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Join the Mane 6 on an adventure that starts in Ponyville, and leads beyond the bounds of Equestria! What kinds of chaos occurs when the fate of all is on the line and one of them can suddenly do things nopony has ever done before?
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Interesting start....
I love this story! Please write some more! I can't wait to see what happens, and if Discord will be discovered.
Thank you very much for the comments. More coming soon!
Love this! But, why was Twilight saying gibberish near the end? And is it me, or do most of the things Fluttershy helps out with seem to be staged? I think a certain chaos spirit is causing trouble for the sake of helping his friend, not caring about the consequences.
Twilight had run out of magic. After her spell collapsed, she couldn't speak clearly until she cleared her head.
Sorry it was unclear.
Aha! I knew it! Discord is behind this! Except for the tentacles, that was probably somepony else's doing. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Discord seems to be behind those crisis. It makes sense, however: after all, how would Fluttershy help resolving a crisis if there isn't a crisis to resolve?
While it isn't story breaking there's one thing that bothered me: Twilight seems to be too fine to have just exhausted magically (previous chapter, which happpened immediately before)
Fair point. I surmised that it was easier levitating things from the outside then from the inside. I made an edit to try and make that clearer in the story.
I am trying an experiment. I updated the title and description of the story. I'll be interested to see how that impacts how much traction the story gets.
Goodness! Why are the elements heading to Fluttershy? this is quite a predicament.
Is Discord losing his magic? We need more Discord, if you don't mind. I can just imagine Twilight grilling him out for messing with her friends.
Wow, you push these stories faster than me. My guess, written ahead of time/heavily inspired.
I had almost completed drafts of the whole story done before I posted the first chapter. I am posting them now as I finish the final editing passes.
That was great!
[aplauso]
If this is after the Tirek incident, then the Elements were back to the Tree of Harmony and the Mane 6 have that Rainbow Power which don't need some specific artifact to work.
.... yeah, that breaks a lot of your story this chapter.
I think having the Elements of Harmony as physical objects creates a lot of story possibilities, so I gave them back to the girls. This quote at the beginning of Chapter 2 sets that fact up for this story:
This is a bit of background from an as yet unfinished prequel story. That makes this story a bit AU. Do you think I should add that tag?
Every time I see an adventure fic with the 'mane six' and 'spike' tags attached, I get my hopes up, thinking it might be a journey all seven of them contribute to equally. After a ctrl+F search on the first and the last three chapters of this one, it looks like he's barely in it. It's just another tale about a six-piece toy set.
Awesome story! Wish there had been more Discord in it but you still get 5/5 pinkie pies.
for some reason I wanted to cry when I read that line. Also HOOVES not hands!!!! I've seen that error too many times already!!
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7291563 Thank you for the comments. Under normal circumstances, Fluttershy sticks fairly rigidly to her internal image of her role and responsibilities in the world, especially vis-à-vis her friends. She is not just happy sticking to her own role, Fluttershy is comforted by the roles that her friends occupy as well. In this story, those roles and responsibilities get all mixed up, which makes Fluttershy profoundly uncomfortable. Part of her heroism is rising to take up new roles as the situation requires it, even if those roles scare her.
Good reminder about hooves not hands. I will add that to my standard review sweep.
Yo this is awesome.