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LightningSword


No more lying to myself. I'm finally free.


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After Fluttershy finally blows up in her face, a genuinely confused Rainbow Dash has a discussion with Twilight Sparkle, concerning the events leading up to it. Twilight confronts Rainbow Dash with quite a number of occasions that prove that Rainbow Dash isn't quite as considerate of her friends as she thought—and Fluttershy isn't always as willing to please as she seems. But Dash truly is a good friend, and as long as she remembers her friend's feelings, it might not be too late for Rainbow Dash to patch things up.

Partially inspired by Jay-The-Brony's "...That's It?"

Now with amazing artwork by JohnDarkblaze15!

Featured on 1/24/2016!

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Comments ( 114 )

Top stuff. I LOVE fics like this, where a member Mane 6's behaviour gets called out, and Rainbow Dash is more culpable than most of this kind of behaviour. Goes straight into my 'Favourites' tray, and you're earned yourself a nice, juicy thumbs up. :pinkiehappy:

6865167 Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

I liked this story my friend.... I enjoyed that you got Rainbow Dash to learn a lesson on her own and didn't try to force her to learn it.

6865298 Thank you, and thanks for favoriting! :twilightsmile:

6865302 not a problem my friend.

The feels here... :pinkiesad2:

This was a beautiful and heartfelt experience, LightningSword. You've earned yourself a like and a favorite.

...yea it's alright. Twi could've told her all this sooner. But hey, no Fluttershy worship or RD satanizing so that's acceptable in my book. Better than I thought it was gonna be.

6865315 Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

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Surprisingly, I really liked this one. With your past fics involving these two, I've tended to notice that RD often gets treated like the devil. It was nice to see a fic from you that called her out on her behavior without demonizing her. I really liked how every character was portrayed, and how the story was written as a whole. Enjoy a new fave and thumbs up, mate! Cheers :pinkiesmile:

Well, this certainly skyrocketed while I was away.

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6865402 Thanks so much for reading! :pinkiehappy:

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And I'm sorry about the downvote attack :/

Rainbow kinda had this coming...:rainbowderp:

I got a little misty near the end :fluttercry:
:fluttershbad: Feeeeeeelllsssss

Umm...

Honestly, what's the point of this story?

Those bullies can downvote my posts all they want. I'm not removing them. Let's show them they can't dominate us.

This was certainly an enjoyable thing to read. The beginning served as a great catalyst for all of the tension. In fact, I absolutely love the tension that was maintained throughout, especially with the argument between Twilight and Rainbow Dash. The way it culminated in the ending scene was not only fitting, but also such a heartfelt scene that very nearly triggered a sudden need for me to take a lot of insulin :fluttercry:

Keep up being awesome, LightningSword! :pinkiehappy:

6866024 Thank you, and thanks for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

Ohhh, this story was soo amazing. It's so inspiring and emotional. Definitely one of your best stories yet. :yay:

6866033 Wow, really? :raritystarry: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy:

I enjoyed this story, especially when addressing that even though Rainbow Dash was not considerate to Fluttershy in the past and present, Fluttershy is still there trying to make things better between them.

Well done.

6866317 Thank you for reading. :twilightsmile:

Man, who's downvoting the compliments? :trixieshiftright:

Still, I love the story! It's amazing!:pinkiehappy:

6866440 Thanks for the favorite. :twilightsmile:

This story was brilliant, Lightning! Another fantastic read from a tremendous writer. :twilightsmile:

6866321 Pretty good pretty good at first I thought I wouldn't like it but it hooked me before I knew it and it had a good twist at the end well done.

6866879 Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:
6866836 Thanks for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

6866033 (Please don't take this the wrong way.) So I've finally opened my eyes and concluded that you're not coming back and eventually in the future I'll just be a forgotten memory to you. I'm sad that it had to end this way, but at the same time I'm not gonna take back what I said. Also I explained what happened to my dad, Kenzi and other people I know IRL and how your trying to pretend WE never existed and how your holding my account hostage just you'll have me stop talking to you, and they think the same that well, you ended up more of a hinderence to me rather than a blessing. I know I'm pretty much dead to you, just "some person" trying to ruin your life (it really hurt me, but you probably don't care, hell a part of me is saying that you enjoyed it) but you know, life's a bitch. I wouldn't say you were a nuisance or an obstacle in my life but more of a....distraction. A distraction that made feel used and taken for granted but a distraction nonetheless. I'm thinking about writing a story about this actually, it might help you get a better perspective of I've gone through. Yea, I think that's a good idea. Want me to show it to you when it's done?

“A pure heart does not demean the spirit of an individual, it, instead, compels the individual to examine his spirit.”
― Criss Jami, Killosophy

Wonderful story, kinda bummed out that I hadn't read it sooner. But non the less I enjoyed this story.

6867054 Thanks for favoriting. Glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

6867095 I don't see how I could not enjoy it. It was well thought out, wonderfully written, and excellently executed in every way. Twilight was who we all know her to be in the show, intelligent, understanding, and willing to help solve a problem.
Rainbow Dash was brash and arrogant as we all know her to be, but when she realized her fault she regretted her actions.
And lets not forget Fluttershy. Caring to a fault that even after she was in the right to turn down Rainbow she regretted her action, and wanted to find a way to save her friendship.
Keep up the great work.

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We ought to just upvote those comments.

A little heavy handed on the empathy lesson, but you have do so to penetrate a thick skull like Rainbow's. I think the people who down voted this have trouble with the concept.

6867326 Thanks for the fave. Glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Hmmm. Quite the thought-provoking tale you've spun here.

I suppose I can relate to this dilemma. A very extroverted friend of mine really has little consideration for the well-being of another friend of mine, specifically the girl whom I had helped out a few months ago. He tried to accuse her of lying of her being raped by her brother. Naturally, I shut him up. Now, I'm not saying all extroverts are like this, as I have met some nice outgoing people. It's those who really don't understand tact that piss me off.

Regardless of personal events, I rather liked this story, though I feel it was a bit too telly in some place. And the ending could have been a bit more concrete. But it was still an enjoyable read.

6867145 You're welcome.

6866889 No, and stop talking to me already.

6867778 "As you wish"- Boba Fett. The title will be "Its all over but the crying".

6867293 Exactly what I've been doing XD

This fic is beautiful, and I enjoy it a lot. :heart: :yay:

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You want three dislikes on a comment, trolls? We're going to give it six upvotes. See what direction your little game goes in.

Aw man, so much liquid pride! :raritycry:

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