really just a collection of short little one shots that i have done over the past year and a half I decided I would put them out as i get them edited.
Some are random silly little things that even I don't know why I wrote them, others are abstract, others are even fairly plain.
(PS I ran out of tags lol)
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Life gets simply complicated when you're embedded in an inanimate object.
At least all they wanted was cheese..
Because too little too late.
Keep going! ;)
A nice collection of short snippets of Luna’s entrapment. It’s nothing world-breaking, yet quite a few of the scenes there sent shivers down my spine. Very good job on constructing the atmosphere while being so conscise. Your grammar and spelling are very solid as well, I think I noticed just one or two very minor issues, such as one uncapitalised I. I’m eager to see what the following chapters/stories may hold.
So, Canterlot is ravaged by blue hamsters obsessed with cheese. I can’t believe I’m saying this, but I think Equestria has seen worse.
I’m just surprised that this mayhem didn’t rouse Discord, though I guess that might be possible only after the new Element Bearers are found. Also, Night Light being a teacher at Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns is a nice touch.
On a side note, you should really focus on making sure that all names, proper nouns, and such are capitalised, and also make sure that there are no inconsistencies such as Night Light and Nightlight. Just small and simple things that can be fixed really quickly and make the story look far better if done right. Also, a dialogue line always has to end with some punctuation mark. Furthermore, if a character is directly addressed in dialogue, the address should be preceded by a comma. I know that this is an old story, but hopefully it might help you improve your future stories. That, and maybe it can also help someone who’ll just stumble upon this comment section one day.