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hunterz263


Registered on: February 23, 2012

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A father tries to put his son to sleep by telling him a bed time story but is surprised to hear that his son wants a horror story. Having no other horror stories in his mind, the father decides to tell his the 'The Legend of Blank Flank'.

When a colt is born smart, everypony thought he would be the first to get his mark in his class. The exact opposite is true actually. Now Blank Flank must try anything to get his mark and regain a normal life.

Cover image made by me. Made in Inkscape.

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716792 Wow thanks, I've never been called genius before. Oh and for the first comment :facehoof:

what the buck man o.o:rainbowhuh::facehoof:

Realy amazing story, at least up until the part in the alley. If it were me i would have ended just after the son got his cutie mark. it seemed like you had more story but kinda got sick of it and started rushing. Regardless, the rest of the story is amazing.:twilightsmile:

730099 Your actually kinda right. I wrote this at 4 A.M. in the morning and kinda wanted to get done. However, I outlined the whole story and didn't have anything extra to tell. Originally I wanted it to end with the son going to bed, but I thought "you know what, I want this to end sad and give the readers a scare". So thats why I put the alley part at the end. Also originally, there was not going to be a love story with Blank Flank, that was added while I was writing. So pretty much that was the only thing added to the story. Thank you so much for your opinion.

cool and creeeeeepy

Hate to say this dude, but it could've been twenty percent cooler :rainbowwild: But unlike Rainbow, I'll elaborate. The kid asked for a horror story but it just wasn't that scary to me you know? I'm not saying every audience member should crap their pants, I'm just saying it wasn't scary. Maybe you could've killed the boy first and then talk about the legend of Blank Flank. Putting in the romance was also a little too nice. Now I just feel bad for him. it could've been like, Blank Flank was dumped then went insane after the Ponyville ponies mistreated him and killed them. One victim lived and killed Silver Heart and him with a chainsaw. Then he continues to take out his Ponyville revenge on the living. That'd be scary :pinkiehappy::rainbowderp::twilightoops::applejackconfused::raritystarry::fluttershyouch:

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Oh, pfft, this old thing? Why, I simply made this up in less than three hours, so I am not too opinionated towards what you stated, Miss. I do, however, appreciate you reading this old, useless filth. I do so hope you enjoyed it. If I might not be a little bit naggy, but do you mind a watch? You seem interested in my works.

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Sure dude. I'm just...picky about watching people and stuff, but you're totally worth the watch

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Thank you.

:pinkiehappy: *hugs*

Don't sorry, considering the fact you have enjoyed two of my works, Miss, I wouldn't worry about my future projects sucking... okay, maybe I would because I suck anyway.

My currently plans are to finish The Other Earth first, so, if you haven't already, go read that. A little note, though: Being as how The Other Earth is my first creative writing endeavor, I highly fighting out the first few chapters because the grammer sucks -- the story gets better later on.

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