Wut are ya hidin', Mac?

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ReturnoftheMac

ReturnoftheMac #1 · Jan 16th, 2016 · 5 · ·

Sure it's a bit unusual knowin’ that Big Mac is datin’ one of my little sister’s friends

Deep down AJ half-expected him to date one of her own friends.

Hopeful_Ink_Hoof

Hopeful_Ink_Hoof #2 · Jan 16th, 2016 · · ·

Not bad. Not exactly to my liking though. On a writing note, the word is "petite" and you don't need to include small with it since being small is a major trait of something being petite. So it's redundant.

On a more personal note: not a fan of the "well I can't blame you," part. I know she's older so her personality may of changed, but there's an arrogance to it that feels out of character to Sweetie Belle.

Emeralddragon2

Emeralddragon2 #3 · Jan 16th, 2016 · 2 · ·

I HOPE HE IS HIDING CANDY

I be the CHOSEN ONE

I be the CHOSEN ONE #4 · Jan 16th, 2016 · 1 · ·

This is so perfect. Ah love it.

Lightstruck

Lightstruck #5 · Jan 17th, 2016 · 3 · ·

Not bad, not bad. A couple grammar and spelling errors, but all worth the read. 7.5 / 10

metroid_freak

metroid_freak #6 · Jan 18th, 2016 · 6 · ·

|"...my body is ready."

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Kingmoonwar19

Kingmoonwar19 #7 · Jan 21st, 2016 · 1 · ·

6846323 Spider-Man no Spider-Man yes .

I have derp bite my self and I am now derpfeted Derp

German Kaiserreich

German Kaiserreich #8 · Feb 21st, 2016 · · ·

6846323

Velvet Rose

Velvet Rose #9 · Mar 30th, 2016 · · ·

I loved it. Very sexy, very romantic, a cute little ending there too. Some grammer and misspellings. E.g. "APple Bloom" i saw that in one paragraph but im too lazy to copy and paste. Overall fantastic story i loved it!

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