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Jade Ring

"There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you." -Maya Angelou


On a clear and cloudless night, a young girl starts for home somewhat later than usual. She knows her parents aren't worried. They know she can be trusted. They know what a good girl she is.

The streets are empty, the stores are all closed...

...and someone watches from the shadows as a girl walks home alone at midnight.

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Comments ( 26 )

Oh my God. I didn't know I wanted this till now. :rainbowwild:

Poor human Sunset, I feel so bad for her. :fluttercry:

Once again, you do not disappoint, Jade Ring! I look forward to more, if there is more!

Macabre. Something the movies never touch on, but you always wondered about. This is the first story I've come across dealing with SS's background in this fashion.

Yipe. I've heard this theory before, but not for a long time. Certainly not when Sunset has been a sympathetic character for so long.

I mean, it doesn't seem impossible, but I'm also inclined to agree with one of my fellow tropers who claimed that the Sunset we saw in Rainbow Rocks wasn't one who could have recovered from being a murderer.:rainbowwild:

This could fit in real well as the start of an alternate universe thriller of sorts. It doesn't seem plausible given Sunset's behavior in Rainbow Rocks and Friendship Games, but oh wow that was dark and fun to read!

I'm not suggesting or requesting you continue this since it is obviously intended to be a short story. I just love short stories that end with an open and expansive set of threads that makes the readers mind wander off in a million different directions. :pinkiecrazy:

Good work! :twilightsmile:

Interesting idea—perhaps a little more dark and violent than I'd expect her backstory to be, but a very interesting idea nonetheless. Is the title related to the movie?

I liked this.

It's been a long time since I've seen a fic about this theory. Good job pulling it off.

Ooh...dark. I like it!:scootangel:

Who was it tho? But great story!:rainbowwild:

6855052 It says right there in the next to last paragraph

~lovely. I love dark stories:pinkiecrazy:

Nicely done. I'm with everyone else on it not really feeling plausible for Sunset's character as we're currently familiar with, and I think an AU tag may be warranted because of that, but I definitely like it as a story. It's an interesting concept, it's good at setting a mood, and the use of book-ends was fantastic.

Wow. This... this is nothing short of absolutely amazing.

Wow that was intense. Once you mentioned there was a feminine breathing coming from the attacker, I thought "who could this be?" And then the reveal! What a shock! It puts a whole new edge on the idea of Sunset Shimmer's original human self not existing in the Equestria Girls world.

Great work at building the tension all the way through. I felt your strongest writing occurred during the physical attack. There's something very visceral about the way you write physical action.

I felt so uncomfortable by the end of this story after such a horrid thing occurred. Sometimes fear isn't the result, but a lingering uneasiness is.

Very good story! Fav and upvote :)

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Knew where this was going almost from the outset, but that didn't make it any less enjoyable. :)

Seems plausible to me. I mean Luna is super nice and reformed now, but she once tried to straight up murder Celestia. And also Twilight.

HI there. I hope you don't mind, but I loved this fic so much that I have adapted it into an audiobook on YouTube:

7996212 Absolutely stellar! Really loved this. Please feel free to work your magic with any of my other stories should you wish.

Jesus Christ... that was awesome! Just listened to Scribblers reading and Damn!

I look forward to more of your work.

Just a little bit predictable, but still, quite an enjoyable piece to read nonetheless. I was able to figure out the twist the moment Sunset Original’s well-behavior got more details. The writing is good and immersive, though I’d like a bit more action when things start tumbling down and the pace doesn’t convey a feel of rush. As for the rest, great job!

(And that’s when fridge horror strikes back. Now I’m catching myself brooding over how a doppelganger from the outside could just replace you at any moment.)

Very well done job!

Holy f*ck. That was intense.

Oh, wow. I did not expect such a thing to happen, and yet It makes so much sense. Poor EqG Sunset.

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