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"It is an undeniable, and may I say a fundamental quality of man, that when faced with extinction, every alternative is preferable." - Director Leonard Church of Project Freelancer.

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During the winter break after the Friendship Games, Sunset Shimmer considers a much more resourceful potential use for the magic mirror in front of the school. She enlists the human world's Twilight Sparkle to help her execute her master plan. Only, in practice she forgets that the portal is, well, a portal. And their cover story keeps getting in the way of their objective.

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Just what are they going to use all that clothing for?

I still have no idea what they're planning to do with the portal and they better think of a better way to shut Princess Twi up...forced sedation perhaps?

This could use a chapter 2

:rainbowderp::rainbowhuh: Ok... technically Sunset and Twilight aren't breaking any human laws, but... :twilightsmile:

I wonder if they discussed with Rarity in order to sell their products... :twilightoops:

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presumably they'll sell them

The only problem I have is how the text is different colors. It is a bit distracting. Just add the "Twilight said" or "Sunset blinked" tags.

I liked it. You got my blessing for a Chapter two.

Yes what the heck are they doing? I'm very very confused now.:derpytongue2:

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My interpretation was that each time Sunset goes back and forth through the portal she gets a new set of clothes. I think the goal is to sell the clothes to make money for Twilight's lab.

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..............Ok, but wouldn't it be easier if she well...Went back for a short bit and looked for some gems with her magic, maybe she doesn;t have the talent Rarity has for locating them.
but she can find a few small gems worth couple hundred or sell them for a few bits Solid gold coins i may add and bring that back?

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Maybe . . . but what they're doing is pretty efficient too. If all you gotta do is step through the portal, become a pony, and step back through and become a human with a new set of clothes, then one would have a pretty impressive mountain of clothing in a relatively short amount of time. (Assuming you take the old clothes off to make room for the new set).

It also depends on the quality of clothing that is being generated here. If they're getting something that's little better then rags. Then your way is better. But if they're getting something that JCPenny would be proud to sell, then I'd probably be doing what Sunset is doing.

Sunset is violating several laws of physics, but as long as it doesn't end up conjuring a black hole I'm fine with that. Plus, free clothes and free money.

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The problem there is that things are translated when they go through the portal. They have no idea what gems would be on the other end. They might transform into low-numbered bills, or muffins, or hairclips, or coal. But the odds of them staying gems seems rather low, considering the scarcity of giant technicolor crystal on earth. It might be worth testing at some point, but for a quick and reliable income, the "something from nothing" is probably the best way to go.

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I'm not sure how I feel about the multicolor text myself. I was experimenting with the new format. To be honest, most of the reason it is that way is for the sake of this gag here:

"Yes, thank you that would be-" Whooosh "-Hey Twilight I think we should..."

which was sorta the punchline of the whole fic. That sort of rapid context, to where you're figuring out what exactly happened at the same time that the characters are, isn't normally possible when what's happening has to be outright described.

John Smith is the generic name The Doctor always used, and the way he said he recently acquired an allergy to nuts and his first thought on what the noise was (a portal), leads me to believe he's a freshly regenerated Doctor. If that's true, than it's a nice cameo. Also, I approve a Chapter two.

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He's also Scottish, like David Tennant is IRL. He wears a cashmere coat just like Ten used to. And his dialogue is TARDIS blue. He's also a "young man" who was a weather analyst for fifteen years at some point past-tense. And a cookie once saved his life. The reference is very intentional.

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6883609 I'm only familiar with New Who, so when was The Doctor a weather analyst?

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As far as I know he wasn't one onscreen, but unless Mister Smith looks a lot younger than he is he can't have had any job for fifteen years. The phrase "A young man..." would generally only be used to refer to the early-to-mid twenties range. Thirty at the oldest. 30 - 15 = 15 which means he'd have been tracking weather patterns in middle school.

Unless he's a Timelord, and doesn't age.

Unless he's a Timelord, and doesn't age.

Actually, it's canon to Doctor Who that Time Lords do age, they're just really long lived. My theory is that TARDISes have a field that prevents aging while aboard, since the only times The Doctor, or any Time Lord, didn't age, was on ship. But that's not here nor there. I hope to see either a chapter 2 or a sequel to this story.

Hmm... Let's hope the clothes don't come from Sunset's pony hair? Well, if they do, she'll swiftly find out...

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Timelords age, but they don't show it physically.
This we know to be a canon fact.
It's been established that they do eventually die from age, and in a few episodes the Doctor has been shown as having lived for a century or two between his appearances (IE, the Silence episodes).
Additionally, the doctor is barely a millennium old (at least, his body is about that old).
His first iteration (the first doctor played by William Hartnell from the 1960's series) was an old man.
Then, the Doctor spends several centuries in his 11th body (played by Matt Smith), yet he didn't appear to have aged a day.
So we know that he didn't (noticably) age physically for about two entire centuries.
Obviously he couldn't have reached the physical appearance of a 70 something year old man (in human aging) in such a short life span of about 800 years (the approximate age of the doctor when we first see him) if 200 years was so little a time that in his 11th regeneration he didn't appear to have aged in the slightest.

This leads you to the obvious conclusion that a timelord's body doesn't age physically like ours.
But the show has confirmed that timelords DO die from old age eventually.


So the way I figure it, eventually their bodies reach a point where they're breaking down (in some form or another, though we can't tell from simply looking at them), and their body requires them to regenerate (I doubt they just grow ill and drop dead only to then start regenerating, it just makes more sense that they are simply forced to use a regeneration).
And eventually, they run out of regenerations, and they do finally die from a lack of regenerative ability.

The timelord homeworld has a naturally occurring rip in time and space which was the inspiration for timelords to make the heart of the TARDISes, and that's what gave them their regenerative abilities.
So if the main part of what makes a timelord a timelord is present on their home planet, it would make sense that they would age the same on Galifrey as they would in a tardis.

Also, if timelords ~Hell, ANY mortal species that can die from old age~ found a technology that stopped physical aging, they'd find some way somehow to make sure the entire planet had that effect so that they would become effectively immortal (well, more precisely, "ageless", but you get what I'm saying).

Even if they couldn't cover the entirety of the planet, you know for an absolute certainty that they'd make every home, office, public building, mail house, out house, and hen house in the same manner as they make a tardis so everywhere they went would have that same energy field or what-have-you that would stop them from aging.

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The biggest flaw in that get-rich-quick scheme idea is that they're all the exact same size.
Even selling them online:
There can't be THAT many people who are going to buy from an outfit that sells only one size of womens clothes, yet for some reason sells not just tops and skirts, but also womens underwear (again, in only one size and cup size).

6884164 Actually, as of the Season 7 Christmas episode, The Doctor, I believe, is over two millennia old, and in that one, he was shown as an old man, dying of old age. The only reason he survived was because the Time Lords were convinced to renew his regeneration cycle, causing him to regenerate from old age.

"Let's sell a billion bras of the exact same size!"

Not exactly a great plan, but an interesting idea.

Should you do a chaper 2? Yes, I'd love to see what Sunset's planning.

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Time lords can spend 1,000 (and according to some sources 10,000) years in a single incarnation before having to regenerate. The only reason the doctor was dying after only 2000 years old (if that) was because he blew through all of his regenerations and had to age until he died of old age or just died because he had no regenerations left. Time lords by default regenerate when they get to old or are injured but if they die from their injuries or refuse to regenerate (the master)the regeneration isn't used and the time lord dies. If the regeneration cycle starts then the time lord can be temporarily immortal (River Song) but to put it simply there is no way to tell if time lord aging is constant and according to what is shown of the 10th and 11th doctor (David Tennant and Matt Smith ) it isn't. The 10th was aged 900 years and looked like he should have been dead centuries earlier but the 11th could have aged double that before looking like just an old man. They age much slower than humans but they aren't aging at a constant and the untempered schism no longer alters their life span. It caused the regenerations and extended life span due to exposure (again River Song) but any more exposure wouldn't extend their lives anymore and any side effects (regenerations ) are genetic as shown by the episode The Doctors daughter

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I always thought that they should have said that when Rose Tyler got god-like power over the universe itself and made Jack Harkness immortal, they should have revealed later that she also reset the Doctor's regenerations from having used 9 (at the time) to zero (like a timelord's first life when born).

It's clever, it would buy the franchise another 13 doctors minimum, and virtually NO ONE would have seen it coming.
:twilightsmile:

This was a clever premise but you wasted it. The way you've written it, most of the story has nothing to do with the interesting premise and instead is a joke about people talking that goes on entirely too long. You have Twilight babbling at length, and once you finally get past that you have some random guy babbling at length.

And then suddenly the story is over.

Remove the people babbling and there isn't much story left.

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I'm with this guy. That was entirely horrible. I'm not even sure what it actually is about. The entire thing reads like a Monty Python skit rather than a story, except not actually funny.

Well, If nothing else, Sunset now has a new wardrobe.

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The biggest flaw in that get-rich-quick scheme idea is that they're all the exact same size.
Even selling them online:
There can't be THAT many people who are going to buy from an outfit that sells only one size of womens clothes, yet for some reason sells not just tops and skirts, but also womens underwear (again, in only one size and cup size).

Maybe she was going to sell them in Japan

Great idea about the portal, very boring execution.

I was going to read this, then I found the coloured text which was impossible to read.

I really enjoyed this story and I hope there is more soon.

The colored text made it really hard to read, but overall, I liked it. What's Sunset really up to here?

The colored dialogue made things a little hard to read, but otherwise this was an enjoyable read. Granted, unless Sunset is getting designer clothes every time she steps through, she and Twilight be better off going back to Equestria, getting a job, work for a few hours, get some cheap gems (in that dimension), and come back through and sell for massive profit.

Granted, this wouldn't be as noticeable or put someone on a watch list, so-eh. It works.

6882766 Well, it's made of a very high quality linen. So what they plan to do is take them to pieces, wash out the dye, press them into sheets, and go into the book publishing business. Profit!

Please tell me you decided to do a chapter two.

6886055 you expect moffat to be clever about something he made up a regeneration just so he could be the one to handle this big story of the doctor getting a new cycle

good story do a 2nc chapter and have the doctor find the portal

I would love to see how this scheme plays out so if you have a chapter two I would certainly like to see it. Perhaps even a chapter three.

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I figured it out.suNset went to Equestria and basically used a duplication spell on cookies repeatedly.And near the end decided she wanted some extra clothes so did that too.

Twilight left. Just as Sunset was about to return through the portal, she realized how odd it was that it was night in Equestria now when it was still morning at CHS. Mystery for another time, she supposed.

Sure is an odd one. :applejackunsure:

Sunset began to strip down again. She noted that these clothes were different from the ones she had come through with the first time. It would be interesting to find out if it was random or if there was a pattern to it. She jumped back through just as the cold started to get to her.

Ok, now I see what' she's doing now in regards to why she stripped naked earlier.

Twilight strained to keep up her own smile, " Right then. So, John, did you want to buy any cookies? We have chocolate, spicy chocolate, vanilla carrot, coco choco, mystery nut, and regular. "

Many of those cookies actually sound quite good. 🤤

" Yes please. You can never have too many cookies. A cookie saved my life once, actually. "

I find that hard to believe. :ajbemused:

" You know, like in the Valve game? Aperture Science. GLaDOS? "

Phew, that was a close one.

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