Stormy Horizons
It was a windy evening at Canterlot High. The sharp breeze was drawing in the dark grey clouds that hung over the town like shadows and a swirling mist surrounded the town in its grey embrace. The last vestiges of light barely peaking over the top of dark concrete in the distance.
Sunset Shimmer stood on the edge of the roof of Canterlot High. The wind whipping past her and blowing the hair out of her eyes as she stared at the setting sun, watching its slow descent past the horizon. It was rather comforting in some ways.
Down below she could see the concrete ground... It seemed a long way off now she was up here; the people below looked so small and insignificant, barely the size of ants. Sunset allowed a small smirk to cross her face, she wouldn't be up here if it wasn't high enough after all.
Sunset Shimmer looked down again and took a deep breath, this was for the best after all. No one would miss her, especially since they all thought she was Anon-A-Miss. Maybe people would understand it wasn't her when she was dead and yet the blog's posts would continue.
The dark clouds drew in on the school, bringing with it a shower of rain and soon Sunset was left shivering as the water droplets clung to her form and soaked her to the skin. The girl on the roof smiled without mirth, even the elements seemed to agree that she should jump.
Sunset sat down on the edge of the roof, feeling lost, confused and betrayed. Why had her friends thought she had reverted back to her old ways so quickly? Was she that untrustworthy? She had so many questions, but no one to give her an answer.
Sunset Shimmer stared at the ground so far below her, this was the only way everyone would be happy again. Wasn't it? She wasn't wanted here, her friends had made that much quite clear... Though Princess Celestia had also made it perfectly clear she wasn't wanted in Equestria either. It'd be better if she wasn't here at all. Then everyone could go back to being happy. Without her.
The rain poured harder, drenching the roof top. In the distance Sunset could hear the distant rumble of thunder closing in, the tell tale flashes of light indicating lightning as well. Now or never, Sunset knew that if she didn't jump now, nothing was going to change. Life was just a vicious circle and Sunset was always going to be lonely. Then the roof doors burst open.
"Sunset no!" A familiar voice broke through her train of thought. Sunset Shimmer spun around to find herself face to face with the girls who had led her to this position in the first place. They actually had the nerve to look shocked that she was up here.
"Sunset! What are you doing?" Cried Rarity in horror, the girls around her all echoing the sentiment with varying degrees of shock and fear on their faces.
The flame-haired girl fought to keep the sneer off her face. Were they really that unaware of their actions? It was almost laughable in a way, of course they didn't realise that their actions would have consequences, they each had an amazing support group within each other, and until recently, Sunset had too. Then they'd made it plain that Sunset wasn't a trustable person, probably just viewing her as a charity case to work the 'Magic of Friendship' on. It was pathetic how she'd fallen for it so easily.
"What does it look like? You told me I wasn't wanted here. Remember?" Sunset reminded them, stepping further towards the edge. Applejack took a step forward, panic evident on her face as she edged towards the girl.
"We didn't mean it! We swear! We were jus' angry about the Anon-A-Miss incident. But now the Crusader's owned up all can be forgiven and forgotten!" Applejack said desperately, trying to reach the person she'd once called her friend. Said girl wore an expression of surprise on her face, though it quickly turned to a more a twisted look.
Sunset Shimmer scoffed, "So you're saying you forgave your sister in a heartbeat after everything she did, but yet you didn't even believe a word I said when I swore blind I wasn't the culprit? Instead I once again became the villain. Some friends you are," Sunset rolled her eyes in disgust "Pathetic." She finished.
The Rainbooms lowered their eyes in shame, finally coming to terms of what they'd put their former friend through. It was apparently Rainbow Dash's turn to talk Sunset down as the girl stepped forward, tears welling in her eyes.
"Please Sunset, you don't have to do this. Please step away from the edge." Rainbow Dash pleaded, her voice uncharacteristically soft and vulnerable. The flame-haired girl just stared at the person she'd once grown so close with... Rainbow Dash had been the one who had really helped her pick up the pieces when her life crumbled around her yet again, with the two growing close in a way that the others hadn't even realised. And yet, Rainbow Dash had been the first to push Sunset away when she'd thought that the girl had gone back to her evil roots. It had been the final nail in Sunset's coffin and the last straw that had led her to the current situation. That sharp sting of betrayal still cut into her, she'd thought that Rainbow Dash, not just as a friend, but as the element of loyalty, would be the first to stick up for her... But apparently she just wasn't worthy of that loyalty.
Sunset Shimmer wavered a moment and Rainbow Dash's head perked up in hope. However, hope soon turned to despair as Sunset shook her head, a saddened frown on her face and her eyes weary, "No... It's too late... Far too late." Rainbow Dash sprinted forward, sensing what the girl was about to do but it was just as Sunset had said. She was too late
Sunset Shimmer took one last step off the edge. She fell gracefully. Her hair billowing out like a fiery halo behind her, eyes shut tightly and a small smile of relief gracing her features. As she fell, the icy rain slowed to a gentle stop and the clouds rolled away from the horizon, revealing a shimmering sunset that lit up the stormy sky, it's last rays just visible in the horizon.
The group watched in sheer horror as Sunset Shimmer hit the unforgiving concrete floor with a resounding thud, leaving the group sick to the core. Rainbow Dash looked up in time to see the glowing sunset finish its journey and sinking below the horizon, letting the sky grow dark.
Okay... So I must confess that an early draft of this fic has been fanfiction for a good two years now.... However, I decided that I should improve and post it on here! For some reason. Oh well, new story. Kinda. Hope you enjoyed, though, enjoyed isn't probably I'd use.
Peace out! 
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"They're" is not "their".
Even your grammar is edgy.
This was a fairly good story I look forward to seeing if there will be a sequel to this.
This was good have a mustache
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Haha, thanks I'll change that.... As soon as I find where that error is
I hope there to be a sequel of it.
The story was good a few errors to fix but overall it was nice to read.
Though it is sad that she did that to herself
this keeps me thinking that scene in 'life is stange' when the girl student lept of the school roof when the protagonist failed to save her.
OH MY CELESTIA! They killed Kenny...er I mean Sunset!!!
8119571 You BASTARDS!!!!
Damn am i the only one that wants to see the after math of this? XD
That's a unique ending to en Anon-A-Miss story.
Like everyone else, I too would like to see what the after math of all this.
The Human 5 realizing their mistake at the last minute and too late to save Sunset, the CMC receiving the news that they were responsible to pushing Sunset into ending it all, and the school having to live with a reputation of causing the death of an innocent.
Not to mention what everyone outside the school will think of this tragedy.
Oh, the fallout of this will be utterly spectacular. Let us have it, please. :)
it's about time the Humane 5 realize that their actions have consequences!
POOR SUNSET!!! 
and are you gonna turn this 1-shot into a story?
Reading this once more after having reviewed it months ago on fanfiction.net allowed me to think about it more than I usually do.
First, I love the new title, 'The Setting Sun.' Appropriate, considering Sunset Shimmer's life sets for good in this story. And I love your story as much as I already did last October.
Second, you write that "Sunset Shimmer spun around" when her 'friends' burst out of the roof doors, yet you wrote that she "sat down on the edge of the roof" beforehand without mentioning her standing up since then, which she apparently did since you wrote "Sunset reminded them, stepping further towards the edge." While I don't think this detail is essential for reading comprehension, I suggest mentioning her changing her position on the roof at some point before the Rainbooms get involved.
Third, what I've been thinking about after rereading this story. Sunset is upset that her 'friends' forgave the Crusaders after everything they've done... yet they've done the very same about her after Twilight asked them to watch over her, and unlike the Crusaders' one misdeed, she'd been bullying the school for up to three years before that.
I agree with her that she was just a "charity case" to them (or rather a 'our real new friend asked us something' one) and that doesn't make the Rainbooms' disownment any less painful to suffer through, but I thought it was an interesting detail.
Four, the lines I liked and some comments on them:
I liked this line, though I preferred the original version out on fanfiction.net.
I'm wondering if "blog's posts" would be better.
This line is especially sad.
Five, corrections:
It'd be better if she wasn't here at all.
of course they didn't realise that their actions would have consequences
its last rays just visible in the horizon.
You just gave me an idea for a sequel to this to be honest..."A New Day Dawns." The idea is Sunset miraculously survives the fall,granted with full body cast worth injury and a few months in a coma giving her time to heal. When she wakes up though,and everyone is apologizing to her she asks "Who are you...And who's Sunset...?" So yeah,old sunset is gone for good,and this would be considered the 'second chance.' Still pretty dark though since the guilt never will wash away. The girls get a chance to make amends, but never will they make amends with the girl called Sunset Shimmer.
Oh, and Twilight is not amused when she finds out.
Granted this is just an idea I'm throwing out there. Like it though?
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Whoa, I really wasn't expecting people to like this so much
I hadn't thought about doing a sequel, but now I may actually get writing one since the consequences could be so interesting to write. I will actually get on that 
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Whoa dude, that actually sounds like such a good idea! I'd love to read a story like that so much! I love the idea that they a get a second chance but it's not truly with Sunset, oh boy, I can just picture it
I'd love to see Twilight's reaction more than anything
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I'm so happy that you liked the story and that you agree about Sunset seeming like a bit of a charity case. I tried to improve it from the fanfiction.net one as much as possible but maybe I'll readjust that first paragraph to its original.
Once again, thanks so much for your review! I will get working on those corrections right away
Thanks again!
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GOOD! let me know when its ready then.
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Yeah...how will she react to learning her friends essentially killed her special friend? After all,Twilight and Sunset were both students of celestia and had the diary to have heart to hearts with one another...and Sunsets last messages were of fear and desperation, so this would only hurt Twilight more knowing she wasn't there when she was needed the most for her peer.
Another idea I had is what if Twilight DID get the messages...and manages to make it in time to save sunset from taking a suicide plunge? Not one off the school like this story but one alone like the stories where the sirens or fluttershy saves her... I liked the one where the sirens saved her from freezing to death in the snow because it was pretty impressive, so I'm curious.
OH. Big idea,what if EQ Twilight found her or EQ Celestia or EQ Luna?...oh snap, imagine if EQ Discord saved her. So many possibilities have not been milked.
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Oh snap, I can just imagine what would happen if Principal Celestia found her, or Princess Celestia. If it was Princess Celestia that would certainly make for a heartbreaking reunion.
I actually need to get around to finishing reading the story about the Dazzlings finding Sunset in the cold, I really liked that one too!
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Thanks for writing this and for replying to my comment.
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I'll meet you halfway; Twilight got the message, rushed out of the portal and into CHS... and Sunset fell on her after stepping off the roof, killing them both. Oops.
More seriously, yeah, I'd like to see the consequences to this, especially that Kouzukicks is a Sunsetdash shipper if I'm not mistaken. Even if Sunset doesn't actually survive the fall, if the human one went and switched to CHS for whatever reason... Seeing 'their' Sunset again is gonna be painful for the Rainbooms. Assuming Rainbow Dash is even present then, because I can totally picture her killing herself out of guilt or becoming a husk of a girl in reaction to this story's end.
Can you tell I love daydreaming about Rainbow in the aftermath of Dainn's Anon-a-Miss?
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Huh, I wonder what gave me away as a Sundash shipper
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I'd like to say I'm observant enough to have been tipped off by Rainbow Dash having her own tag here and her turning out to have been "the one who had really helped [Sunset] pick up the pieces when her life crumbled around her" as well as "feeling like she had lost a part of herself" after Sunset's death in the original fanfiction.net story, but in fact I just read your other story Scars of Our Past months ago.
I need to reread it and review it one day incidentally. Properly, I mean. I don't count "and then they banged *all* *night* *long*" as a proper comment.
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Haha, but if can actually get myself motivated enough to write more than the couple of paragraphs I have for the next chapter/sequel, I'm gonna try and focus on their relationship more. Now I've just gotta motivate myself 
But yeah, it's probably quite obvious that I love this pairing 
I would totally count that as a proper comment!
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Oh most definitely.
And actually, the EQ Twilight/Celestia/Luna finding Sunset was meant for if someone went down the Sunset in Freezing Snow Alleyway route rather than Alone at a Bridge Suicide or School Roof Suicide route. So...more along the lines of how the sirens find her in that other fic.Just curious why people don't expand who finds her...So many options.
Frankly,EQ Luna seems like a very likely option of finding her...I can totally see her on a coffee marathon leaving the shop and stumbling upon Sunset in the snow.
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man i'm DYING to see the sequel!
when's the sequel?
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someone else made that title "A New Day Dawns". lol
Is there are sequel
Theme song?
https://m.>>scorched apple
OMG YEZ
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That Idea alone is worth me following you.
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And who knows...maybe if a plot is developed for an extended story,then when a big magical moment comes along,aka Sunsets goddess mode,the old her comes out for brief moment and could say some words before she turns off the super powers,with the last words being something like...
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"Take care of her, okay girls? And I forgive you."
But that's only ONLY if the author wanted to make forgiveness an option. The girls would have to go through some STRONG development to earn that ending. Keep in mind sunset would black out afterword, and The girl that replaced sunset would be the one that wakes up,with no memory of when sunset was in control at the end of the power up. She would simplifying she blacked out after winning. This reinforces the message in the other girls' minds.
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Two things. You spelled scorch wrong and if you want to reply to a comment click the arrow on the top right corner of the comment
Damn...... Just wow, that was really good.... I'm curious to see an epilogue of what happens to the various groups after the incident, how everyone feels etc. Can't wait for the sequel :)
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depends, how do you think they'll do in juvenile hall until there old enough to be moved to a state prison? they just committed first degree manslaughter.
This was... okay? It felt short and rushed, and I had a hard time empathizing as a result.
I wanna see the aftermath.