Forgive Us...
Experiment/First Fic
So I guess Welcome???
Enjoy...
P.S. I think changelings are adorable 
They say you ponies live in a very superficial society; where you believe that you are the protectors of the land, the caretakers of the animals, so why not help us? After all, we're creatures too. Is it because we're not flesh and bone like you? Maybe it's because we attacked your kind that one time in Canterlot, but why don't you accept our forgiveness? "Mother" tells us she asks the princesses frequently; demanding our pleads for mercy but like always, she comes towards us turning her head from left to right every time. It's like you didn't even care weather we went out of extinction or not. I remember hearing a story about one of you ponies but I don't remember it well as it was told to me a while ago by one of my changeling sisters. I think it was something about some pony turning into a beast out of jealously and when they were defeated, you accepted there forgiveness. So why not accept our pleads? We did it over survival so you've got to understand, we did it to save our kind. "Mother" says it's our appearances which frighten you and after many years of living in the hive, I've began to think that myself.
I've got to admit, were not a beautiful sight to see but is anything really beautiful? Can you look at all of your pony folk and say there all beautiful in your eyes. "Mother" says were beautiful creatures and whatever another pony says, they're just jealous because we've got better looks than them. I think that's just to cheer us up you know. After all, we live in our hive awaiting our deaths most of the time and when some of us do go out, we have to stay in the shadows so we don't give attention to our selves. We have nowhere else to go unless we shapeshift. After the incident that happened, we can't do anything really except for awaiting our time to depart from this land. Why not shapeshift? Why you see, like any creature, we need energy to survive and there's not really much love coming in from the changeling spy's and we only use the love that we have left on vital occasions.
Most nights I'm so cold in this cave. There's literally thousands of us huddled together but even with that much changelings in one space I'm still freezing my hooves off. Who would have guessed it, changelings need everything a pony does; food, water, companionship. Were not monsters, we just want to survive like you.
We're quite similar you and I. We love freedom, always love a adventure once in a while and when it comes to survival, we will do what ever it will take for our species to be safe. I know that last statement was harsh in a way, but that's natural selection for you; the creatures with the better characteristic live on while the others just go out of existence. Most of us believe that about us you know, we're going to be the next species to go due to it being a 'law of nature thing'. But "Mother" always tries to change the subject when she hears it. "Mother" is great; she's caring, calm, a good leader, everything you would love in a parent. You should come over sometime, we could chill, tell stories, even play a game or two. But we get how judgemental you ponies are about us so we understand. We're not mad at you, we're just confused, lonely and confused.
When I sit down and look at all of those glorious stars in the sky, I always dream about being a normal civilised pony. One which has a job, a family, a bunch of friends to goof around with and probably even a PHD in something. But atlas, I return from my gaze and look into a dark gloomy cave where "Mother" is laying with my brothers and sisters. I still believe it can happen; actually for us changelings to be free and out in the wild would probably be considered as some sort of 'miracle' when we think about it; I just believe it's freedom. "Mother" calls me the smart one, the brains of the family but I'm literally like the rest of them, I'm nothing special. She says I see the world better, that I'm a strong changeling who is loyal to the hive.
But Why? I constantly ask her that question. Why can't they accept our forgiveness? She just says because it is. Has "Mother" even asked? After all, I never saw her leave this cave once that magic blasted all of us away. Maybe she never asked them. Maybe she hates them that much that she doesn't want our two species emerging together. But I must trust "Mother", she's the only thing I've got in this world and if I loose her, I loose everything. I hardly talk to my brothers and sisters. They think I'm crazy when I talk about living a life like the ponies do. But maybe they're right, you'll never accept us no matter how hard I imagine. But I still imagine. Imagine what it will be like when you actually accept us into your world.
I remember the day "Mother" was planning the attack on Canterlot. The hope in her eyes could tell each and every changeling in the hive that this was the right decision for us. We were all so happy, bouncing around with glee and excitement; we just couldn't wait till the day we could get out of this place and enjoy the scenery. The plan was simple, Foalnapp the princess of love for a while so that she can get enough love from her husband to survive for a few years. However, ever since that lavender unicorn stepped in with her suspicions, "Mother" was getting more violent with her plan. It went that bad that she changed the whole scheme all together; where she wanted to rule all of Equestria herself. We were confused at first, why had she changed the plan? we had no idea, So we just went along; Attack the capitols civilization and then we would have a unlimited supply of love to feed off. However the plan failed once that 'Pink' Alicorn reunited with her husband; blasting us away with that 'love blast' of theirs. After we returned back, "Mother" was never the same.
She was sadder, more depressed, and we couldn't do anything about it. We attempted, trust me. We tried doing shows, complimenting her every day, listening to everything she says, but she never cheers up. "Mother" says it's her fault that we're dying slowly but I reassure her each time that it's not; she just got a little carried away, that's all. For the first few weeks, she was constantly crying herself to sleep, it was both heart-breaking and unbearable but we had to live with it, to be strong for her. I just couldn't take it anymore, seeing her sad was making the whole hive sad so I had to take action. I told her to get a grip, act like a proper queen. I just wanted our old "Mother" back you know, the one who always smiled when passing us, the one who still had that hope in her eyes. But now we were stuck with this new "Mother", one which was depressed and sad everyday and night. She shouted at me first, told me she was like a proper queen and I was just one of her subjects. I just couldn't take it, so I ran away crying my eyes out at what I had just said and heard. But something clicked in her when I said those words, she began to start being her normal self in front of us, smiling again with that beautiful face of hers, she even told me that she was sorry and that I was not just one of her subjects, I was her son, her friend. I was so happy, we all were. Except one.
Even though she was acting like her old self on the outside, she wasn't on the inside. I could still see "Mother" sad at night. I could still see her resume her depressed self when no other changeling was looking at her. She's suffering on the inside because she was trying to save the hive. So I ask you this question. Only once...
Will you offer us your forgiveness?
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Hmm ... this was pretty good even though there were some errors like when
. I think you meant alas, but I'm not sure. Anyways good story for a first fic, see you later.
Not bad for your first fic, though there are a few grammar errors and misuse of homophones.
Also, it's View.
Thank you and I guess I forgot the comma. Fix that now
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6823028 Thank you for the help. I've attempted to remove the errors which I believe were wrong. I'm that used to my own writing that it's hard for me to proof read but I get what you mean, I did see a few grammar errors. And thanks for the point out on the title, I didn't notice that.
good story and a lot of feels
6823302 Thank you. I guess this fic is going better than I thought :)
6823328 your welcome
The feels...
I hope they are eventually forgiven.
Cya
Raziel-chan
6824591 Thank you. I really appreciate it.
I missed this side of Fimfiction.
6825821 Glad you liked it
I. Love. This.
D'aaw how nice. Can anyone tell me why the user is banned?
6860022 Thank you. Really Appreciated
6863075 I guess I can take 'Daw how nice' as a compliment but anyway I made another account and I guess they thought I was going to do something which is unacceptable but two weeks of banning was the price to pay unfortunately
6938246 Yea mate don't do that. Double accounts aren't nice.
6938240 No prob! ^w^;
What a great little one shot! Changelings totally deserve more love. I think they are cute. :P
6960237 Awww thank you
This thing. YES! Just awesome in general.
6961877 Why thank you! This fic has gone considerably better than I thought
6962301 Philosophic stuff isn't my thing that this one was thoughtful enought to Get me hooked up.
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Thanks for the compliment
6962452 ^^
This was a nice story. There were feels everywhere.
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However:
That question makes it sound like it was the ponies who invaded the changelings, when it should be the other way around. Perhaps a better way to phrase the question would be: "Will you offer us your forgiveness?"
6971590 Thanks for pointing that out, I literally have no idea why I put 'forgiveness'.
6971727 I wasn't sure whether or not that was deliberate, but I actually really loved the effect it had. "Why won't you forgive us" is a changeling who might understand that the ponies were hurt by the invasion, but who sees the potential survival of their own family as inherently excusing that. "Why won't you accept our forgiveness" is one who realizes that the ponies were right in fighting back and, now that an invasion has proven to obviously not be the best course, wants to mend the relationship, but who doesn't get the concept of holding a grudge. Maybe more clearly, the first puts the burden of being in the wrong (currently, not at the wedding) on the changelings, while the second turns that back on the ponies themselves. It's definitely not in line with our mentality/morality – or what we've seen of the ponies' – but it makes for an amazing study in how those affect conflict resolution and several other things it's too late at night to find words for. If you're familiar with TvTropes, it's exploring Blue and Orange Morality in a way that we're actually able to more or less identify with (if you aren't familiar with the site, be very careful with what pages you open, especially if you use multiple tabs, or you can easily lose several hours on it).
Also, I really love how you characterize Chrysalis throughout the story. She is just as beloved as Celestia is, if not more so, and everything we hear of her shows that she deserves that affection (maybe even more than Celestia does, and I do like the alicorn). She goes into the invasion with good expectations and a reasonable strategy, and just seems to not be as good at improvising around disruptions. And even when everything falls apart and she realizes she's probably going to lose a large portion of the hive, at the very least, she (eventually) decides to mask her own sorrow to try to make her children's last days/weeks/months as happy as possible.
So, yes, my little changeling, I forgive you, for whatever that may be worth.
And thanks for proving that we're still putting out changeling fics. Makes me feel a lot better about the one I'm planning for after the story I'm currently slowly working on.
THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE CUTE CHANGELING ART
*grabs gun* Some equestrians gonna die tonight!.........FOR THE QUEEN!!
This is a very well put together story. Wish there was a sequel.
Spelling is an issue. I will edit this comment with a link to a document containing all the corrections I could find.
But other than that, this is a very emotional story. So many authors focus on the rage the ponies/changelings have for each other, but never on how the changelings are relatively innocent.
Good job!
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(Ooooh? Is that an RP in making? :-) )
*Grabs rifle*
Come get some, boyo!
We Equestrians are always glad to give invaders a good beatin'!
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"We did it over survival so you've got to understand, we did it to save our kind."
Couldn't you just have asked for help, instead of trying to invade Equestria?
You all are not that bad at diplomacy, now, are you?
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Please allow me to voice my opinion here.
"Were not monsters, we just want to survive like you.
We're quite similar you and I. We love freedom, always love a adventure once in a while and when it comes to survival, we will do what ever it will take for our species to be safe. I know that last statement was harsh in a way, but that's natural selection for you; the creatures with the better characteristic live on while the others just go out of existence."
They say they like freedom, but don't seem to have given the slightest damn about the freedom of others before things went sour for them.
So the Changelings could attack and enslave whoever they want, it would be for their survival, and it would be natural selection.
But the Equestrians couldn't defend themselves, because that would be prejudice and starving the Changelings?
Chrysalis "only" planned to "peacefully" abduct Mi Amore Cadenza and take her place,
making Cadence miserable in the process. Not to mention mind-controlling Shining Armor, the commanding officer the Solar Guard, basically an Equestrian VIP.
And she got more violent afterwards, getting to assault Her Solar Highness, Princess Celestia, but "only" because Twilight Sparkle stepped in to defend her homeland, her brother, and her soon-to-be sister-in-law (who is also the niece of the Two Alicorn Sisters, and the ruler of a country allied to Equestria, mind you)?
The Changeling writing this letter sounds like (s)he is trying to blame Twilight Sparkle for doing her duty, as an Equestrian citizen and patriot, naturally wanting to protect those she cares about, and also blames the Equestrians for doing the same thing as TS.
He or she seems to be genuinely regretting the current hostility between Changelings and Equestrians.
But if the invasion had succeeded, I don't think (s)he - or any Changeling - would have shown Equestrians any measure of the mercy, compassion, and respect that is now pressingly demanded for the Changeling kind.
That being said, the Changelings have been taught the hard way not to abduct neither invade anyone, but rather respect them as they would like being respected.
The Changelings have taken enough of their punishment, now.
They know they must not try anything against Equestria and its allies ever again.
Moreover, even being legitimately still bitter, wary, distrustful of the Changelings, and overall on the defensive towards them, the Equestrians must not turn a blind eye on the woes affecting their previously-hostile Changeling neighbours.
Some might say you don't let a downed-enemy be at peace,
for that would be risking having him (her) recovering and flying back at your throat or back-stabbing you.
And there is truth in that.
But Equestrians must not sink to endager an entire species.
Keep watch on them, but let them live. Help them being safe and staying alive.
I say forgiveness will hard to grant, but it must be granted.
7058450 Yeah!
it was so good that my eyes watered a little at the end