Not really big on fanfic writing, but when I'm in the mood I'll jot something down from time to time. I'd much rather frequent sites like YouTube, DeviantArt, and Facebook
Set in alternate Equestria Sombra timeline.
A soldier serving King Sombra in the Crystal Empire/Equestria War asks his higher-ranking superior if they're actually fighting on the side of good or not. Spoiler alert; they're not, actually.
Idea came to me from watching a Nazi sketch from That Mitchell And Webb Look. God, those guys are funny as heck.
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*laughs*
Oh... my... Celestia...
THIS WAS HILARIOUS!
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I see no cover art.
Funny story, though. Go go gadget upvote!
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Glad you enjoyed this quick story. I would like to point out that this isn't the story I keep bringing up in my blogs by the way. I've lost two followers today and in a fit of panic I went all f**king Super Saiyan 5 on the keyboard typing out a quick story.
Admittedly it was a silly way to react, but it's a habit that's not going to die anytime soon.
Now if I can get this crappy FNAF World animation over with, I can start over again and try to make an animation that'll be decent.
Sleep deprivation does not help me right now.
6891096 Damn it. I always have to save images from the internet onto my computer first to upload them in order to make them appear. It's just more work for me. Granted it only takes a minute but still.
Why bother having that option for URL source links when it clearly doesn't friggin' work, you know what I'm saying?
6891096 Yeah, the cover art does not appear for me either. Maybe try putting it up again?
Wonderful dialogue. It was a funny story, well done.
6891129 Can you see anything now?
Oh and thank you. I wasn't really expecting much attention at all for this one but here I am once more corrected.
6891113 Picture's dere!
6891185 The admins should just throw away that option for cover art source URL links thing, because it absolutely does not work. Not for me at least. I'm not doing anything wrong, so there's a problem somewhere along the line.
6891192 Yeah, it's funny 'cause normally using URLs is the only way of getting pictures onto the site. Woss goin' on?
6891207 That's why I'm asking.
Hmm...
I wonder if I can get more views by changing the tags for this story to Mature/Sex. After all, a lot of people on this site follow their erections than their common sense.
Nah, I won't do it. Not in the mood to prank any clop readers tonight.
So, what's your opinion of the new alicorn baby then?
I've seen this sketch, I've got nothing but good hopes for this.
Post-read: Oh no, not the Pewdiepie fan club! Seriously though, while I was waiting for the "rat's anus" and was a little dissapointed that didn't appear, but otherwise you did it really well Unique.
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Wot?
Hee hee.. the dental plan was the last straw huh? hee hee. I honestly think all of Sombra's "Legions of Doom" quiting at once would be a hilarious way to end the end.. because he took away their dental insurance.
6891390 If you don't know about it, you should be warned that it is kind of a spoiler. >.<
I'll be leaving this one here:
6891344 The rat's anus WAS in the story. But it got rebuked because it was apparently too close to being just like the video. So it was taken out.
6891390 Oh everyone'll know about it now.
Shining Armor and Cadence have their baby in the first episode of the new MLP season. It's an alicorn baby. So it's technically an actual princess this time, making all the other alicorns (except Twilight I guess) queens.
6891435 Yeah. Throwing a video to state the obvious. How original.
Whatever. It's fun to watch so I won't delete it.
Say, quick question; boxers or briefs? It's for research.
6891433 Is it the episode where Pinkie finds out about Shining's and Cadence's baby, and has trouble keeping her mouth shut?
6891543 Ok, I thought it was just too hard to get it to fit in. Well, not much you can do about it.
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Oh it WAS that baby.
6891633 Yeah, it was haha.
Not that the joke itself isn't funny, but it kinda also isn't yours. This borders halfway between being inspired by someone else's work and being outright plagiarism. Without some real added twist on it, this really isn't something that you should have published as a work of your own.
6893535 Perhaps you are right about that. But, er, I just wanna show you a little something-something, okay?
Now, let me show you this.
So, um, here's my argument matey, and I genuinely ask this in the nicest way possible so as not to offend or upset you; when did people give a damn about see carbon copies of jokes again?
Oh, and while you're bringing this subject up, be a sport and pass your comment on over to, oh let's just say...about roughly 90% of the clopfics on this site, will you? Because it's not like writers have found new ways for Twilight and Trixie, or any ponies for that matter, to fill their three holes with sticky white stuff.
That last bit was a Dark Souls reference by the way.
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Don't worry, I do. Don't get the impression that I'm picking on you especially here. This one just happens to be so blatant that it really sticks out. I wouldn't have said anything if you had been at least a bit more subtle and creative about it.
6893762 Well, if you read through it again, you might find it's more like Llamas With Hats than the actual Mitchell And Webb sketch, with the back and forth banter going on between the two characters in the story.
I personally don't feel like I have crossed that line of plagiarism. I've made it obviously clear in the description where the idea came from, and I don't claim any ownership of the joke. But this is what we're discussing here; a joke.
Mitchell And Webb weren't the first people to use this joke. They've simply...damn it, hang on I'm not usually good with words, ha ha ha...I guess I wanna say they basically 'reinvented' an existing joke? And I only use part of the whole joke anyway in my story.
Now I'm not saying this in some attempt to put you in the wrong, dude. And I want you to know I really was not attempting to be rude to you in my previous response, however the comment I made might have appeared to you. I'm just saying that the rules of this site deemed this passable, and that's all I have to go on. If you think this is plagiarism, then even if you are right I can't just simply agree with you without real confirmation that this is the case.
It's like a boy running past you shouting "WOLF!". You can't just take his word for it because he might be trying to trick you.
Oh, and about the 'being more creative about the story' thing...well, the truth is my friend, is that I actually typed it all up in, like, a couple of hours immediately after noticing I had lost two followers. So basically, this fanfic right here was made in a fit of over-exaggerated panic to keep the good folk interested enough to stay on my team.
I'm working on this other story, you see. It's mostly an OC story about my character Unique, set in a different land outside of Equestria's borders, but still in the same universe. I'm still working on the first chapter because I don't really do long stories, plus I'm not that great with openings for them. But I want to put my writing focus into one story instead of several, so I'm taking my time with it while working on other projects like animation and artwork.
And when I see I'm losing followers who leave most likely out of boredom of waiting for content out of me, it makes me panic and...well, this story.
Don't show any sympathy because it's not the reason why I'm telling you this. I just want to explain a little bit about how my mind works at times. I like appealing to people who think I'm interesting despite my flaws and problems. It's great to be able to entertain people even if what I'm doing isn't exactly the best thing ever man. I guess I am being a bit selfish in wanting my followers to stay on my side no matter what, and this is a habit I really should learn to break if I'm ever going to improve as a human being...well, what of a human being I am anyway.
Also, a great many apologies for the length of this comment. When I start typing my thoughts, I easily go overboard. Damn, you'd think I'd write stories with 10,000 words per chapter if I can write this much just for a reply, right? XD
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I didn't say it was plagiarism, just that it was straddling the line. There were enough original and rewritten lines to keep it from being that outright. It just could have been done better.
6893857 Ah I see. Well, I've never been that good of a story writer. Sometimes I get lucky, other times I miss the ball completely and get a Strike Out. Then I have to watch Billy and Bobby and Jimmy play the rest of the baseball game without me. But at least the seat is comfy...sort of.
Sorry, don't know where that came from.
Anyway, this is a weak story. But it wasn't written with the intent to be a strong one to begin with. It could have been better and it might have been if it weren't for the panic thing.
But here's hoping that the actual story I'm wanting to write up will better suit the likes of your eyeballs. Yes, it'll contain many OC's (and some generic characters too), but I'm going to try and make them work. I want the story to be good, you know? Lots of humor and references, characters that are likable...basically the things you would want in a good story. None of these OP or Gary/Mart-Sue sort of characters. Everyone will have strengths and weaknesses, strengths and flaws. If a character has talents or abilities that they wouldn't usually have by official MLP universal logic, I'll have an explanation at the ready for them.
And I feel I can do this story a lot easier since it's not set in Equestria but outside of it, since a lot of jokes and humor I have planned won't work if the story is set within Equestria itself. But that doesn't mean Equestria won't have a aprt in the story overall.
So I'm sorry for ballsing up this fanfic, but maybe, just maybe, if I do the best I can and put what little story writing talent I have into this particular tale, you might even consider it worthy of looking at.
Which would be really nice because now I feel like I need to make amends to you because of this story. Don't know why, but I just...do. Common sense be damned.
6893857 And apologies for the long ass comment again.
Why can't I put this much effort into my stories? Damn it all!
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Well, if I see it pop up somewhere, I'll give it a look, at least. If you want some honest advice? There is nothing wrong with references like this, not on principle. If you had brought up a scene like this as part of a larger story to wrap it in, maybe shortened a bit so it isn't the whole skit, I honestly believe I would have thought it was funny. This kind of gag lives by how well you execute it and how you place it. It's all a matter of location and timing. Keep that in mind and you'll do a lot better.
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I blame your medication. Or lack of it, as it were.
6893920 You know, I get given a lot of shit by people on the web for stuff that I do. I mean, any criticism I get for anything is hard to stomach at times, but I understand that it is necessary for me to be told the wrongs with my content so that I can at least avoid making the same mistake in the future, and improve my abilities a little more.
So you've done me a huge service by pointing out the problems, however major or minor it might be in the bigger picture. You've not been a dick about things with me, and you've been polite and honest with me without resorting to trading blows with me. So thank you very much for talking with me. I can now take this conversation into mind and use this to grind more experience points to allocate into my Writing and Development stats.
If I ever do get around to writing up that first chapter for the WIP story, and you happen to drop by to look at it, I shall remember to roll out the red carpet for you, mate.
Have yourself a safe and healthy day or evening wherever you are in this world, and thanks again for listening to the ramblings of a total tool like myself. :) Honestly, means a lot to me, good sir/madam.
(bows politely, smacks head on keyboa nh guffk j)
Would you believe I really just did that?
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You're welcome. In all honesty, I can understand why you get a less than warm reception sometimes. The way you comment on stories can be kind of obnoxious and you never quite seem to know when to stop. As a rather obnoxious person myself, I don't feel like it's my place to judge, though, and in any case bringing that kind of thing into story feedback would just feel petty to me. I make a point of not being needlessly mean when I comment on story and writing stuff. What I say is what I think, no more and no less.
Eh, I've seen crazier. And hey, how do you think I came up with this user name? There sure ain't no such thing as a "wlam" in any dictionary.
Well that was really funny
I've only now found this? I'm rather disappointed in myself!
7547223 Don't worry. If it helps to make you feel better, you could always do worse and be a politician.
7622576 I LOVE THE POLICE BRUTALITY ONES!
7622611 Wait...I DO ANIMATIONS! I COULD DO IT! :D
I'd need someone to voice a guard or two if I want a bit of originality to my take on it, but I could do something like that!
7622623 It's a silent rule, mate; in any cartoon or comic, the law enforcement must ALWAYS never succeed, so that they can make the main characters look good and more awesome.
I mean, could you imagine if an officer of the law took down the likes of Doctor Doom? Are you insane, my friend? If so then come over to my house and we'll be best buddies.
WHAT KIND OF STORY DESCRIPTION HAS MOTHER-FUCKING SPOILER IN IT?!?!?!?! And why would you make them good guys?! Isn't the point supposed to be to encourage children to becoming raping, murderous, NIGHTMARES!!!!????
7919848 A not very good description, that's what.
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Yo, can I make a video on this fanfiction? It won't be a bashing video don't worry but rather a review of this fanfiction.
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Be my gracious guest, Duskshine. Don't be afraid to bash on it a little bit if you want. I can handle criticism.
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Thanks dude!
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No problem, friend
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So I did the review. This is my first actual review so... Uh... It may be a little unprofessional. But I hope you enjoy either way.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vo1bb3DSPvg
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BWA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA! YOU ABSOLUTELY TORE INTO MY STORY! AH HA HA HA HA HA! Oh my god that was funny! Oh, you've earned a subscription for making me laugh, mate! Kudos! Congrats! Encore! Well done!
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! I was honestly worried you'd rip my fla-Oh... I'm a lemon... You rip my skin off then? I dunno... The important thing is that you enjoyed it good sir. Now i'm off. See ya later!
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It was humorous. I enjoyed your video. I'd be honored if you ripped into another one of my stories sometime . Maybe throw in some jokes about my writing, if you would? And why would I be angry about your 'review' anyway? Even if I was, not much I could about it. So long as you make me laugh you can call me a garbage useless writer for all I care, so long as I'm laughing about it. :)
I hope we talk again soon, possible new friend!