As Zapp and Matter-Horn made their way to Starlight Corps labs they saw that there was nopony guarding the front door so they walked in and see Flash Sentry tied up with tape on his mouth they manage to untie him and Flash said
"You shouldn't have come."
"Why?" Matter-Horn asked
"BECAUSE OF ME, THAT WHY." a voice spoke from behind them
They turned around and saw a 10 foot red centaur blocking their escape root and that's Matter-Horn got a better look at the centaur
"Tirek?" Matter-Horn said
"NOT ANYMORE NOW I'M APOCALYPSE!" he said
"AND YOU TWO ARE GOING KNOW WHERE."
Just than Zapp threw a smoke bomb on the floor and them along with flash made their escape outside of the building
As they escape Matter-Horn told Flash to run to safety which he did
"NOOOOOOOO!" he screamed as he jumped intro the wall of the building crashing out of the building behind the heroes
He began to charge up his horn blast at which point Zapp said
"Oh Sh-." she didn't have time to complete her senxce and covered her face weith her hooves as he blasted all of the buildings around them with his laser.
"MATTER-HORN I'M HERE TO KILL YOU IS THIS A BAD TIME!" he said
As he approached the heroes a hooded pony approach him and threw what looked like metal horseshoes at him which knocked him back, but not before he grabbed the hood and pulled it off the pony revealing a mare
"Is she with you?" Matter-Horn asked Zapp
"I thought she was with you." Zapp said to Matter-Horn
"Hello." the mare said
"I'm Mistress Mare-velous, nice to meet you."
"I'm Zapp." she introduced herself
"I'm Matter-Horn."
And then the turned to Apocalypse who got back up and said
"I'M GOING TO DESTROY YOU ALL!" he said
"Lets finish this." Matter-Horn started
"Together." Zapp finished
"Toegther." Mistress Mare-velous joined in
Well, the grammar isn't the greatest, but the ideas do come through.
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, very good job on the exchanges, action, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. Now, I have one last suggestion:
In an epilogue scene (after Flash has been rescued and Apple Bloom has the brain-washing that was done to get her to help Glimmer undone [assuming you like the idea I put in my last review enough to use it]), Mare-Velous, Zapp and Matter-Horn can comment on how if just the three of them working together were able to accomplish what they did, imagine what they could do with the organized teamwork of lots of other heroes, with cameo appearances of Aquamare, Cyborg, Radiance, Filly-Second, the Mare-Do-Well and the Maretian Marehunter all in action separately (i.e. Aquamare battling some pirates at sea with her seaborn strength and the help of some telepathically controlled squids and whales, Cyborg using cybernetically enhanced strength, a built-in sonic cannon and an impressive mechanical interface ability to battle some killer robots cooked up by the Flim Flam Brothers over in Manehattan, Fillisecond taking on a battle armor enhanced jewel thief [the battle armor grants not only augmented strength, reflexes and durability, but also has a built-in freeze gun. flamethrower and weather domination device] with her super-speed over in Fillydelphia, Radiance fighting off an alien invasion with the aid of her power gem in deep space, the Mare-Do-Well using martial arts skills and a sonic scream power to battle a street gang in Griffonstone and the Maretian Marehunter using her super-strength, flying ability, intangibility, shape-shifting and telepathy to battle a full-grown Ursa Major in the Everfree Forest)
That is, of course, assuming you like the idea enough to use it. If not, I profusely apologize for wasting your time and still look forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
I like that justice league unlimited reference.
Where is that from? It's really bothering me.