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Noel, along with the Hunter Organization, has been working with Equestria for quite some time now. With deals for protection and trade being implemented, the two sides have become stronger in the end for it with the new technology and magical techniques that have been borne of the alliance. To the outside observer, it would seem foolish to challenge the growing might of these two factions.
Tell that to the demons and other, greater, evils that have turned their sights to Equestria.

Part of the Wrath of the Harbinger-verse but non-canon. A ship-fic between Applejack's hat and Trixie's hat. I suppose stranger things have happened. Rated T for some language. Thanks to TP Night for the art, and Banana Prince for the idea from the "Write my fic for me" group.

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Well, gave it a read now, since I AM the cover artist after all.. ^^

And as far as the story goes, I liked it ^^
It DID make me curious about the "Wrath of the Harbinger" story too, since you made this an unofficial spin-off to that.
So, I'll be reading that too, when I have time. Currently reading another fic, so I'll add Harbinger to my read-later-list :twilightsmile:

I dunno. While I feel that it was written well, the Harbinger universe being involved made things a little awkward. It kinda feels like a big advertisement to another fic and feels like some other story "trying" a little to hard to be a ship fic. I also feel like there was too much focus on the "how" and "why" of the plot. Though it is important if you're going to take a romance of two hats seriously, but it feels like there isn't enough focus on the development of the relationship. I know you have you're own mission to fit a human tag in every story, but I'd prefer if you used more elements of the MLP universe to make this work or else it comes across as an advertisement for yourself. And the ending feels real excessive - like you're trying too hard to give AJH and TH have a happy ending. AJ and Trixie could've got new hats or they WANT to go back to Equestria no matter what.
Although the idea that the hats would become sentient in some void is a creative idea, I'll admit and it works if you want this to be taken seriously (though there's probably better ways to get them there). The hats talking in the ether was also an interesting dialogue. And I feel the heart you put into it. It's not bad, that's not what I'm saying at all but the Hunters stuff is unnecessary and taking it out would be the start to making this REALLY good.

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Thanks for the feedback. Since this story was made for you, I will rewrite this if you want me to. This story could have as many dislikes and/or likes as possible but if you're not happy then I failed in the true purpose of writing this story.

First off, this had me laughing pretty hard several times. Bonus points for that.
Secondly, I find this concept absolutely fascinating. I never considered the possibility of inanimate objects being given a type of sentience. The very idea that, in the span of two minutes apart, those hats are now technically sentient, but no one will ever know it. The idea is... kinda unnerving. Consider the implications for reality. What if this sort of thing genuinely happened and everyday objects you hold dear are not capable of pondering the workings of the universe? It's a little creepy. In a good way.

-Inkheart

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First off, I'm glad you liked it so much. Definitely the weirdest thing I've ever written that also isn't dark. Much. Because, yeah, I was little on the fence about the dark tag because of the implications. Applejack and Trixie are never going to know that their hats are actually new hats, and that the hats left in the ether will stay there forever. They have each other, but it'd be a lonely existence with just two of you. Though, thinking about it, it's more than likely I could write weirder things in the future but the shipping of two hats and giving them sapience takes the cake for now.
Secondly, my last sentence brings me to my second point. It's sapience, not sentience. Out of curiosity one day I searched up the definitions. Just about every living thing is sentient. Your dog is sentient. Sapience is the ability to think and reason, like humans. I made the mistake for a while and after looking at this story in the google doc that I kept around, I found that I accidentally said sentience instead of sapience and fixed it. I'm not trying to chew you out man, if I come across as that. Hell, as I said before, I made the mistake of saying sentient in this fic and only caught and subsequently fixed it nearly 23 weeks after posting this story and the only reason I did was because I saw you use the word sentience and I thought "Hmm, I'm thinking that he probably used that word because I accidentally used the word once or twice in the fic. I should probably look at that right now. Yep, I did. Fixing it."
Thankfully, it was just one word, and I didn't have to add or remove any words, so the word count is still the same. I don't know about you but I notice the word count with 'words total' and the total words of a chapter and if you change the words in a chapter it doesn't change the words total. I NOTICE IT DAMMIT! I NOTICE IT SO HARD I CAN'T UN-NOTICE IT!

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*will never be able to unsee that word-count thing now* :rainbowderp: Dammit...

Ah, it was partially that, but also a bit of a screw-up on my own part. I never knew I was using the wrong word. I am writing a story about an A.I. on the side, and I've been saying 'Sentience' this whole time, when Sapience would make more sense...

-Inkheart

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Sorry about that.

Glad I nipped that in the bud and helped you out, then. I think/hope.

Also, looking at BP's comment on this story, I notice he also used the word sentience and I just never noticed it. Don't know why.

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And yes, it did help. It's a pretty big distinction, when you think about it.

-Inkheart

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It is, yes. And an important one.

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