One human... One person... One man... One soldier will be forced to explore the unexplored. He shall discover, he shall learn and most importantly, he shall understand. But as soon as the father of understanding stops guiding him, he will have to decide what he believes it's right and for the greater good. However mother nature has never given us the chance to love something else besides our self and what's ours... This story is all about that aftermath. An aftermath that our little soldier with a great heart will never notice it's influence, but that it will always be there.This story stands to show the real lack of tolerance and the ability to love any sort of life beside ours. Alien life may be fascinating, it may be beautiful, but it is never going to be loved by human flesh.
Shall love guides your little one and remember we will always love you...
What's with the hyphens at the end of each line of dialogue? There is exactly zero reason for those to be there. And this is WAY too close to script format to be a written story. Describe the environment, describe the gear, describe the actions taken, describe the tone of voice. I have no picture in my head for these guys. All I can imagine is stick figures running around on a white background. "*gunshot" is not a description for a gunshot. Is it a high-pitched crack of a low caliber weapon? Is it a heavy-bass boom of a high caliber weapon? Is it a soft snap-crack of a high-velocity suppressed weapon? "*gunshot" tells me nothing.
TL;DR Show, not tell.
Oh god, the amount of spelling, grammar, and punctuation issues are actually physically painful to read, I'm stopping here.
now I'm interested even if the story is canceled this is still a good read
Bravo god sir that story was great. The ending was a good summary of the end