That castle belonged to celeatia and her sister Luna I don't understand why the ponys wouldn't have technology like us if all of that stuff was in there the whole time so why would twilight ask what a phone is weird story still giving a thumbs up though
...you need an editor. Lucky for you, my services are open and I am a major grammar Nazi. Could be worse though. I saw this one fan fiction where everything was one big paragraph and it was a fucking nightmare
Love the story hate the grammar... All in all doing great so far!
good plot line but it goes a bit too fast and the grammar....isn't the best but keep up the good work!
That castle belonged to celeatia and her sister Luna I don't understand why the ponys wouldn't have technology like us if all of that stuff was in there the whole time so why would twilight ask what a phone is weird story still giving a thumbs up though
Loving it so far i luaghed so hard at
"HOLY SHIT IM RICH" died instantly
This shit went waaaaay to fast dislike and leaving good plot idea tho
I feel like I skipped 20 chapters
...you need an editor. Lucky for you, my services are open and I am a major grammar Nazi. Could be worse though. I saw this one fan fiction where everything was one big paragraph and it was a fucking nightmare