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barking cat


Also known as nowhere man's cubist cousin.

Comments ( 40 )

It's good but get an editor.

Needs some work editing wise. So if you can get one it'll help. A few grammar and spelling issues but so far I like it.

Nice siiiiiiirrrrrr. More please. I quite enjoyed this.

Very good. I like this so far. You kept switching the gender of the servant between male and female. I'll point out other mistakes later. Need sleep.

6825908 Thank you


6825205 I'll make more as soon as I can

Nice story so far.:rainbowkiss: I've also made a list of things I found.:twilightsheepish:

"Princess Luna, on (the) bed once again,"
"I know I can (trust) with your help in this situation."
"P.(S.) Send Spike and the girls my greetings."
" it was (something) she thought she would never see again in her nightmares."
"Look, I have to write a letter and once I finish you will send it to Celestia and then you can go to the boutique and help (Rarity). "
"She blinked repeatedly, trying to focus her eyes on the new (environment) where she found herself in."
"not that she could see it because she was seeing the creature from (behind) and with a respectful distance"
"From her (position), Luna had to struggle to keep her jaw from dropping as she saw the behemoth of a snake whom was curled tightly "
"around a central (pillar) in the middle of the ridiculously (spacious) chamber. "
(pilar = pillar) a few more times in the fight scene.
"patiently waiting for an (opportunity)... "
"make use of the (lenght) and simplicity... "
" Luna closed her eyes and began focusing on a spell (that) could help the intruder without (making) known her presence, but there wasn't (enough) time for her to try a cloaked enchantment."
"The serpent was writhing on the dank floor, a new bloody hole was etched on its left eye( and its )."

Good luck and I hope to see more.:moustache:

6850359 Fixed, thank you very much.

Please tell me more about Bloodborne.

6872761 Diseases, gothic architecture, beasts, H.P.Lovecraft, blood
All that good stuff

6873170 Don't forget the whole psychological stuff of the dream and surrealism

6873225 Isn't that a bit spoilerish?

6873502 Not completely, it's just a hint. Honestly the endings of the game were confusing the first time I saw them

Sometimes, a story is so good that you can't even notice the mistakes. This is one of them. Can I know why you've put this story on hiatus?

6989269 The reason of the hiatus is because the monitor of my laptop broke a few days ago. I've been saving up to get it repaired. Right now all I can do is to take my time to plan what I want to do with the next chapters.

6990202
This is a wonderfully made crossover and I can't wait to see more of it though by any chance dose your main charachter have the threaded cane?

7080090 Erm.... I haven't considered that :unsuresweetie:. I personally didn't like the way the threaded cane works, even though it is a very interesting weapon. So it might be mentioned at some point in the future.

7082309
ok. I have used the threaded cane and I believe I know what to use it for and actually liked it better then the other weapons so far (Havn't beaten the second boss yet so idk what to expect weapon wise pls don't spoil me)

With nothing else to say, Princess Luna fell back to bed and began her search of the unknown intruder
This...this is how I want to work it's like I will get started on the paperwork then falls back to sleep I will just say
Best.....job......ever

Teal eyes huh? Moony shall pick up the book and learn the secrets of how to "pick up" fair princess maidens.

If Nightmare Moon ever decides to face against the Hunter, she is gonna have bad time. And by bad, I mean either losing her head or getting her guts ripped out.

Lots of typos and errors, particularly saying form instead of from. But my mind tends to just ignore them and rearrange the words so no big deal. Good to see another chapter of this.

The moon has heeded their pleads.

Oh dear...

8097238 that was my response. Looks like Hunter is going to get another whack at the moons presence.

I saw multiple grammar errors and i'm too lazy to go through them all on my phone...:facehoof:

Here's one at least:applejackunsure:

A couple of days ago Princess Luna discovered a being with a simmilar capacity to enter someone else's nightmares and fix them, and she told me that this being is from another world, most possibly an entirely different dimension.

One extra 'm' there. Needs removing:unsuresweetie:

Wow. I really like that connection of nightmare moon to the moon presence. Best off all it makes sense.

Wait, pause, twenty seven moons and two weeks? Twenty seven months and two weeks? I'm confused as all hell I'm sorry x.x

Why does everyone write their hunters using the Saw cleaver? Seriously! Use the flipping Axe!

How did I miss this?, this shouldn't even be here in the first place

How rude. She intrudes into a plane she can only access thanks to her magic and personal talent and decides she has the right to decide what does and does not belong there.

8671970
Because the Saw Cleaver is both iconic and ridiculously awesome.

tell him to come here unarmed

After seeing him kill a giant snake monster with his bare-hand.

I’m surprised Luna wasn’t horrified by the Ludwig fight and gory corpse pile scenery.

Oh yes, how dare he slay imaginary beings inside nightmares and night terrors. Those poor non-existent figments of dreams that would cease to exist upon waking anyway.

Well, attacking him merely because he is capable of harming someone would make them worse. After all, they would be the ones who chose to use that capability.

Nightmare Moon seems awfully smug for someone so low on the totem poll that to so much as look at any being higher would undo her very existence at best. At worst, it wouldn’t...Bloodborne-style.

A lot of potential, but too many grammar errors.

8671970
Ah, I see. A fellow man of culture.

Don't hunt a hunter. It usually doesn't end well.

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