Ooo, baby, apparently this is happening. Author, I wish you luck, because you are most certainly going to need it.

6858487 errr thank you. I appreciate the comment although it is worrying. Yes I know the second chapter is pretty terrible but I hope to improve on the next chapter as that is where things are actually not based on any episode. I guess what I am saying is the first 2 chapters are a practice run before I get to the nitty gritty but I do need them as they develop the character and show what is relevant within this story from the original show and what isn't. I hope people can understand. Once I write the 3rd chapter I would love to hear people's opinion on it and if you think it is better done from that point then I will try to think of a way of building the beginning a different way.

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My comment wasn't meant as a criticism of your actual writing, which could admittedly use some work. Rather, I was referring to this being another OC-joins-the-main-characters story. They rarely turn out well, and one in particular is close to one-million words of wish-fulfilling awfulness. Your story could be the greatest story in the world and it's still going to get flak from people just because of the subject matter, I guess is my point.

6858656 thank you for clearing that up but I understand it wasn't to do with my story. I didn't think it was and sorry if it sounded like I was offended or something. Yes, you do have a point and I understood that before I posted it. I wanted to tackle a clique idea and see if I could improve it and morph it into something great. If I fail then that is just par for the course. It's OK I will take the blame. I'd rather be different and be unpopular than be the same and popular :3