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Maniac92


Amateur writer, professional slacker.

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This story is a sequel to MLP: FML


An insane and illogical sequel parody of your favorite ponies.

It's been months since Twilight Sparkle stopped Nightmare Moon and moved to Ponyville. In that time, she's gone on many adventures with her friends and has finally gotten used to their insane antics.

However, new enemies are coming to destroy them. Can Twilight and her friends survive a mad god, an evil plan to take over Equestria, and an author who's finally adding a plot to this story?

Rated T for cartoon horse violence, strong language, and suggestive humor.

Cover art generously provided by Script!

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 118 )

“Girls, I need you to shut the fuck up for a minute,” interrupted Celestia. “

I'm just imagining this as so deadpan and casual. Curious to see where this is going. Also nice little twist with Pinkie Pie.

Woo, let's get ready for disaster, disharmony and dick jokes from Dash!

Welp, we're boned. Time to open the panic room and break out the vodka.

Is is me, or is your Celestia acting more intelligently that the real one?

Well, it would be the perogative of a true Master of Chaos to make the very Plot go completely off the rails!

Got to admit, this entrance for Discord was pretty epic.

And nice explanation for Pinkie's abilities.

AN EXPLANATION FOR HPW PINKIE CAN DEFY REALITY?! ARE YOU MAD?! but seriously thank you for continuing this wonderful trainwreck

There better be a MOV Discord reference.

"I AM YOUR GOD NOW! BRING ME YOUR VIRGINS!"

Meanwhile:
The two Royal Guards watched the front door of the library intensely.

“…I don’t think she’s home,” said Depressed Guard. He sighed and said, “We came all this way for nothing…”

“I’M GIVING HER ANOTHER HOUR,” said Gung-Ho Guard, not taking his eyes off the door.

Man. I almost forgot about these guys. :twilightsheepish:

Oh god. It's finally here.

The two Royal Guards watched the front door of the library intensely.

“…I don’t think she’s home,” said Depressed Guard. He sighed and said, “We came all this way for nothing…”

“I’M GIVING HER ANOTHER HOUR,” said Gung-Ho Guard, not taking his eyes off the door.

Never. Change. These are the best background ponies ever.


Oh, and Discord is back and rather pissed off. Well, I expect the next few chapters to hilarious and disturbing. Possibly hilariously disturbing.

Also, kudos to you for explaining Pinkie's powers in a way that, surprisingly, makes a lot more damn sense then the series ever did. The fact that this explanation is in a pardoy fic that twist everything we know and love in the main series is just icing on the cake.

Wait!!! What???:rainbowhuh:
Did Discord make a portals 2 reference at the end there? :pinkiegasp:

“Do I still do that?” asked Colgate, chuckling. “Ah…that takes me back…” She wandered off, lost in her memories.

... Weirdo.

“Anyway,” interrupted Pinkie, “I ran outside because I didn’t want to miss the mail pony! They’ve got a big, thick package for me!”
“That’s what she said,” said Rainbow immediately.

I, wouldn't have been able to resist either.

“It’s probably not a good thing that all these weird clouds are showin’ up over the farm, is it?” asked Applejack.

Indeed not.

Spike glared back at her. “One of these days, you’re going to need me. Then who’ll be laughing?”
“…Who?” asked Rainbow.
“Huh?” asked Spike, turning to face her.
“Who’ll be laughing?” asked Rainbow. “I want to know.”

Goddammit Rainbow.

“Girls, I need you to shut the fuck up for a minute,”

Blunt.

“You just turned him to stone?” questioned Rarity. “That’s a little extreme, isn’t it?”

Trust me, it's not.

“What should we do?” asked Twilight. “This guy sounds like a psychopath.”

He is. He's a psychopath with a penchant for sick mind games and the ability to warp reality to his whims.

Celestia turned and looked at Twilight. “Over the years, I’ve been transferring Discord’s power to various ponies. Ponies that could use his power for fun instead of sadism. Ponies that needed a little joy in their lives.”
“…Like who?” asked Twilight suspiciously.
Celestia turned and nodded to Pinkie. “You’re friends with one of them.”

That makes sense. Why does that make sense.

Everyone turned to see an individual with a sadistic smirk on his face. Behind him, the vault door swung on its hinges and in his hands were the Elements of Harmony.
“Hello, Princess Celestia,” said Discord, giving the stunned Alicorn a mocking bow. “It’s been a long time.”

Goddamn I'm loving him already!

“Your brother didn’t seem to mind,” said Rainbow, smirking. “In fact, he looked a little excited from what I saw.”

“…Meaning?” asked Applejack.

“I gave your brother a bone-” began Rainbow.

Marrow Transplant? That makes no sense, Dashie.

And that dialogue read automatic John DeLancie.

Ponies all, you are deeeeep doodoo. Deep Discord doodoo.

Serious deep Discord doodoo.



He always was a better villain...

Rated T for cartoon horse violence, strong language, and suggestive humor.

Does this means Rainbow Dash isn't going to act much Rainbow Dash?
Also, hyped about new chapters!

6896630 Rainbow Dash is suggestive humor.

Ah, it brings far too much joy to my heart to see Sweetie Belle in all her demented, psychotic glory

Poor background pony

Oh Applejack. Dependable is boring, and Discord loathes boring. Maybe if you beat his face in a few times he'll reconsider your status as 'least interesting of the Mane 6'.

“Don’t you trust me?” asked Discord, sounding hurt.
“No,” replied Celestia immediately.

For good reason.

“How did you escape your prison so quickly?” asked Celestia. “I kept painting special runes on your statue to slow you down. The Dicks of Sealing should have given us more time.”
“Your dicks couldn’t keep me hard forever, Celestia,” said Discord with a smirk.

Oh wow.

“Really?” asked Discord. “Hmm…can’t imagine why. Maybe something’s holding you back?”

Like a pro!

“Why, if it isn’t the lovely Rarity!” said Discord. “I hear you’re an up-and-coming fashion designer.”
Rarity turned her gaze away from Rainbow in order to flutter her eyelashes at Discord. “Go on,” she said.

You realize you're being played like a fiddle?

“Oh sorry,” said Discord in his regular voice, “I thought that was what you do, isn’t it? Alternate between normal and psychotic?”

Sorta.

“Ah yes,” said Discord, frowning as he looked at Pinkie, “The Pretender. Are you enjoying using my powers?”
“Uh-huh!” said Pinkie with a big grin. “I have a blast using them!”
“So do I,” said Discord, snapping his fingers.
The floor beneath Pinkie started to glow red. A purple glow surrounded Pinkie and quickly pulled her to the side right before a pillar of flames shot up out of the ground.

Too close. Also, this scares me. He's willing to resort to murder. If he's this bad, how bad will Tirek or Sombra be?

“Oh, but I know all about you, Twilight Sparkle,” said Discord, grinning at her. “Tell me, how do you feel about Celestia not telling you that your friend has some of my powers?”

He's scaring me.

“Hmm?” hummed Discord, looking at her. “Ah! Applejack! I nearly forgot about you!” He chuckled and said, “My apologies, I suppose I was just caught up in talking to the important ponies.”

Oh yeah sure, a Backgroundjack joke.

“Sorry ladies,” said Discord’s smug voice, “But I’m going to have to put you both on house arrest for the time being. You’re simply much too dangerous to be around other ponies.”
Celestia growled and pointed her horn at the glass balcony doors. A bright golden light glowed from her horn…and then fizzled and died.

Clever Discord.

“He’s got a point,” said Luna.
Luna!” hissed Celestia.
“Not that I’m blaming you or anything!” said Luna quickly.

Besides, you were insane at the time, Luna, and it was all Celestia could do.

“Great…” sighed Twilight. “Now how are we going to find the Elements. All Discord said was that they were ‘close to home’.”
“Well that sucks,” said Rainbow. “Hasn’t he been a statue for over a thousand years? Who knows if his home even exists anymore.”
“Statue…” muttered Twilight. Her eyes widened. “Statue! He must mean the Elements are in the Princess’s statue garden!”

Logical, but, not quite.

The second Snails touched the amulet, it shot forward and pressed itself to his throat. A metal band expanded from it, wrapping around the colt’s neck. Snails’s head jerked and he shut his eyes as red sparks shot out of the jewel. When he opened his eyes again, they had changed to a blood red color.

Oh dear.

An axe flew by his head and struck the ground in front of him, blade first.
Discord slowly turned around to see Sweetie Belle glaring at him. “If anyone’s going to take over Equestria,” she growled, holding a mace in her hooves, “It’s going to be me!”

Oh really?

Snails growled, his eyes going red again. “Over my dead body,” he snarled. His horn glowed with an evil red light.
Sweetie glared at him and said, “That’s the idea.” With a shriek, she charged at Snails with her mace raised high.

Ah yes, the one cool lin e Greedo had.

“How dare you!” said Rarity, glaring at him. “My darling little Sweetie Belle is an angel!”

“Oh my god,” said Rarity in horror, “We’re earth ponies now!”
“No!” yelled Twilight. “Anything but that!”
“How could this happen to me?!” screamed Rainbow.
“The horror!” sobbed Fluttershy.
Pinkie and Applejack rolled their eyes at the other four’s dramatics. “It ain’t that bad,” said Applejack.

I swear this is a reference to a piece of fanart.

Discord snapped his fingers and a black binder appeared in his hands. The words MLP: FML 2 were written on the front of the binder. “This really is a fascinating read, you know,” said Discord, smirking at the look of horror on Pinkie’s face.

He has the script.

Discord grinned sadistically and said, “I’m looking forward to it.” He snapped his fingers and disappeared in a puff of smoke.

Usually it's a flash of light.

A demigod versus an up and coming tyrant. Sweetie belle will win, because you can't kill marshmallows.

This is my favorite chapter so far!

Wow, this chapter really hits deep.

I know this is for laughs and all but the whole giving AJ flack for not being well represented and the deep personal issues and how the mane six are being used by Celestia. This turned serious fast. Discord doesn't seem that evil in a sense now that you show how he causes chaos of his own free will rather than Celestia manipulating events and controlling ponies lives to fulfill her desires.

Also, Sweetie Belle needs to own Snails, there can only be one!

6914234 Yeah, things are getting a bit serious, aren't they? Don't worry, Discord has plenty of fun in store for everyone!
...Aside from the Mane Six. They're probably going to die.

Whoa. Since discord got the script he knows what is going to happen.
Auto-win.

6915059 Not necessarily. Remember, Pinkie had the script for Season 1 and still couldn't stop problems from happening.

Am I the one one who thinks the murderous duo should team up for conquest?

Also,

"...I have the weirdest boner right now," whispered Rainbow Dash.

My hunch is confirmed. :moustache:

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What I mean to say is that Discord knows what is going to happen, even if he can't stop it, maybe he'll do something about it.
Well unless he has powers to break the 4th wall and going directly to your house and making you change what is going on, he can't win.
Or... he could edit the script and change things, Pinkie will thought that "that" is going to happen but it didn't happen.
Or maybe break a page so she doesn't know what will happen.
Oh speaking of the script, isn't he going to talk with "you" in the story like Pinkie used to?

6920883 Maybe. He's a little too busy to chat with "me" right now.

....I honestly want to see the Sweetie Belle vs Snails fight actually...

Write. Just keep writing. The first MLP: FML was one of the funniest things I have ever read, and this is shaping up to be as good as it, if not better. Discord is even better here than in the actual show, which is saying a lot. I love how he tries to manipulate the--ahem--heroes here in ways the show didn't.
Also, Applejack as background pony is hilarious and sad simultaneously.
Also, Evil Sweetie Belle is still hilarious. Pit her against corrupted Snails and it's glorious.
I eagerly await the next chapter!

This Discord is really mean.

I love Fluttershy's music.
If Pinkie can just summon the script, why did she have to wait for it to come in the mail?
Rainbow, ever the enthusiast.

Wow... this was harsh...

“Let me go!” yelled Rainbow. “I want to kick you so hard in the crotch your testicles will fly up and hit the roof of your mouth!”
“…Ok,” said Discord. “One, that’s not much incentive for me to let go. Two, I don’t think that’s physically possible.

Two, I don’t think that’s physically possible.

I don't know, Discord. Tex killed a guy with his own skull.

“I just told you that we’re in an apple orchard,” said Discord. He idly reached up and plucked an apple off the tree. He bit into it with a loud crunch. He chewed for a few moments before swallowing. “Delicious,” he said. He looked back at Applejack and said, “You really should try one of these, you know. They’re to die for.”

You, are weird.

“Would ya shut up about me not bein’ important?!” yelled Applejack. “Why do you keep sayin’ Ah’m not?!”
Discord shrugged and said, “Can you blame me? It’s not like you do anything exciting.”

Oh?

“Easy!” said Applejack. “Ah went to the Grand Galloping Gala.”
“Didn’t you only get to go because Twilight had tickets for you?” asked Discord. “If she hadn’t give you one, you wouldn’t have gone.”
“That…might be true…” said Applejack slowly. She shook her head and said, “But what about Appaloosa? Ah made the choice to go see Braeburn.”
“Only after he sent you a letter asking for help,” said Discord. “You wouldn’t have had any reason to go otherwise.”
“Alright,” said Applejack, looking frustrated, “Then Rainbow Dash-”
“Was the one to approach you in order to get you in that competition,” interrupted Discord. “And, just to save time, you only fought Nightmare Moon because Twilight went after her.”

He makes a good point.

“How Big Mac dresses is his own business,” said Applejack. “Ah won’t have you makin’ fun of him because he’s more comfortable in clothes for mares.”

As far as I'm concerned with that, he can do whatever he wants, doesn't really bother me.

Discord chuckled and asked, “Who are you trying to convince? Me…or yourself?” He looked at the sky and said, “Well…I’ve got to head out. I’ve got a long day of conquering Equestria to get through.” He looked back at Applejack and said, “Can I get you anything before I leave? Oh! I know…” He snapped his fingers and an apple appeared in his hand. He set it on the ground in front of Applejack and smirked. “Enjoy!” he said. He snapped his fingers and disappeared in a puff of smoke.
Applejack walked forwards until she was right in front of the apple. “They wouldn’t just abandon me for someone else…” she muttered as she stared at the red fruit. “…Would they?” She took a deep breath and said, “No. Ah won’t let that happen. No matter what.” She raised a hoof and stomped on the apple, crushing it.

Once again, I feel the need to point out that Discord's reality warping is a flash of light a la Q, not a puff of smoke. Just a nitpick. Also, I can almost imagine AJ going grey.

Pinkie blinked at him. “…You’re not?”

He's so much older than you cradle robbing doesn't even BEGIN to cover it.

Celestia looked around and asked, “So where are we anyway? It looks like some bleak, desolate wasteland.”
“It’s my parents’ rock farm,” explained Pinkie. “So…pretty much.”

It's the little things.

“Oh, we have birthday studies,” explained Pinkie. “Usually about whatever rock our parents give to us. My parents really like rocks.”

No shit?

“I cast a spell to take me to the saddest pony in all of Equestria,” said Celestia. She smiled and said, “And it led me right to you!”

Oh, man that, wow.

Celestia paused for a second. “…No. No it is not. Chaos magic is…tricky. It could overwhelm you if you’re not meant to have it.”
“But you think I am meant to have it?” asked Pinkie.
“I hope so,” said Celestia, “But there’s no guarantee.” She paused and continued, “If you don’t want to do this, it’s fine. I can find someone a bit older…someone who-”
“I’ll do it,” said Pinkie.

I'm reminded of a certain event in the Third Volume of RWBY. Those who've seen it know what I mean.

“Wow!” said Pinkie. “So, I can get anything I want? Whenever I want?”

Within reason, provided it's funny and or harmless.

“You’re not the first one I’ve given this power to,” said Celestia. “There’s been a few ponies that have had this magic. A lot of them couldn’t handle it or tried to use it for their own selfish gain.”
“What happened to them?” asked Pinkie.
“I took the magic away from them,” said Celestia simply. She turned and looked Pinkie in the eye. “This magic is a special gift that I’m entrusting to you. If I think that you’re abusing it, I’m going to take it back.”

I like this Celestia, she's a lot like canon Celestia, but a good deal more blunt and less cryptic. She does not pull her punches.

Celestia laughed and said, “Pinkie, I don’t think you understand what I meant. The ponies that I had to take the magic back from were trying to do things like take over Equestria. I’m not worried about you throwing parties with your magic.”
“You’re not?” asked Pinkie happily.

Considering what you could do, throwing parties is harmless as can be.

“Why…you, of course,” said Discord. “Tell me something, my dear. If you had a script detailing you and your friends’ little adventures, why did Nightmare Moon still return?”
“Oh…well…” said Pinkie. “We needed to get Princess Luna back and-”
“Uh-huh,” interrupted Discord. “And why did you ostracize Zecora with the others? You could have informed them that she was harmless.”
“I…uh…” began Pinkie.
“Why did you allow Rarity to make a fool of herself in front of Hoity Toity?” asked Discord.
“She-”
“Why did you allow Twilight Sparkle to injure herself when she was observing you?”
“I didn’t-”
“Why didn’t you stop Rarity from upstaging Rainbow Dash? Why haven’t you helped the Cutie Mark Crusaders in their endeavors? Why did you let Rarity get kidnapped by Diamond Dogs? Why did you let the buffalo and the settler ponies go to war with each other, or why didn’t you tell Fluttershy that Philomena was a phoenix, or why didn’t you tell Spike he wasn’t getting replaced?” continued Discord.

... The worst part is how he makes a point...

“Everything about you is meaningless,” hissed Discord. “It doesn’t matter what you say. It doesn’t matter what you do. Your destiny has already been written for you. You’re getting led through your life with no control of where you end up. That’s why you can’t deviate from your script. That’s why you can’t help your friends when they need you. It’s because you know, deep in your heart, that you aren’t the real Pinkie Pie. You’re a facsimile, a parody designed to entertain. To spit out references and jokes in the hope that you’ll make people laugh. Well, I’m laughing. I’m laughing at you. You’re pathetic. You’re useless. Without your script, you can’t do anything at all.”

He's like the Joker but worse.

Pinkie took a deep breath. “I’ll hold us all together…” she sniffed, “No matter what…”

Cue her turning grey. That aside, it's great how you're not just going by Return of Harmony, you're making your own version of it, not just doing what the original did.

This,” said Discord, using a fork to spear some lettuce, “Is a light lunch, my dear. Running around all day has left me feeling rather puckish.”
Rarity blinked. “…Don’t you mean peckish?”

He's Discord. Either or at this point.

Discord nodded, “I think so too.” He snapped his fingers and orange color seemed to bleed onto the suit. Within moments, the suit was a dark orange. “What do you think?” asked Discord. An orange top hat appeared in the air above him. It dropped and landed perfectly on his head.

Clever.

“I’m sorry you have to deal with such an embarrassment,” continued the mare. She gave Rarity a sympathetic gaze. “It must be hard trying to get by while having that burden.”

... Bitch!

Rarity gave the other pony an icy glare. “For your information, I happen to love my little sister. I won’t tolerate you speaking ill of her or my friends.”

It really is the little touches that make this so good.

Rarity looked around the empty café. “Giving up my dreams…” she muttered. She shook her head. “I’d gladly give up everything for my friends. Even if…it means being…miserable…” She stood still, lost in her thoughts.

Discord, you are a Magnificent Manipulative Bastard. I can see why this took so long to come out, not that I mind.

“Ah, that explains it,” said Discord. “In that case, I don’t blame him for running. Who knows what to expect with you?”
“What do you mean?” asked Fluttershy.
Discord sighed and said, “You seem to alternate between two mindsets: angry and timid. I’m sure Angel was worried that you’d either scream or whimper at him.”

He's not wrong.

Fluttershy stared at the ground. “He…he’s just trying to fool me,” she decided. “Discord probably just made it sound like my friends hated me with his magic. They don’t hate me…right?”

They don't.

“Let me go!” yelled Rainbow. “I want to kick you so hard in the crotch your testicles will fly up and hit the roof of your mouth!”

You're not exactly giving him reason to.

“How is your loyalty repaid?” repeated Discord. “From what I can see, your friends treat you like an idiot who’s only good for spouting of jokes about sex.”

Eh, it gets a laugh now and then.

“You have a choice, Rainbow Dash,” said Discord. “You have two options to show your loyalty. You can stay here and support your friends, or you can go and see your father in order to see if he’s in danger.” Discord smirked at the stunned look on Rainbow’s face. “Clock’s ticking.” He snapped his fingers and disappeared.

A weighty choice is yours to make, the right selection or a big mistake, if the wrong choice you choose to pursue, the foundations of home will crumble without you.

Twilight’s jaw dropped. “T-then what the fuck was the point of this?!” she spluttered.
“To distract you while my double did his job,” explained Discord.

Oh, dear.

“It was really the best time for it, you know,” continued Discord. “All of you, the Bearers of the Elements of Harmony and Equestria’s defenders, were busy playing games in a maze. That gave my double enough time to wander down to Ponyville and change it for the better.”
Twilight’s eyes went wide. “So…we…”
“Lost,” finished Discord. His smile grew bigger. “And I won. Equestria is mine.”

Oh fuck all kinds of duck.

7008430 Let's say that at the end of each script, Pinkie has instructions on how to get the next one. For this particular script, it was going to arrive via mail. Then Discord happened.

You know...this second season just doesn't seem as humorous as the first. It's like, instead of being a comical parody, it's now an ultra-adult version of season 2. Is that on purpose?

Please don't take this as an insult. I'm going to follow the story anyway, and it's really well-written. The tone is just so jarringly different from season 1.

7008519 Hey, just FYI, I'm running a Fallout Equestria stream on my YouTube channel in a few minutes. It's Gearhead Gears.

7008532 This is Discord. He warned us Discord wouldn't be the same as in the show. That means he's gonna be pretty dark.

7008532 These first few chapters are going to be a little more serious, but it will always stay a parody. This chapter in particular was always going to be serious, due to Discord giving breaking speeches to the Mane 6. However, this series will never go away from being a comedy.

7008575 Nice. I'd tune in, but I have a paper I have to finish.

Well that went differently from the canon. I especially liked the part where Rarity had to seduce a minotaur and Pinkie wrestled Dash in a giant pool of gelatin.

spouting of

Spouting off

Go Discord!!! ......What? Just me?

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Agreed.

7008580 Never mind that, it screwed up majorly.

Wow. Discord just shut everyone down in a distraction.

The tone is much more serious this time around, and Discord is a complete asshole.

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