A Sun's Secret

EThe Twilight Before the Sunset
MLP: FiM
Drama
Sad
Slice of Life
Princess Luna enlists Twilight Sparkle to help her in getting Sunset Shimmer to stay in Equestria so Princess Celestia and Sunset can reunite. The situation turns out to be much more complicated.
Twilight
Celestia
Luna
Sunset Shimmer
Diamond_Emblem · 6.1k words · 163 2 · 6.4k views

Something's been on Celestia's mind these days. Luna can tell by the way her sister is acting, something isn't right. But is Luna prepared for the truth that her sister has been hiding for years?

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Dustcan

Dustcan #1 · Aug 4th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Well I wasn't expecting a reupload but hey I don't mind reading this one again.

Dustcan

Dustcan #2 · Aug 4th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Yeah I prefer the original draft. Most of the additions detracted from the experience by messing with the flow without sufficiently contributing to the plot.

Ereiam

Ereiam #3 · Aug 4th, 2019 · 1 · ·

I believe that when you revised your story, you accidentally left out those few lines near the beginning:

Suddenly Luna's ears perked up. She heard something incredibly out of the ordinary.
Crying. It was soft crying, as if the pony that was doing it didn't want anypony else to listen.
The crying sounded like it belonged to Celestia.
Luna quietly walked back and looked around. The crying seemed to be coming from her left. She looked at the cracks that were under the doors.

MatTheBook

MatTheBook #4 · Nov 5th, 2023 · · ·

"I returned to the throne the next morning as if nothing were wrong." Celestia swallowed. "But after a few days, I didn't feel quite well. I was vomiting and sometimes I had the sudden desire to eat more than I would usually eat in a day. I knew something was wrong.”

WHAT!? YOU GOT PREGNANT JUST A DAY LATER!?
And you two did the 'thing' on the first day you two met!?

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