This story is a sequel to What needs to be done
Now eighteen and finally old enough to inherit the family farm Big Mac's life was just getting started, but a message from his late father turns Mac's life in a new direction. Monsters are invading from Equestria and it's up to Mac and his new partners, the Dazzlings to hunt them down, but living a double life takes it's toll and Mac's family and friends might have to pay the price. Can Mac keep them save? More importantly will he survive? Or will he go the path of his father and die for those he loves?
Artwork by me
Chapters (9)
Interesting read! Why not create chapters instead of seperate stories? Anyway these are good reads, please continue!
OH! OH NO NO!! WAIT! Don't end it now, come baaaaack!!!!
6802915 Thanks for commenting!
As for the separate parts, it's something I wanted to try, I saw some other folks do it and thought why not. Also I thought if I had more separate stories out there more of a chance for people to stumble across them. This is the only story I'm doing this for. Part three will have more then one chapter if it needs it.
Hope that answers your question.
6803254 There is a part three coming don't worry.
this was rely good
I wanna know whats gonna happen to Big mac
6871882 The next chapter is really close to being done, should be sometime this week.
rely great chapter
6877410 Thank you
I'm actually really enjoying this story. It has so much potential. Looking forward to the next chapter!
6881863 Glad you like it, and think for the watch!
That was something. Keep it up
This was rely hype
6937702 hype?
MY DEAR BEST PONY APPLEJACK...!!
Please update... it's Amazing. .
( I can't smile broadly in a cliffhanger situation like this..)
7146618 About 3/4th done with the next chapter
I love that you included Gamer Luna
7156710 It was kind of a low hanging fruit, but I like the idea and find it funny and full of potential.
Enjoying the story so far?
Well looks like the cavalry is here and PISSED OFF.
I thought she would kill herself after knowing the truth.
YAY!
6804020 is there going to be sequel to this story?
7274298 I'm planning story where Sunset finally reveals where she lives to the girls and maybe a prequel with Mac and Aj's father, but a direct sequel? I can't say I have any plans right now, but that could change after a day of thinking, but I don't really know where I would want to go with the story at this moment.
I guess what your idea for what you would like to see for a sequel? It might give me ideas.
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Story was pretty good, had a fresh idea to it. My main complaint that I have is the wording. A proof reading is needed as multiple times I saw either misspelled words or phrases using the wings words altogether. An example would be when Flutterbat bit the soldiers fingers off. She claims she was a vegetarian but the word written is vegetation.
7305156 Sorry about that I'm still making my way through the story again and I'll admit I'm not familiar with how some words are spelled, even if I know the meaning and know generally how there supposed to be spelled. Sometimes I just hit the wrong word on auto correct.
Thanks for pointing it out though, I'll be sure to get that fixed ASAP.
I am surprised that such portals would form on ground level. Very improbable.
Such spell woud require lot of energy to mantain. All spells have time limit dependent on the user and energy invested. It could have gathered energy from their stones, but after they were destroyed there wasn't anything that would suply the spell whith energy.
7327635 I never thought about logistics of the magic. Though really magic can be explained in anyway you can think of. My best answers would probably be,
1. the portals are in the Everfree and appear at random and anywhere. I'm not sure why you think ground level is in probable, though I guess portals have a habit appearing in the sky. I kind of imagined them appearing in the ground like a sink hole and monsters accidentally walk on top of them.
2. I agree a spell would fade over time, especially if the caster died, but if starswirl used the mirror to send the dazzlings to earth he could have programmed the mirror not the let them back and the mirror has it's own power, so it could maintain the spell.
That's just the mindset I had when I was writing, I like said before I didn't put much thought into it for the story. Appreciate the comment, its food for thought for future stories.
7506935 In the course of ten weeks or waited and then read in one go?
I would Love to see a direct sequel of the story telling how Mac is living his Live while hunting demons, planing a wedding and handeling the orchard. But i will habe to wait.
Keep up the good work!
7628074 Well it is being written as I type. The problem is I'm also trying to get another sequel for my Night Patrol story (The parent story of this story) going too, all during fall harvest. The good news is I have plenty of time to think about plots and how to work the story. The bad news is my writing time is sketchy. The other good news is I did already get started, so I'm hoping the first chapter will be done this month sometime.
7628127 No pressure.
Pressure Can Turn a good story into a bad one.
What i mean is Take your time
7629195 No worries, it all apart of the schedule.
I very much like this story you have going here. I am honestly wondering if Mac and company are going to run in to a pair of brothers named Winchester at some point in time lol.The girl on fire reminds me of several characters from video games, particularly Alma from the FEAR series and Yevgeny Borisovitch Volgin from MGSV: Phantom Pain. I know she fell to dust here but I wonder if she will be returning to haunt everyone later on. I will be sure to keep reading.
Maddie, you're in deep shit now!
What? Okay, I'm cool with redemption and forgiveness and all but Sixes is right; those crimes are heinous!
To paraphrase from "Obsidian Butterfly" by Laurel K. Hamilton: "I'd worked with him for a long time and I thought I'd seen him at his scariest. I was wrong. As an assassin, yes, 'scary' worked as well as anything. As a family man whose kid had just been stolen? Terrifying didn't even come close, but it was all I could come up with at the time."
The Princess of the night and four veteran warriors with likely more than several millennia of experience between them... even when they were holding back, it was never going to go well for the opposition.
Amazing story!
Is the horrifying death of kids going to be a theme? because if it is i'm out
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I don't know if you call it a theme, but there is one more death of someone a similar age to Kerosene, yes.