Oh please tell me that that's the Yamato

6891726 Maybe

6891749 I'll tell you this much, they will use some US equipment, but it mostly varies with others.

Humans in their world or from ours? If from ours America must retaliate.

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Hidden U.S. Japan Russian coalition?

6891772
To me the pic seems to be the Iowa

When it says that what could fight against them the first thing that I thought was U.S. and the U.N.
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THIS IS WW3: WAR ON PONYS
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6891774 You'll see the backstory next.

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Alright!

Someones gotta post it...

A destroyer named Harmony, is anyone else picking up on this oxymoron?

I swear that picture is a .gif and it's shifting ever so slightly...

An interesting premise. I look forward to what may come next

the bullshit is real towards the ponies.

"You know captain, I thought by now somepony like you would be an admiral by now."

...........
I'm sorry, wat?

"You know captain, I thought by now somepony like you would be an admiral by now."

.............
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Let's just- let's just look at that again, shall we?

"You know captain, I thought by now somepony like you would be an admiral by now."

Zoom in a little bit.

I thought by now somepony like you would be an admiral by now.

Focus on the subject matter.....

I thought by now somepony like you would be an admiral by now.

Now let me just, let me just...... I can't even, I-

I'm sorry, I was just filled with unyielding rage; I don't mean to be an ass, but I'm going to be an ass. The story has problems, no build-up, spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, and repetition out the wazoo, along with other things that I'm most likely glossing over. Don't take this the wrong way, try to improve upon your writing, take some time with it. Look it over, or maybe get an editor, at least keep writing you'll probably improve. Good luck, and G-d speed, maybe I'll come back to this.

6893127 You mean people speak properly each and every time? Every word uttered by them is perfect in every way?

I don't mind such things like that in spoken dialogue. It makes the characters feel more real. Now, if it was something outside of the dialogue box, sure, it would be an editing issue. However, as sapient beings are fallible and sometimes forget the proper grammar from gradeschool due to life being life, things like this happen:

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That argument would have merit if the author had shown that the character had a tendency to be repetitive. Whether due to a lack of intelligence in the character, a quirk in their speech, or as you've suggested, it could be an honest mistake on the character's part. However, as shown in the video, Austin said, "Allow myself to introduce....... *insert description of awkward pause here* myself." The scene shows Austin pausing due to his choice of words, and how he's hesitant as he does so. Blinking, gulping, tilting his head, all indicators of this.

Now, the author did none of this(which is another problem I have with the story, it needs more descriptions of what's going on, especially during dialogue, it's more telling than showing right now) which leads me to believe that this is a mistake on the author's part. If he had described Quick Strike and the Captain reacting to the repetition --hell even adding ellipses to indicate an awkward pause-- then yeah, sure, I'd agree with ya. But they didn't. And while I'm assuming that the repetition isn't intentional as opposed to what you're suggesting, I feel pretty safe with that assumption.

nice pictures, have you thought about adding music?

awsome

The dialogue feels a bit forced at times, and although having two ponies have a relatively pointless conversation made them feel a bit more like real people. The way you wrote their dialogue made it drag on despite feeling rushed.
Your descriptions are very lacking, don't rely on pictures when you could show us what we should be seeing. Stories are about imagination, let us use ours.
The premise seems interesting, done before but interesting. Hopefully your writing will improve in future chapters.

6893988 Maybe

6894105 Thank you and I will do my best to improve the story.

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6893127 Thank you for pointing that out.

6894105 Actually, I will use pictures at least for the Humans since I'm basing off their equipment and vehicles off actual ones. Equestrian vehicles and weapons will take time, but I will do my best to describe them.

Gah I cant wait till the next chapter

The humans have help and Equestria will pay for their enslavement of an entire race.

Interesting idea you have going here. Will you give a timetable of how long humans have been enslaved?

6898279 I may after a few chapters. Will take a while to think about it, but I will simply because of the number of rebellions.

so just curies what country did u bring in or is it a imaginary country

6898665 You'll see.

the silouettes remind me of fleet of fog O.O

Im gonna like where this is going.

NEED MORE. When's the next chapter??

6919768 Working on it. I'm at school right now.

this story is looking good already

6921364 Thanks

One would think that for such and advanced empire there wouldn't be any ''unexplored regions'' left on the planet... my bet is that there's a previously undiscovered country inhabited solely or mainly by humans and the equestrians are probably either trespassing or the country is preparing to invade.

Take it slower by the way, it felt rushed.

here come USS Iowa (BB-61)
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6921795 you sir or madam have taken the words right out of my mouth

6892481 I prefer to think of it as Irony

Don't fuck with humans, bro. We will literally spend years figuring out new, and better ways to commit genocide.

the destroyer Harmony

Well that's ironic.

Anyway, great start to a hopefully great story. Good job.

6891726 I sure hope so...

Well my little stupid ponies, YA DONE FUCKED UP NOW!!!!

First thought at seeing the equestrian destroyer: that's gonna get fucked up by a real ship.

Boom, I a real ship.

Humans charging in with the fog fleet

Did you take this picture from the anime Zipang ?
That looks like the Yamato in the middle ?
still nice

One Word: Haifuri
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8033735 wat

7311433 on ourselves no less....