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"You think you know me..."



This story is a sequel to Negotiations

It's been five years since our surrender. Things have gotten better, but we have a long way to go before our home is repaired and our name redeemed. I have spent these five years working nonstop to fix all the mistakes my former teacher left us.

But now I have a chance to make up one of the biggest ones I've ever made.


She betrayed us and sided with humanity. I hated her for her betrayal. Called her a coward. Now I am cowering in front of her house, begging for forgiveness. I have lost so much. I just want to gain one thing back.

Based on The Conversion Bureau series.

Pre-Read by bahatumay, Socks (Also thanks for finding this cover art), and Chaotic Note

Edited by Biker_Dash and wlam ]

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Haven't read it yet but it's got a thumbs up.

Love the first, know this'll be great

..... I'm unsure about the AJ and RD resolution.... I feel like that's more brainwashing then anything.

I knew this story will be on hot so that's why I came here first...
But anyway very good story, keep it up!

Nice. Friendship Carrier on though The ages.

This was good!

Can't remember if Luna died in the first story...I think she did, as well as Cadence. I might have to give that story a reread.

I listened to Snuff, by Slipknot during this.
Choked up, for real.

Well that went better than I expected for twilight. Are we going to see the trial of celestia sometime down the road?

Absolutely beautiful.

Mmm... post war redemption... I like it.

Negotiations was the perfect blend of human cynicism and a harsh truth, with a bittersweet ending that was not guaranteed to bode well with everyone—and I loved that. This story is much gentler, blending the harshness of war, the tearing of bonds and relationships, and what the future holds for those who are forced to accept a harsh truth—as well as those who are unable to do so—and I loved that.

If you continue making more stories in this "universe," I think a lot of us will be quite pleased. :twilightsmile:

An excellent followup to the original story :yay:

Glad for the hockey cameo. NHL domination in the post Pony World Yay!

Was a bit rushed, dialogue felt too diplomatic for a heart-to-heart, overall decent.

So Rarity and Pinkie are dead
Rainbow Dash and Applejack are wanted for war crimes
Fluttershy's living with family self imposed exile
Twilight's trying to pick up the pieces and is trying to her best for a peaceful resolution
Luna and Cadance KIA
Celestia is out of commission, soon be to be killed...

Wow... talk about the End of Equestria

xTSGx #15 · Dec 30th, 2015 · · 14 ·

Even if I wanted to spare them from the death penalty, the U.N. will not.

That's funny, considering...

4. Calls upon all States that still maintain the death penalty:

(a) Progressively to restrict the number of offences for which the death penalty may be imposed;

(b) To establish a moratorium on executions, with a view to completely abolishing the death penalty;

--United Nations Commission on Human Rights, "Resolution Supporting Worldwide Moratorium on Executions"

Reaffirming its resolutions 62/149 of 18 December 2007 and 63/168 of 18 December 2008 on the question of a moratorium on the use of the death penalty, in which the General Assembly called upon States that still maintain the death penalty to establish a moratorium on executions with a view to abolishing it,
3. Calls upon all states:
(d) To establish a moratorium on executions with a view to abolishing the death penalty;

--United Nations General Assembly Resolution 62/149

The death penalty has no place in the 21st century,

--United Nations Secretary General Ban Ki-moon


^How my brain is using it's power to make certain chemicals that induce a peculiar type of emotion which is currently running through my brain as a living, human being.

It's really the little stories that make a universe feel alive. This accomplishes that task perfectly. Nice setup, tension, and resolution in 3.5k words. Nice callout to the Hurricanes. Hopefully in TCB: Negotiations Universe future they're actually good haha :derpytongue2:.

I was not expecting you to write a sequel to Negotiations, and if I had, I would have expected it to be about Twilight confronting Celestia once she woke up, or confronting Applejack and/or Rainbow Dash and try to make them see the truth. Perhaps something for future sequels?

The third story will deal with Celestia, the fourth story will deal with AJ and Rainbow Dash

If you plan on writing another sequel, I personally would be very interested in reading a story about Twilight's encounter with Celestia when she finally wakes up.

That's the third story

A story about how war separates all of us due to our different opinions. You may think that your friend can be by your side forever until one difference in opinion can separate us permanently

I like this. Look forward to the side stories you promised

So i'm guessing that the trial of Celestia is gonna be the third story and i can't wait for the pain she'll receive, though one thing is Twilight or the humanity ambassador gonna be the judge for the trial and i'll bet another story that you do is something like applejack and rainbow dash captured or accept the truth.

6782732 True, but now that Celestia's motivations have been revealed, and a tentative peace has been reached, they should stop and assess the situation. Instead they are still killing blindly, refusing to accept surrender or make peace. They were blinded and manipulated, not brain washed, and now they are making their own choices without Celestia. They are wholly responsible for what happens now and should face the consequences of their actions.

Never read any of the other stories this is based off other then the other one you wrote, but I love it. Have a like.

Once again, you grabbed my attention. I await Celestia's trial and operations to capture or kill Equestrian Freedom Fighters like Rainbow Dash and Applejack. We can start off how Interpol list them as Most Wanted and forces, Human and Pony, are sent to hunt them down.
6782961 True, but what if they make exceptions, especially after the events that occured.

6783085 Well they're so far brainwashed they don't even realize the war is lost to them and that they're terrorists. This feels like an overflanderization of their respective characters and not in a good way. Honestly I want to like and fav this and I liked it's predecessor.... but that one detail just..... irks me. And I know the author has a reason and all and he won't change it but.... it just turns me away from this story.

I loved this sequel! I'm really hoping you do one where Celestia wakes up and is then tried. Oh, that will be a good read. But honestly I'm liking all the stories in this universe you're creating! Keep up the great work!

6783133 Fair enough, we all have our likes and dislikes. I do agree about it seeming out of character, but at the same time, the entire Conversion Bureau seems out of character for the setting, so I can personally see past it.

6783143 Fluttershy wasn't out of character though. Keep that in mind.

There is a reason why Celestia did all this and it will be explored in the third fic. Same with Dash and AJ in the fourth.

6783147 Yeah but Celestia I don't care about. She's sealed her fate. RD and AJ are who I'm mainly irritated and you made it way to vague for me to actually care. I can't bring myself to like it. Sorry.

in all honesty i was not expecting this but still amazing.it was really hart warming

6783145 True, but she was the focus here. Wheras AJ and Rainbow are just spoken about. If we get a story directly about them and their motivations, then discussing how in character they are would matter more. Maybe they are brainwashed, maybe they feel extremely guilty but are too stubborn to back down, maybe the war broke them both and they've lost all morals or have become bloodthirsty monsters. Until we actually see them, you can't really compare how out of character they are and what motivates them.

I am eagerly awaiting the sequel where Celestia awakes and will answer for her crimes! :pinkiecrazy:

6782961 In a case like this they may make an exception but more then likely that will be sentenced to life in prison for crimes against humanity and several other crimes.

I suppose that the next one will be her catching aj and rd
great story by the way

Just read this and the previous one. Nice work.

Question though....what was the original story that started this. I've seen references to a Conversion Bureau and was wondering what story that is.

Just the concept in general is what made me want to do this series.

...I mean, we're in a wildly divergent world where huge sections of the human population got literally annihilated. I'm pretty sure that your real-world information is irrelevant here.

6783233 the conversion bureau was started by a guy named blaze who wrote it as a wish fulfillment fic. It ended up generating so much hate though that he abandoned it. It might have ended their if not for the author named chaytonce ( I believe that's how you spell her name) she took the basic concept and ramped it up to an eleven. Nearly all her stories end with ponies victourious and evil awful humanity transformed. Naturally there was a massive backlash to this kind of story. The first alternative conversion bureau story was "Not Alone" and set the standards for other alternative conversion bureau stories to follow most notably "Other side of the spectrum" by redskin122004, "the Avatar of Albion" by Jed R, setting things right by Kildeez, and more recently the Negotiations universe by Rated Ponystar.

Ow. My feelings

Bravissimo~! I've been waiting for this ever since catching a read of "Negotiations" and this is a sequel that doesn't disappoint! :twilightsmile:

I loved Flutters' characterization. Many forget the central element of kindness is also forgiveness, and her and Twi's reconciliation is heartwarming and feels very authentic to them. Twilight's concern for Spike is also very sweet too. Poor little Spikey too... :fluttercry:

I look very forward to the next stories in this awesomesauce series! Good job! :heart:

this was nice, im glad some more good could come from a horrible situation. those 2 definitely deserve it

Nope, she will not. They will die if the last stand mean anything to you. Read author blog to know what next. Though next sequel will be about questioning Celestia.

6783389 I don't know how I didn't notice that, I clicked on that blog to get to this story

Kinda bit sad though, they only saw the error of their way in their final foolish stand.

Looking forward to more.
Merry Christmas.

Not a chance I believe.

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