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Joeyjambo122


I am a very recent brony as well a fan of Spike and Shining Armor and a first time writer, so wish me luck!

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Spike the dragon, number one assistant to princess Twilight Sparkle and faithful friend. Sadly for Spike, ever since Twilight became a princess and defeated Tirek, he slowly began feel like he doesn't a place in the world and doesn't believe he is useful for anything, especially since his six friends are once again called to prevent another disaster and having him stay behind and has also given up his crush on Rarity.

Sweetie Belle, Rarity's little sister and Cutie Mark Crusader and great friend to fellow crusaders Applebloom and Scootaloo. Sweetie had earned her cutie mark along with her friends and her talent was having an incredible singing voice. Despite having stage fright, she signs up for a talent competition, though she slowly begins to lose her confidence in her singing and it gets worse when her sister is called off to save Equestria from another disaster and has to miss the talent show.


Both children go to sleep that night and experience unlike anything they had and end up in the dream world of Nightopia and meet one of the inhabitants of this world, Nights.

Spike and Sweetie Belle decide to gather the ideya that was stolen from them and help their new friend, Nights save the dream world from the Nightmarens.
Takes post season 5 and after "Crusaders of the Lost Mark"
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This is the very first story I've ever written outside of short five sentence paragraphs for school so some constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.

Note: I've recently become a brony so yay for me! As well as some Spike, Sweetie Belle shipping.

Nights series and characters are a copyright of SEGA and Sonic Team
MLP: FIM characters and locations are copyright Lauren Faust and Hasbro

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 22 )

6855279 Thanks for the advice Artie, but please call me Joe.

aawwww I thought it would mean Luna X Nights

First impressions are really important, so for that I would strongly suggest you read these to yourself out loud before you post it. That would help you notice any dialogue that just doesn't feel right.

6875702 Thanks for the advice and I'm just glad your not one those people who bash every new writers story just to be jerks. I am also working on a side project featuring Spike involving the anime series Yo-Kai Watch, so I hope you and many others provide some good insight on it when I finish the first chapter.

Well I like this, I hope being from a world of magic Spike get's to keep some of Nights' magic when he awakes up.

6875969 Spike and Yo-Kai watch would be awesome, I think fallowing the plot of the game would better though. Also I wanted to ask is going to be fallowing Will's story line before the final battle, I ready can see your going to do the endings of both of them I just want to know if Spike's going to be the one to reach hope first i guess is they way I can say it without to much spoiling the ending?

6879805 Funny you should mention that. I'm trying see how Spike learns his lesson and what occurs after he wakes up. It's the same case with Sweetie Belle but I do have an idea on what occurs after she wakes up as well as the epilogue. If you or anyone else on the site have some ideas, feel free to share them. I doing the best I can on my first story and I want to make it as good as possible.

Story's interesting, hope you'll continue it.

7045994 I'll try my best but I'm currently focused on my other story Spike's Yo-Kai Adventures. If you could, give it a read you might like it. It's based off of one of my favorite games, Yo-Kai Watch.

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I've read some of it and I'm not interested in Yo-Kai Watch to be honest.

aawwww
1. I like it that Spike has given up on his former crush
2. I like that there is finally a Nights story, that is called like that and actually has Nights in it.
3. I don´t really like it that it sounds like they would only meet him in the dream world and that he won´t see any other Ponys.
4. I kind of hoped someone would make a Nights X Luna story. Every other kind of too obvious shippings are already made.

If I should be wrong with my fourth point, then I would love to read it. I just already had watched the game, and just don´t feel like repeating that right now.

There's something I'm a bit worried about, and that would be the bosses in each part. Are you going to make up your own bosses, or use the original ones? Because in the game, and show Cerberus is there so you can see the problem with the bosses correct?

How's it going with the next chapter?

7354736 I haven't worked on it in a while, mostly because I've been working on some of my other stories.

7354760 I can respect that, but remember these words: Lose faith in yourself, you lose faith in your story.

This is amazing! :pinkiehappy: sure wish you would continue it... :fluttercry:

7354760
So does this mean your not going to continue your good story?? Need suggestions in case of writers block?

Really I can help I even got something helpful.

Please continue your story

I am very interested in this story. I can never seem to find a NiGHTS story here. I hope you can continue one day.

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That's nice of you to say, but I have no intention of continuing this story, largely because I just got started with writing when I posted it and it was just a word for word cooy of the original game.

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