bits.
If you ever need a new job, you can always become a spy!
Wow, when I started that story, Ididn't expect a story with that much background about Pinkie Pie and the whole "Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie"-thing.
I'm curious what happens next.
I just hope the vault has air ducts.
This is shaping up to be more interesting then I had thought it would be, I thought this was going to be just a comedy but it seems it's going deeper then that. I look forwards to reading more.
This feels like something that should be the second to last chapter. Something that's built up to over the course of the story. Suddenly having this deep conversation after only being trapped for 15 minutes feels off from a story pacing perspective.
Did Pinkie forget that Twilight DID try to figure her out before?
6946404 The point of this sudden spillage of feelings is part of what I'm trying to paint Pinkie as. It's not explicitly stated (which it probably should be in retrospect), but Pinkie sees this time with Twilight as an opportunity to approach the topic of, well, herself. She's had plenty of opportunities for this in the past, but it's now that she knows neither of them have any distractions or chances to be interrupted. Though, for all she knows, she has several hours to tiptoe around such a thing and approach the subject more tactfully, 15 minutes into being trapped in a vault is a golden chance for her.
6946419 As a scientific anomaly rather than as a friend, yes.
6945810 Not yet how many hours has went by?
*reads chapter*
Dang it, I do own you bits.
*hoofs over bits*
Holy shit, not a SINGLE dislike in a matter of 12 weeks! Good job m8!
EDIT: why do i say things
Okay...
Did it work?
Nice chapter!
But it's good Twilight became a princess: If she breaks (=destroys) the vault door, the bank would likely want a refund. (And a completely new one, since this door isn't unbreakable anymore)
Edit: It's in the feature-box.
Wait until the story is finished to invite trolls to the party
...plus the audience's viewpoint.
Finnaly an update! I've been waiting for this to update for some.time.and I am.not disappointed. Looking forward to the next chapter god sir
Wow, so they had every thing they needed to leave.
Are you kidding?
That was great!
So....sequel following their nre friendship as Two trys to help her be understood by the others?
Great story and some how the anticlimactic ending fits the story with how you wrote tjr whole thing
That was nice, to the point ending. Nothing more really needed to be said, but it got its point across with a nice couple of jokes as well
Family Guy did it!
[Edit: I should have read the next paragraph before I typed this... I'll leave it in anyway.]
And so the story concludes!
Everything is sucessfully unlocked.
If you think about it:
Hiding the manual to break a vault inside the vault itself makes totally sense. You only learn how to break it after you already broke it.
In case you didn't noticed: You are in the feature-box. Congratulations!
Well done! I particularly like fics that portray Pinkie as actually being quite intelligent. Hope to see more soon!
*tips hat* Well done sir, I hath been enlightened.
Read all four chapters; commenting on all of them here:
This was a pretty interesting read, as we got to see a side of Pinkie that most (myself included, I admit) don't really get to see explored very often, in that Pinkie is much more intelligent that she makes herself appear to be, whether it's on purpose or otherwise.
One part I especially thought was a neat idea was how the words they used while playing that board game related to what they were actually doing at the same time. That was particularly ingenious.
Anyway, this is certainly getting a fave from me. Keep up the good work.
I´m surprised no one made a joke about breaking the fourth wall.
Wait. Pinkie already did that.
There. It´s done.
Hm such a surprising depth to our favorite pink party pony. Just for that you're getting a thumbs up. I'm enjoying this so far and I have more to go.
Well I will say that yes it's not a very good ending. It is by far not even remotely close to being the worse ending I have ever written*.....
....I meant read. And in retrospect one can argue that even some of the very best of the stories on this site or anywhere really could have been done better. The way I see it almost anything can be improved upon.
Well I enjoyed this fun little story. I really enjoyed your take on Pinkie as well.
*I left this here because I found it very funny and I hope others do too.
-BFBL
Sweet bottle story
apparently word tiles is not the same as scrabble, since pinkie's first move is impossible in scrabble
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Good joke. Very Pinkie.
Twilight snuggled with Pinkie by her side, her back resting against the wall of the vault. All things considered, it wasn't that bad to spend one night sleeping through that situation.
"Hey, Twilight?" feebly asked Pinkie. "I just remembered something."
"What is it?" asked Twilight, without opening her eyes.
"Tomorrow is Sunday."
Slowly, Twilight opened her eyes and said one word only.
"****!"
This is gonna be fun.
Huh. This shows Pinkie has a lot of depth. Nice of her to show this to Twi.
Quite amusing and insighful.
Ha.