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Looks interesting. I will read this in the morning.
Be sure to tell me how shitty it is. Seriously, do.
Overall not a horrible introduction into the wasteland. It felt a little rushed, but I find myself interested in where this story is going. I actually wish you had written an introduction chapter that went into more detail on the workings of their stable and the ponies within. The emotional effect of killing cookie and having bandage forced away from her home is mostly lost to the reader because you haven't given us a connection with her home or those within it.
This was an interesting chapter. I like the interactions between bandage and token, but some of the other minor characters have confused me. I don't understand the motives of the "discount" weapons dealer. Nopony in the wasteland is that nice, and a gun that cheap should be broken beyond repair... Maybe it bugs me because I'm doing a playthrough of FO:NV and everything is expensive as hell, but things seem a little to bright and cheery to be true.
I also like the matchmaker stuff in this chapter, but that just makes me want to have more information on the stable in general.
Oh hey look I found all the fucked up, gore filled, nightmare inducing stuff that I thought was missing. It turns out it was just hiding in the next chapter. Also I would just like to point out that the "lucky" pony's gun is the only one that seems to jam... maybe 75 cap guns just suck... So I guess now the real adventure begins. Token needs a better gun... or a stick to hit things with.
The interactions with the different tribes seemed rushed. Otherwise this is a pretty good chapter.
...this is the best chapter so far. It doesn't feel rushed, and I finally find myself emotionally attached to your characters. I think you could have gone into more detail at different points of the fighting, but overall it was well done.
Prologue can be found here, if anybody cares to read it.
Hmmmmm well I enjoy learning more about the vaults dynamics. Bandage going mental right out of the gates is a little surprising, but I can't really say that it's a bad thing because the mind will do fucked up things to protect itself from pain... good chapter keep it up.
Well I can say that so far in my opinion you have an excellent story here. You aren't a bad writer and the length of each chapter is about right for what I personally like to see from a FoE fic. I look forward to reading more and if you didn't already have editors I would happily volunteer to help you with proof reading. Good job with this and thank you for writing.
Hey man thanks for reading, might take you up on that offer, God knows I need a good editor.
733573 just send me a message if you're interested.
Well now... it apears you have earned yourself another follower.... will Bandage be ok with an alicorn being in her enterouge???
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Cool.
Wait... ¿Qué?
good chapter
I like the armor she found
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Cuz it makes her arse pop right?
898718 whats that mean?
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Means it highlights her ass. S'Just a joke.
899150 ahhhh
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Turning on all cylinders then? RIGHTEOUS.
Sounds like you got the color scheme of "ebony and ivery" from "devil may cry". Me likey.
Chaos out.
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At least I based the shipping on shitty mathematicals and glorious SCIENCE!!! With a 10/1 female to male ratio, homosexual relationships would be more prevalent.
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Never played that game and have no idea what you're talking about, just thought opposite guns sounded fancy. At least, I assume you're talking about guns.
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Borders you say? I know not of any borders, boundaries or any other such restrictions on my "creative talent"(couldn't type that last part with a straight face)
PASSED THE 100,000 WORD MARK, WOOOOOO!!! THAT'S ONE HUNdred, thousand, shitty, words... woo
Nice chapter.
good chapter really want to see the next
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Unfortunately, the whole time after a certain point that you should know of *wonk* I couldn't stop thinking of thd "Eww straight!" Pic, made it difficult to focus.
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Would be, good for progeny, but the big guy is a hybrid, his swimmers don't swim, they just kinda... Circle aimlessly.
You have my full atention. awaiting next chapter.
Chaos out..
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What pulled ya in if ya don't mind me askin'?
To be honest when i first joined this site i only read stories my friend had told me about. i started just surfing for things to read and i saw "fallout". instantaniasly i was hooked just because it was realated to "fallout". i love the way the charecters interact one another they resemble how my family go about daily buisness......
....... without the "killing" of course..
so... is the point that Stripe is sterel?.... well anyways another amazing chapter and keep it up! also the stripe being sterel easily explains why BB isnt carring around baby in her right now... or is she
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ten of em, they all look like my OC, red stripes and shit. It's a goddamn pony litter.
She's totally got foals on board
But yeah, he's sterile, one of the reasons he likes kids so much, he can't have em.
957219 yep make sense! also im starting my own fallout equstria fan fic, Fallout Eqestria: Reapeating History, the name is kinda just some thing i came up with, not shur iff ill keep it. but ive already started writeing it... so yea. buck why am i still typeing... well im out see you when your next chapter appears on meh screen!
While I do agree that this first chapter felt a bit rushed, I don't understand why there's so many dislikes. Giving another like to bolster that greenage before I read on. Keep up the good work.
Interesting so far. Seems that there is still a bit of brevity every once and awhile (but maybe I say that just because I'm a detail freak meh). Either way, looking forward to reading the longer chapters. I go!
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I put the brevity moments in when the words have trouble flowing but I want to keep my writing momentum, I keep saying I'll go back and fix them but I rarely do.
Ahhh Honest Hearts and Lonesome Road Ponified. I'm curious to see where this story will go as it progresses. Carry on, carry on.
"Got your frilly panties on?"
"Aye."
Whoops... lol
Only partway through this chapter and am looking forward to reading of the main characters' trek into The Divide. Just thought I'd say so... anyway, continuing on.
Keeps getting more and more detailed and interesting as it goes. I'm liking this story, especially in how you're incorporating the Lonesome Road DLC environment into the plot while still keeping it generally original and very entertaining. I applaud you sir. Carry on.
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Ave, Bomber!
I'm currently reading your fic and there are almost no mistakes of those I can spot with my PER check.
Though I think I saw 'devil' somewhere among the chapters. Devil? In Equestria? Hardly.
You know what? I like this fic and kinda don't get all those guys who san it's bad vie 'finger down' button. There are numerous references to Fallout NV which I like, and Salt Upon Wounds was among them. Rather unexpected turn of events. And, yeah, I like Shaky+Hex, and the whole shipping chart you got in your party. Stay cool, keep writing!
Also, personal love:
Stripe's interpretation of checking ammo reserves involved lazily sitting on a crate of 5.56mm rounds smoking cigarettes with Celery.
"How's the ammo?" I asked.
"Comfy." he grunted around his smoke.
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Glad you like it, and what kind of Fallout Guru would I be if I didn't reference the games?
Shipping chart... Bandage and everypony else besides the dog the bird and the children... Gah, I've turned my main character into a bit of a slut... But, I reckon I'm a pervert so it don't really surprise me much.
Also, damn you, now it's my obsessive compulsive mission to hunt down that misplaced malignant diety that snuck his way into one of my chapters and eradicate him with my most RIGHTEOUS of backspace buttons...
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Didn't noticed any perv segment, sir! Well... your shipping chart does not include M/M shipping, right? So, you're not a complete perv!
Oh, obsessive compulsion...*grins* well, in that case, how about hunt down hands and shapeshift them into paws? I kinda understand diamond dog and shit, but, hey, those guys got paws, not hands!
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4 fingers and an opposable thumb, bitch, those are hands, bears have paws, regular dogs have paws, unworkable fingers and non-opposable thumbs, Diamond Dogs, Sand Dogs(PH), Hellhounds, Tunnelers, and (spoiler alert) Mastiffs have hands.
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Sorry, my bad, didn't knew it.) Also, sleipnir armor is awesome*_*
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It is isn't it? To my discredit, I took a lot of inspiration from the MJOLNIR armor from the Halo series and the Nanosuit from Crisis, also the talking medical power armor from Fallout 3(hence Beta and the other 3 (or so) AI), mostly in the sense that it's incredibly badass armor but it by no means makes you invincible.
So, chapter 10 will most likely be the last chapter to contain anything sexual for about the next 4 5 or 6 chapters, unless anypony just relentlessly twists my arm for some of this poorly written barely explicit soft clop. The next couple chapters are going to focus more on the eastern warzone and chapters 13 and 14 are basically going to be raw hell, 14 especially...
731438 I would type such if it were not already written. 120% correct my sir.