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I am an aspiring writer, romance enthusiast, and a horrible over emotional mess. If you're here I hope you like homosexual stallions. If you enjoy my work and want to support me I have a Ko-Fi!

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Smarty Pants comes home after school after being chased home by a group of bullies throwing stones at her, and heads straight to her bedroom to sulk alone. She attempts to take her mind off of things by doodling random pictures, one of a doll she names Twilight.

In an attempt to leave her reality for a short while, she decides to make one of her own.

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It's been a very long time since I read something this cute. I had a smile on my face the entire time reading it, and it's still there as I type this. It was very well presented, with next to no real errors. Sure, there was grammar error and an odd phrase I found here and there, but besides those it was incredibly good. I'm honestly really happy I took the time to read this.

It was strange, but sweet :scootangel:

783393 Odd sentences... likely because my U key fell off halfway through... and I am now attempting to learn to type with this strange dot...

So much D'AWWWW!

I would not be surprised if this got featured.

783418 I would be pissed if another story got featured while I was asleep. :twilightblush: And thank you, that means a lot.

hrmmm....i think ive seen this somwhere before : /

I love that picture, and all the others Omny did on the subject. It's a wonderful inverse Macinpants. Sweet and beautiful. Love it. :eeyup:

D'aww. Could use a little brushing up, yes, but it works well and it's cute throughout. Although... isn't Smarty Pants a donkey? Meh, maybe she's half-donkey.

Wow that was amazing!
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Before anyone says this needs a sequel, I will say here and now, this feels a lot nicer as a one-shot. It's nice a cutesy.


A favorite and a like from me good sir/ma'am. I wouldn't be surprised if this made it to the featured box.

That was one of the sweetest things I've read in a long time, and definitely deserving of the featured box. :twilightsmile:

You know, when I first saw the photograph you used as the cover image, I always assumed she was a mule. Huh, still very d'aaawwww inducing! :raritywink:

Aww that's adorable. Nice little feel good story. I've noticed though that your stories seem to have a similar pattern where the main character is usually a depressed victim who finds happiness in the end. It's not a bad thing, since you write it so well, just an observation.

cute things. cute story. deffantely wouth a shot in eqd. good job

I can see this being continued - Smarty being inspired by her little world to make some friends of her own, talking to her dolls and imagining they're giving her advice. I don't feel it'd be as good as a one-shot: right now, Smarty is shutting out the "real" world, which wouldn't make for a terribly happy ending.

Now what would be ADORABLE is her and a friend playing out one of the episodes with the dolls, occasionally debating which pony should do what.

Wherever you end up taking this (if anywhere), this is nice work.

I like how Big Mac seems to be more important than all the other dolls. :eeyup:

(If you don't get it watch S2 E3)

Inclined to agree this might be best remaining a one-shot. However...it would make a very interesting tomato in the mirror story for it turn out that Smarty Pants actually does create Twilight's universe.

783642 She always looked like a pony to me in any picture of her being brought to life outside of this one, although this one was the best so I just used it.

Cute and it must be featured. You made me

:pinkiehappy: SMILE SMILE SMILE!! YES YOU DID!!

Please leave.

:pinkiesmile: Okay.

This was adorable:pinkiesmile: and also tearjerker potential :applecry:

Did you draw the picture, or did you just find it online? Anyways the story is adorable! :pinkiesmile:

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Maybe her foalsitter could be a red-haired alicorn:pinkiecrazy:

Aww, that's totallly cute and creative! It's a funny way to think about MLP as a whole, and I like what you did with it~! Lovely overall!

you should make this into a series it would be awesome to see how smarty pants learns about friendship through twilight and her friends

And thats how Equestria was made! =D

Awwwww that was one of the sweetest stories I've read in a long time! Also love it because it describes how I imagine my cutie mark would look! (I make soft toys too!) :pinkiehappy:

I see much room for expansion. Don't you?
Already, I can see the foundations, the turmoil, anguish, hope and triumph.
Could you perhaps continue this? I have several ideas on how it could go.

I cried when she talked about Big Mac..

Damn that was cute :fluttershysad:

This is the sweetest story I've ever read on this site; all. Want is more. Good job! :ajsmug:

Would you possibly consider making a sequel? :pinkiehappy::raritystarry::rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile::ajsmug::yay:

:eeyup:

This is amazing! I've always been interested in Smarty Pants, and this just got right to my heart.

Thank you for not going to town on my heart here

I was like seven paragraphs in and I was almost in tears(I get emotional easily, and stories about bullying just push my buttons really well), and then the story turns sweet, even if it's still ignoring the actual is-

hold on.

comes home from school from being bullied->talks to mom->makes dolls->gets Cutiemark

...

Plot arc, plot arc, wherefore art thou plot arc? I mean, short story, so proto plot-arc, but I don't see any real... conclusion. She gets her cutiemark, sure, but she has two different coloured eyes, and she already has no friends, so that's not gonna help the bullying problem.

... I dunno, it just doesn't feel like a real story to me. Nothing really happens. The major events are told, not shown, and we don't get the most interesting bits of the process, like Smarty thinking about it, and planning things out.

I don't know, I feel like this is a foundation to build on, and potentially a brilliant one, but not a story in and of itself, because, again, no real EVENTS. We need conflict, or at least a challenge to overcome. Not just, y'know, 'I want to make a doll', 'I made a doll'.

...

well then.

uh... I enjoyed it while reading atleast? Jeeze, that sudden 'what was it about' came from nowhere...

Well now that was very sweet. If you always write this well, I'll have to check out more of your fics. :twilightsmile:

This is great! Um zo glad i found it!

That was so adorable and reminds me of my young years. :pinkiesad2:
I'm only 17 years old but at this moment where the parents realised, their daughter finally got her cutie mark, I saw it like a Father.

Play me

You know, if you've got a child and you see your daughter coming home every day, sobbed in tears and you ... you cannot do something. You cannot do something to cheer her up, because you did that over days, weeks, months or even Years. You think you won't see her little smile ever again. Bullied by the society and pushed into the corner, because her was told she is ugly, poor and can't do something. Think about it, you are in the Corner, you've got two walls what are forming a sharp corner and you have to choose between the right wall, hear to the bullies and you don't do anything and keep yourself down in the hell of Depression, Hurt, Diffidence and Selfhate..... or you spit on that what the people are saying and you choose the left wall. The wall of self-confidence, the Wall of happiness, the Wall of Dreams, the wall of doing that what you truly want to become, the wall of showing these bastards that you can do something. That you can live your Dream, you have the courage to do your thing. And you will be succesfull.
That's why I came into this fandom. This Fandom inspired me to change my life into the good. Because of that I've got my Hobby. Composing Music. And I will have a youtube account to show my work and the people can say "Arrrgh you are disgusting you are making music for a show called My Little Pony. And I will say "Yes" with honor and self confidence. I am proud of myself. Of what I am and what the future will bring.

Storm Butt, Your Story inspired me to write this and I just want to say:"Thank you. Thank you so very very much for this story!!!!"

Awww this was a cute story. I like how she was able to get her cutie mark from it. To me it gives her her own personality separate from that of the one Twilight gave her in the show. One more thing, I came across an image that seems to perfectly portray the scene where she starts putting Twilight together. Was it by any chance a source of inspiration for you?

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Actually that picture was drawn specifically for this story because it was placed in a book in another language (Ukraine I think)

5961747 Oh wow, that makes a lot of sense haha :rainbowlaugh: Do you plan to update the cover image or is the current one to your liking?

5961901 Now that you actually linked one I can use (The other one was this stupid file) I'll change it.

5961967 Ah, glad I could be of help :twilightsmile:

5962221 Shame most of my works of super homosexual stallions probably won't be getting fan art of that high quality let alone be in books, haha.

5962270 Ah yeah that is true. At least they can get read here without much issue correct?

2012 was a different time.

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You can say that again

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