Limestone Pie is known throughout the Pie family as a bitter mare who is very protective over the family rock farm. Well, her rock farm, according to the mare herself.
Though, Limestone wasn't always like this. She used to be a sweet, forgiving young mare who always loved to meet new ponies. That is, before the unthinkable happened.
Yay
Concept's not bad, but Igneous's voice is pretty off.
Amazing like always
6870789
Thanks for bringing that to my attention! I have never been the best with his voice...
I'll go fix that...
6872376
Thanks!
This is a nice concept as to what made Limestone who she is. The story seemed a bit short, but it was enjoyable nonetheless. Great job!
6872426
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Though, if you feel like answering, what scenes do you feel are too short? I would like to fix it.
Headcanon accepted.
6869791
Yay
6872487
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
6872442
Maybe you can add some more dialogue to the bonus chapter to make it feel more complete. Just a suggestion.
6872831
Alright. I'll make sure to work on that! Thank you!
6872879
No problem.
Overall, I find the story to be a little quick and thrown together. Her cutie mark doesn't seem like it would relate to her defending the crystal mines from the Diamond Dogs. It makes no sense that she would get it at that moment.
Your use of old english (thy, thou, thine) is really distracting as you don't use the vast majority of them right.
But! I did like the reasoning behind Limestone getting co-ownership of the rock farm.
That is my review.
6881408
Thanks for the review. I'm happy you enjoyed it, and that you had the time to post good constructive criticism.
I absolutely love this story, and upvote and a fave....and by the way, Limestone is the best Pie sister. I even have a custom plushie of her.
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Thanks!
And ooh! That's fancy! (I wish there was a Limestone emoticon on here... )
And I don't think I have a favorite Pie. I love them all; I can't decide!
Comments spoiled the story for me, didn't read too much, but it was great! I only noticed one error, in the first paragraph.
My SkimRating: A-