7628492 Glad you're enjoying it! Lemme know what you liked about it!

Now I really want to know how long he's been stuck here.

7628855 next chapter!

7628666 I like that it is from Rarity's point of view. Tho this was interesting as well.

7629940 Yeah the majority of discovery and perspective is going to be Rarity, but I really wanted to get that Last scene in somwhere, and the cat-fish, I thought that's be kinda funny.

7630363 I really like that idea a lot.

7633349 I blinked three times after I wrote that bit of dialog, not knowing what I just done. Then I was like...'I see what I did there'.

Let me know your other thoughts and feelings it really encourages me to write more, and faster too!

That moment near the end, with it, this is one of the most realistic interpretations to what a human would resort to if trapped in a world like the MLP-verse. Alone, strange creatures and possibly stuck forever, I could see why he was about to take that route.

That was good, while I admit there is certain stuff that I'm automaticly skipping, mostly if I' curious about a certain moment, but his behavior in this possible new world was interessting.

I don't need an explanation, but it seems like he was already there from the start of the story right?, in Equestria I mean.

so... many... exclamation points.... The writing is okay but suddenly! Exclamation points! every sentence!

A somber tone to set the story. Very serious and almost overwhelmingly sad. I hope this poor man's situation improves.

previous night until tired enough to fall asleep

Until he was tired enough to fall asleep.

The cat-fish would be his main course for tonight. Its taste being similar to the ones back home, which he enjoyed.

Minor nitpick, but we already know they're similar to 'the ones back home' because you said so beforehand.

then laid his meal -seasoned and wrapped in clay - directly on the hot embers.

A lot of people do this differently, but generally speaking it's supposed to look more like

then laid his meal--seasoned and wrapped in clay--directly on the hot embers.

or

then laid his meal -- seasoned and wrapped in clay -- directly on the hot embers.

You ask me that every timeI come back

Space between time and I.

" 'm sorry... but I waited for as long as I could..."

Either missing I, or misplaced space if you mean for him to slur words.

Pretty interesting start to a story. I'll be sure to read some more when I get some time.

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Thank you so much for this! Made all the changes, and found a few extras along the way.

Either missing I, or misplaced space if you mean for him to slur words.

He'll be slurring. Was never sure what the best way was. either 'M or 'm, with or without a space.

Wanted to ask what you thought of my use of my use of asterisks for 'sound effects'? Just italicizing them doesn't make them stand out to me. But if it makes it easier on readers then I'll change it, unless it's just a personal preference kind of deal. I certainly really like it.

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No problem at all!
Sound effects are definitely up to personal preference.

They still have their cat-teeth and fangs; and their bite hurts like a mother !

My mother has NEVER bite me thank you! ^^

But it hurts a little, try doing it when there’s a surprise inside like a snake of god forbid an Alligator!

This started with bad jokes and an almost suicide, bery good this is promising

Fwip! Splash! "Finally," the hunter grumbled in annoyance, as he reeled in his latest catch.

Oh, before I forget! If you're thinking about trying to catch some cat-fish by 'noodling' for them.

DON'T. DO. IT.

One perspective at a time, author.

Well, of course you aren't going to find Dog Fish in the Everfree. They're a salt-water species. (Haven't you heard of Sea Dogs? )

This whole cat/dog-fish thing made me feel more anxious than suicide tbh