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Just A Random Pegasus


I'm just a random user who writes a lot of different ideas that pop into my strange mind, and ships almost everything imaginable.

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Limestone Pie is known throughout the Pie family as a bitter mare who is very protective over the family rock farm. Well, her rock farm, according to the mare herself.

Though, Limestone wasn't always like this. She used to be a sweet, forgiving young mare who always loved to meet new ponies. That is, before the unthinkable happened.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 19 )

Concept's not bad, but Igneous's voice is pretty off.

6870789

Thanks for bringing that to my attention! I have never been the best with his voice... :twilightsheepish:

I'll go fix that...

This is a nice concept as to what made Limestone who she is. The story seemed a bit short, but it was enjoyable nonetheless. Great job!

6872426

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiehappy:

Though, if you feel like answering, what scenes do you feel are too short? I would like to fix it. :twilightsmile:

6872442

Maybe you can add some more dialogue to the bonus chapter to make it feel more complete. Just a suggestion.

6872831

Alright. I'll make sure to work on that! Thank you! :twilightsmile:

Overall, I find the story to be a little quick and thrown together. Her cutie mark doesn't seem like it would relate to her defending the crystal mines from the Diamond Dogs. It makes no sense that she would get it at that moment.

Your use of old english (thy, thou, thine) is really distracting as you don't use the vast majority of them right.

But! I did like the reasoning behind Limestone getting co-ownership of the rock farm.

That is my review.

6881408

Thanks for the review. I'm happy you enjoyed it, and that you had the time to post good constructive criticism. :twilightsmile:

I absolutely love this story, and upvote and a fave....and by the way, Limestone is the best Pie sister. I even have a custom plushie of her.

7059247

Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

And ooh! That's fancy! (I wish there was a Limestone emoticon on here... :fluttershysad:)

And I don't think I have a favorite Pie. I love them all; I can't decide! :raritydespair:

Comments spoiled the story for me, didn't read too much, but it was great! I only noticed one error, in the first paragraph.
My SkimRating: A-

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